“All right… so an evil unicorn has escaped and is out for revenge… Bad news I am certain. But why tell us? What is special about us?”
Luna frowned. “When she got loose… I can only imagine she was pretty mad, I know I was… The first thing she would have done was to go to the castle… to challenge Celestia.”
“Again, why tell us this, why not the holders of the elements?”
“Because the holders of the elements were already there… Celestia had invited them to teach them more about their powers.”
Another powerful silence followed this. Vinyl spoke up.
“So… where exactly are Princess Celestia and the holders of the elements now?”
Luna gulped but dragged out her chart. “When I raised the moon tonight I too got a similar vision that you all had… I also noticed something different with the sky. A bunch of new stars that hadn’t been there before.”
Luna rolled out the chart, not speaking as everyone looked at the familiar cutie marks.
“That cold in your visions? That would be them… calling out.”
This seems like a good story.
Eeyup. Even better would be Vinyl pulling out a camera taking a photo of it like what you'd get at the end of any roller coaster.
Why did that creep into my head? Brain, stahp.
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3708001 thank you, I have tried to make it interesting at least :)
Nice start. I shall continue.
Liked and to be Fav'ed when I catch up on more chapter.
This story is going more and more intriguing. I like how Starvoid just waits for Luna to do her job to torment her and try to track her down. However, I'm starting to see Starvoid as a Mary Sue. There doesn't seem to be any limitations to her power. Oh well, I'm reading this to see how these other six and Luna eventually beat her.
You have my sympathies.
When you were describing how everyone was lined up I think you forgot rarity and derpy, hehe. Oh we'll. I'm sure they were somewhere in that chaotic scene. Fabulous story though~
This was absolutely amazing! I cants wait to read more of your works!
3725423 Thank you so much, glad you liked it
Any special part that you liked better than others? For future reference
It was nice to see Spike having some role in all this. I hope the dissension in the ranks grows. On to the artifact of Generosity.
That is why not a lot of people write Zecora, and those that do tend to suck. You, my dear author, are doing a splendid job.
I feel so bad for Zecora.
Chrysalis is so going to turn on Starvoid. Deal of no deal, she has her pride.
I knew it.
3733854 Yeah poor thing, but I felt like she needed a reason to leave her homeland, and it felt naturalwith all the dangers in the land that she'd lost someone she loved
We are heading towards the final conclusion. Ready. FIGHT!
Done and Fav'ed. This story was so awesome.
this is for the last chapter but I seriously hoped that trixie would be some sort of descendant of luna or something
Missing some ( " )
also: LOLZ
sees the authors note then looks to the author while licking her lips
Dude your doing WAY better than the others I've read. So deal ok?
wants to join hug but dosent want to screw the story
Me:
Saw it coming from 3 chapters ago
Perfect place for a joke and you missed it...
Vinyl: "You bet your sweet flanks!"
Also:
No derpy/rareity? Shame on you!
I loved it....nuzzles author Hug? fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/111/7/d/give_a_hug_a_you_favorite_pony_by_icebrony-d62juc2.png
3764528 NO, NO, BAD CHANGELING, DOWN!
3764658 Yeah that Knock knock is one of my favorite lines in the entire story
3764687 I know, I know, I forgot them, that's all, it wasn't on purpose
3764726 *hugs Applejack*
I hope that instead of imrisoning starvoid they strip her of all her magic. Its actually a crueler punishment for someone like her who relies on it for everything.
No dont hurt them!!!!!!!!!!! I hate it when ponies are hurt needlessly it makes me
Yes rhyming is hard.
but youre doing fantastic so far. Here have a
I want you to make Starvoid BLEED
If...um..thats okay
This story is interesting, though you'd think Starvoid could just send Luna to the starry prison rather than try to find the Elements to lock her into the moon...
Transitions between scenes sometimes seem a little unclear, but I have one thought when it comes down to the issues Luna faces everytime she moves the moon:
Get outta my head! Leave my brain alone!
It's sped up and would be funnier at normal pace, but I think the point still comes across.
3851007 Well for Starvoid to send Luna to the sky she needs to be near Luna, or else she'd be more OP than she allready is on borderline Mary Sue.
I felt it was neccesary to play some rules in to minimize her powers
I am continually impressed with these rhymes, though I have to admit, up to this point I'm interested to see when Starvoid decides to bring the house down.
*Zebras returning* "You will not believe what we have seen, a most frightful scene! Everywhere there were changelings with their queen!"
*Everyone else* "..."
Nice chapter.
The truth will start cutting like a really long and elaborate knife... Though I think a sword for a pony might be a bit unwieldy, but let's see how it works out.
Just one thing to note, then I'll save my comments for the end of the story.
In this story, you spelled "Which" as "Wich" or something to that element. Not sure if that was on purpose or just an error, but yeah.
Well, the fight with Starvoid was definitely more rewarding than Luna's fight with Nightmare Moon. That was... Just too quick.
Much of the journey progressed smoothly, and I'm happy to say that I enjoyed it. My favorite part, quite honestly, was the final battle. Of all the battle scenes, it felt the most rewarding. Oh, and "Knock knock (beech)" was an excellent touch.
3857081 Thank you for your comments and reviews, I am glad you liked it, please share it with your friends :)
don't you hate it when plans start blowing up in your face and when sh** starts to hit the fan lol
the truth can cut as deep as any dagger but with a sword of truth you better be worried
HUZZAH HUZZAH HUZZAH
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