The invasion on Canterlot has failed. Princess Celestia is unhurt, Shining Armor and Cadence have been married, and Equestria has been saved. Everypony rejoices in these facts, except for one: the Element of Kindness Bearer.
Not only does the invasion help bring to light Fluttershy's flaws to herself, but it also puts much darker and sullen thoughts into her head. Can she see past that and find the good within herself, or must she live forever with the knowledge of the burden of her timidness?
Written as an entry for 80+ Members Contest in The Fluttershy Fan Club.
Cover Art by LaurenMagpie on DeviantART.
Chapters (1)
Just wanna get this out of the way so I can get to what I want to say.
Might want to add that at to the story, but besides that, no other noticeable things during my first read.
Story wise, I really enjoyed it. It didn't settle too well with me how she falls into self pity the way she did, but the ending was a definite comeback. In reality, she always seemed like the kind to bottle up her emotions to dangerous levels, so it isn't unbelievable that this could happen. All being said and done, it wasn't boring, and it definitely got the point across, to me at least. 8/10, simply because of the self pity. Even if it was believable, the fact that it took a week for her friends to notice and she stayed like that for that long just doesn't feel right. Don't take this wrong, as it is my opinion, and to others it could be enjoyable. You are a good writer, and that is definitely a fact. Just keep on writing what you enjoy.
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Thanks for the insight, I greatly appreciate it.
That was...... Oh my.... I'm voting for this. This..... This is beautiful.
What's a hand?