With help from Sorin, Spitfire finds time to relax after a long hard few weeks
Hey! My Pony name is StarshineSpectrum. But you can call me Starry :) I hope to get to read lots and lots of stories!! ALSO If you would love to have your story read on YT ask me!!
With help from Sorin, Spitfire finds time to relax after a long hard few weeks
I hope you don't mind a little constructive criticism. I noticed a lot of run on sentences, as well as many places where commas were needed and a few misspellings. There was another part where two words were combined, somewhat, but I got what you meant:
should be:
Or something like that. Semicolons might be better there. It's more your preference, really.
eh... Im sorta sucking when it comes to writing. see, my school Never taught us spelling and writeing also..my english isent that great. So thank you so much for the help