God has blessed the world with three things: Pizza, Internet, and Ponies. It has been scientifically proven that, without these things, life would cease to exists, for sure.
Silver Melodies is a normal mare. She lives a normal life, and has friends, like any normal pony. But those in Ponyville would say otherwise. She wasn't prepared for their reaction to a simple rumor.
There is no weapon more powerful than gossip. It can spread like wildfire, consume our minds and change how we think. We may even find our actions change...
And our very love for others.
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For being thrown together in under an hour, this is really good, actually. Also, consider using horizontal rules [ hr ] , just without the spaces in between the brackets and hr, rather than the underscores/dashes.
They look like this:
As always, another perfect story.
Some of the errors I found:
(EoH is a proper noun.)
(Two here; somepony is one word and there should be an 'a' before witch.)
That's all I could find. :D
Most days, I'm hard-pressed to come up with a sentence or two in an hour.
This is the second story in a week I've seen with a suicidal pony with a rope. I'm guessing the holidays are just as bad for them as they are for us.
Upvoted mainly for emotional reasons.
Fixed the problems you saw. Thanks for the constructive criticism.
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But using other stuff instead of that as page breaks makes it easier to see. I prefer people using stuff like dashes or underscores, even stars.
I liked this story. Reading the arrest warrent part made me think: first of all, it is stupid that people would do that over rumors. And second, I would have thought she would run away instead of living though this.
Three words: Salem Witch Trials. A sad period in time, for sure.
And she doesn't have anywhere to go. I guess I should have put that in the story. She doesn't have anywhere else to run to, so she'd be living on the streets. She also doesn't know if word got to other cities that she was wanted. She'd rather die a fast death by execution, or hanging, than a slow death by freezing or starving. Sort of a sentimental thing. And there was always the hope she could have made it through this.
After all, the world is a cruel place.
This story was genuinely amazing. I can really feel the emotions of Silver Melodies pouring out from just these words. It has a great lesson, and a heartfelt way of explaining the pains of rumors and bullying. Again, amazing story. Perfect.
Off topic, but I recently wrote an analytical reveiw on a story called Sail of the Vampire. Check both of them out as the story is great and I would like to know if I'm any good at analyzing.
DEM FEELS!
