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  • T Regarding The Need for Sex Education

    Ponies these days are nuzzling younger than ever. Talk to your foals about the dangers of unprotected tummy rubs.
    7,604 words · 19,241 views  ·  1,508  ·  42
  • T Siren Song

    Bioshock meets MLP in this psychological thriller, where Celestia's new faithful student, Siren Song, must discover the truth behind the city beneath the waves. Arriving in pursuit of Twilight, Siren finds herself trapped in a city of horrors.
    197,562 words · 7,653 views  ·  476  ·  12
  • T The Arbitrage of Moments

    When you have so little, and another has so much, it’s easy to justify theft. The more precious the commodity, the easier it is to tell yourself you need it more than they do. And what is more precious than time?
    12,168 words · 2,238 views  ·  273  ·  10
  • E A Series of Events

    Once upon a time, there was a pony. Her name was Celestia, and her purpose was to bring harmony into the world. Starting with grass.
    3,330 words · 787 views  ·  53  ·  0
  • T Daring Do

    Bioshock meets MLP in this psychological thriller, where Celestia's new faithful student, Siren Song, must discover the truth behind the city beneath the waves. Arriving in pursuit of Twilight, Siren finds herself trapped in a city of horrors.
    128,322 words · 1,267 views  ·  210  ·  9
  • E Twilight Sparkle vs Social Inequality

    When Twilight is accused of nepotism, her friends rush to her defense! Sortof.
    3,607 words · 3,947 views  ·  562  ·  53
  • T Princess Pile Drinking Games

    A collection of amusing scenes from stories I never finished.
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  • T The Quest for Celestia's Raiment

    Nine hundred years before the return of Nightmare Moon, five pony heroes struggle to win fortune and glory in the eyes of their princess.
    64,805 words · 1,278 views  ·  46  ·  4

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    Princess Pile Drinking Game

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  • 3w, 6d
    Guys It's a Parody

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  • 4w, 1d
    Pony Gonna Pone

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  • 8w, 5d
    Daring Do on Hiatus

    Ding goes the shadow beside the bed. It's a generic sort of sound—thrown together by an electrical engineer with better things to do. It's been thirty good years since 8-bit sounds and piezoelectric speakers were cutting edge, and still those sounds are the standard. Dings. Buzzes. Tones. Once they were a practical necessity, but now they're nothing more than a relic of the past. Thirty years and nobody's ever bothered to change the standard. Humans are like that. We forget why things are the way they are. We accept the status quo, and cling to it long after its lost its relevance.

    Ding goes the shadow again. I can't tell what device it is from here. The sound is generic, so that means it's something I haven't changed the defaults for. I keep all my devices on a theme. The phone is Columbia, with the Songbird Call for its ringtone, and the vending machine clink for texts and alerts. The tablet is MLP, with a very sassy Twilight Sparkle as the background, and a few snippets from the music for alerts. The music is edited so it's not recognizable of course—I have a reputation to uphold. The laptop is well... off. And it doesn't ding in any case.

    Ding. Just like that. Fine. So it's one of the two. Probably an app. Maybe WhatsApp or... Google Messenger? I don't know. Is the Google sound different? Maybe if I ignore it it'll go away.

    Ding. Answers the universe. Marking another datapoint against my theory. Ding. Ding. Ding. Okay God, thank you. I got the point. You can shut up now.

    The sounds continue as I stumble out of bed, staggering across the room for the light switch. I still haven't put away the air mattress, and it hits my foot in the darkness, flying weightlessly across the floor. I don't see it, but I can see the motion, and hear as it hits the desk. Finally, my hands find the switch, and the lights come on. I squint into the sudden glare, covering my right eye with one hand as I adjust.

    Christ, this room looked better in the dark. How long has it been since I cleaned?

    Another alert sound reminds me why I got up, and I make my way to the end table, pushing the air mattress aside with a foot. It's covered in crap: washclothes for my eyes, spare alarm clocks, tangled cables, loose paper, empty glasses, and no less than four water-bottles. I can't walk into a tech event without having one of those things shoved into my hands, but I don't mind so much at this point. The Google one is nice. Real brushed aluminum instead of cheap plastic.

    Anyway, it's the phone. I pick it up and flip open the cover. My thumb types in the password. It's WhatsApp. Kumar, on the project team group. The message are flying fast now, but I manage to get the gist. We had a deliverable due tomorrow morning—or have a deliverable due in six hours. Of course, that arrogant little shit forget about it again. We really shouldn't have elected him group leader. But what was the alternative. Me? Hah. I'm not that much of a glutton for punishment.

    Anyway, scrolling up, it doesn't look like it's so bad. Just a status report.

    "Alright," I say, holding down the voice recognition button. Samsung, right? I've heard Siri is good, but, whatever. "I'll draft something up and send it around for approval." The little logo swirls for a moment, and then letters start to appear. It gets a few words wrong, "and sedentary around," but it's close enough so I send it without correcting. "ETA, 5 minutes," I add, and send again.

    The laptop is on the desk, so I yank it open and hit the power button. While it boots, I step over to the window, edging behind the bed so I can reach the cord. I prefer the window open when I'm awake—the little room is too claustrophobic without it—so I give the cord a good yank.

    And the lights of New York shine in.


    I'm sorry everyone, but Daring Do is on Haitus for the next few months. Business school has simply turned out to be way, way more effort than I thought. I shall resume it as soon as possible.

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  • 15w, 2d
    One Man's Pony Ramblings Reviews: GaP Jaxie

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When Twilight receives one of the original journals of Starswirl the Bearded from Princess Luna, she can't wait to try the spells inside it, but the book's magic turns out to be a bit more than Twilight can handle, as her reckless experimentation leads to her accidentally bringing her reflection to life. At first, Twilight decides she quite likes the idea of having a copy around the library. But seeing herself from an outside perspective makes Twilight realize there are some parts of her personality she doesn't care for, forcing her to confront her issues.

Written in the same format as the show, save that it is longer and addresses somewhat sadder themes. No objectionable content or OC characters, focuses heavily on the mane cast.

Special thanks goes out to Pascoite and PavFeira, the two editors who somehow managed to withstand my childish scribbling long enough to make them readable. Couldn't have done it without you!

First Published
12th Mar 2012
Last Modified
19th Jul 2014
#1 · 141w, 10h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

the image its from fox in the shadow?

#2 · 141w, 9h ago · 5 · · Chapter 1 ·


From Ponibooru! I don't have a source beyond that, sorry. It's really hard to find Twilight-Clone pictures that don't have her and the know. :twilightblush:

#3 · 141w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Woo Twi²! I assume you're not going to ship it, but I still love her personality dynamics outside of... well, you know what I mean.

For all your shipping clone needs, (And potential future inspiration if you get stuck, God knows I do)

Also, love your writing style. Excited for more :)

#4 · 141w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

It's from a tumblr blog friendlytwilight

#5 · 141w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

holy shit you mixed up coat with skin!

prepare for the butthurt:trollestia:

either way great story *track*

#6 · 141w, 7h ago · 3 · · Chapter 1 ·

+1 internets for the Fermat allusion

#7 · 141w, 2h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Totally gonna track this, sadly I'm not able to read it now... Let's see if I remind to read it as soon as I get home :derpyderp2:

#8 · 140w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Reading books together?

Also, you've got a couple references to hands in here that should probably be hooves instead.

#9 · 140w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

in tubler appears to be three that i know of

#10 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


I'm sure I don't know what you're talking about! :scootangel:

#11 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


I'm sure I don't know what you're talking about! :scootangel:


:twilightblush: Hee. Hee. Nope! I uh...I don't see any. Come back in two minutes.

#12 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>319152 blarg i cant find where it was but you said something like 'blue skin' at the spa, but they are horses so they have coats. i was more or less pointing it out but oh well:twilightsmile:

#13 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Well, that can't be right! Because I don't see it now and there's certainly no chance I went back and edited it out later! :scootangel:

#14 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>322392 Fucking derp.I was reading other stuff really late at night, so i was really tired and thought it was this. Shit sorry about that. :facehoof:

#15 · 140w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

A little spelling mistake. It's 'pegasi' not 'pegasai'. :pinkiehappy: Other than that, great story! I can't wait for more! :yay: Oh! And poor Fluttershy!

#16 · 140w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

"I hurt Twilight! I lashed out in anger! I think I might look good in leather! I am a bad pony!”

I loled. A lot. Same with "make a friend", but with more pun groaning the second I got it :D

#17 · 140w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This is great.  I'm really looking forward to more of it!

#18 · 140w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This was a brilliant chapter. Two Twilights are really great. I enjoy this story and the style of writing. I look forward to the next tantalizing chapter :heart:

#19 · 140w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

moar plz! :twilightblush:

Kthnxbai!  :pinkiehappy:

but seriously, I wanna see Twilight and Sparkle play of the whole 'Good/Evl' dynamic...I think Twilight'd look sexy in leather, and Sparkle'd knock 'em dead in some spandex tights!  :trollestia::yay::heart:

#20 · 139w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

#21 · 139w, 6d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

Wow. Just this first chapter was so enthralling. The bit with Twilight being mistaken as a vampire was really well-conceived and made sense. Although, I do find Twilight's bad decision making with that spell a little jarring; too stupid for someone like Twilight, imo. And I know a lot of other people do this, but replacing "Ah" for "I" in Applejack's dialogue just bugs the crap out of me. I'll try to read the rest when I get the chance.

#22 · 139w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

The idea of two Twilights didn't sound particularly promising at first. But now I think this is going to be a very interesting relationship. You're just doing so well with the writing and characters. But one thing I don't get: why is mirrored Twilight eager for the spell to be undone? Wouldn't she be afraid what will happen? Didn't she admit that she really wasn't from an alternate mirror dimension? Or did she change her mind when the other ponies warmed up to her?

#23 · 139w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

In this case, the mirror isn't so much "eager" as suffering an identity crisis. In that scene, she was thinking of herself just as "A magical copy" instead of a pony, and of course, summoned things go away when the spell runs out. Now that she's been reminded she's not just a knockoff, but her own pony, she'll be better.

#24 · 139w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Ah, okay, makes sense. Thanks for clearing that up.

#25 · 136w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This is very interesting. Looking forward to more.

#26 · 135w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Shouldn't Twilight want to be her own pony in some way, rather than just being Twilight Sparkle 2. Other than that it is a very facinating story and concept.

#27 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Just letting everyone know -- I am not dead, and will be continuing my story. Life has just taken an unexpected turn.

Save your sympathy though, this is an awesome turn, it just devours all my free time like Parasprites on apples. :twilightsmile:

#28 · 133w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

"-Of this, I have found a remarkable demonstration which this margin is too narrow to contain."


I see what you did there :twilightsmile:

#29 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Hey there everypony! Shorter update this time, getting back into the swing of things. Do enjoy! :moustache:

#30 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

“Now common. We have organizing to do!


          Fix me!

Was this deliberate?  


Applejack would have de-scribed  it


Also double space here.              

Now that I've actually read the whole chapter...

I'm not sure if I like the socially awkward note you ended on. Not that it isnt good, it just looks sorta... painful. Sorta like this: :twilightoops: But not really. *looks at story picture* OH! RIGHT! Thats where this is going.

Anyway, that aside, good story. I like where you are going with this idea, and I like this idea to begin with. I cant wait for moar.

#31 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·


#32 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Aaaaaaaaaw.  :applecry:

Did anyone else think of the song "Try to see it My Way" while reading this?

#33 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Yay, this story may be the randomest thing that ever did random, but I did enjoy the first two chapters.

By the way, in the line "When Twilights only response was to groan and roll over" it should be "Twilight's". It was slightly confusing because in this story there really is a possibility of Twilights as well as Twilight's!

#34 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

LOL akwardness

2x the adorkableness

2x the long and roundabout reasonings

2x the fun

Luna must be very happy

#35 · 128w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Glad you finally updated. I was worried this story was dead. And, yeah, this was a good chapter. But lots of technical errors that need to be fixed up.

#36 · 128w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

With Celestia as my witness, one day, I will write a ponyfic where the first comment is not pointing out editing errors! :facehoof:

Working on correcting these ASAP.

#37 · 128w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

One proofreading by someone who isn't dyslexic later...hopefully that should address the grammatical problems. Don't know what I'd do without spellcheck.

Die, probably.

#38 · 128w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Haha! The awkward has been doubled!

#39 · 128w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·


Well, if it makes you feel better, I only point out errors I see in stories I actually like. I wouldn't bother otherwise.

#40 · 127w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Tempting as it is to think of the EQD proofreaders as the devil, I must remember that it is their job to pick out every single little flaw in your story. They don't enjoy crushing your hopes and dreams. :applejackunsure:

For those of you who have been kind enough to point out my grammatical mistakes, thank you! The story is getting a very through edit as we speak, and future chapters will get a better review by a proper English major.

#41 · 127w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Huzzah! The grammar has been doubled!

#42 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Spelling and grammar looks fine to me! :twilightsmile:

And great story too, liking the lack of shipping so far :raritywink:

#43 · 126w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

How often do you update this story?

#44 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Expect the next update in about a week!

#45 · 124w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

It has been A WEEK :pinkiehappy:

#46 · 124w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

This could almost be an actual episode, it is adorable! :twilightsmile::twilight smile:

Can't wait for more!

#47 · 124w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Ha ha ha @ Ilikepie.

I know! When the week limit came up I was thinking: "Crud, someone is going to notice I'm late, I just know it-". Thanks for commenting though, always nice to know my writing is appreciated!

Yet another round of grammatical revisions (I will Love and Tolerate Equestria Daily's proofreaders!) held me up, but I am making progress. I'm going to take the 4th of July to write, so expect something soon!

#48 · 124w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Chapter 4 is off to the editors!

#49 · 124w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

And, there! Wow this one was a long time in coming.

#50 · 124w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Ha! "spiked" her drink. I get it. :rainbowlaugh::moustache:

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