The Real Prince Blueblood

by PegaSisterPrincessLily

The Prince Is A Fake?!?!

Twilight was trodding down the halls of the castle towards the library, when Princess Cadence tackled her.
"Wahh!" Twilight yelled in surprise crumpling to the floor

"Twilight!" Cadence yelled getting of her friend

"Cadence!" Twilight smiled

"Sunshine, sunshine, ladybugs awake, clap your hooves and do a little shake!" The both chanted doing their little dance.

"I haven't seen you in forever it seems!" Cadence smiled

"I know!" Twilight grinned so hard her muzzle hurt

"Oh, Princess Celestia wants you." Cadence said

"Ok! Shall we be off your highness?" Twilight questioned joking

"We shall your majesty." Cadence said returning the humor

Together they were off galloping down the halls of the castle to the throne room chatting their hooves off.

"Your majesty" Cadence and Twilight said bowing

"You may rise." Celestia said smiling

"Why did you summon us?" Twilight inquired

"We are having an important guest." Celestia answered

"Who is it?" Cadence also asked

"The High Doctor of Canterlot Castle Commons." Celestia said with all seriousness

"Wow big title" Cadence mumble to Twilight making her giggle.

"I expect you to welcome him and mind your manners. Including not giggling at his title." Celestia smiled teasing the two Princess. Cadence and Twilight couldn't contain their laughter anymore. Celestia, Cadence, and Twilight all burst into nays of laughter.

"Enough fun for now. Go get ready to welcome the doctor." Celestia said calming herself

"Ok, goodbye your highness." Both girls said respectively

After getting ready, they welcomed the doctor and he was a stiff 40 year old colt with jet black hair. They showed the doctor to his room and left him in peace. Near Twilight's room they started talking again.

"I can't believe it! He was so rude and has no sense of humor!" Cadence was mad

"You think he would be polite and would be forgiving." Twilight said embaressed and enraged
During their welcome, Twilight's wings accidentally popped up and hit the doctor in the muzzle. After that, he lectured them on how true Princesses should be able to control her wings or she can't control a kingdom.
"Goodnight." Twilight said going in her room

"Goodnight Twilight and don't let what he said get you." Cadence said troding to her room.

Spike was already asleep when Twilight came in. Trying not to wake him she plopped into bed. That night Twilight didn't sleep well. She kept having nightmares about her getting her own kingdom and the whole kingdom burning down the first day. Twilight woke up with a start and saw it was only 3am.
"That is it! I am going to the library to find out about wing control and Princess's duties." Twilight thought climbing out of bed

Tip hoofing down the hall she heard something and galloped swiftly but softly behind a curtain. Twilight heard the doctor's voice and Prince Blueblood!
"I found the records of your birth your highness and found something amazing!" the doctor whispered

"What?" the Prince said pompusly

"You were switched at birth.You are not the real Prince of Equestria" the doctor said

"If you are joking it is so not funny!" Fake Prince Blueblood said angrily but still quiet

"I am not joking. The real Prince was kidnapped and replaced by you in secret at the hospital." the doctor said with as seriousness

"Thank you doctor you may leave now." the "Prince" said trying to contain his anger

When Twilight thought they were gone she trotted out knocking over a vase.

"Oh no!" Twilight thought as she heard a voice say

"Stop!" .
Freaking out she ran. All of a sudden a 2 pairs of hooves knocked her to the ground and jumped on top of her!

"Flash Sentry?" Twilight said blushing

"Your highness!" Flash said jumping off and bowing, "I am asorry for my rudeness. I thought you were an intruder."

"It is my fault. I thought you were oh never mind." Twilight said blushing harder

"Well be careful and go back to your room until morning." Flash advised

"Ok." Twilight said trotting/strutting to her room
Half way to her room she remembered about the Prince! She started back down the hall to talk to Princess Luna who is always awake at this time. When she got to Princess Luna's room, she knocked on the door. No one answered. She knocked again still no answer.
"What are you doing up at this hour Twilight Sparkle?" a voice from behind her asked jumping straight in the air she saw who it was

"Princess Luna! You scared my hooves off!" Twilight said in surprise

"As far as I see..." Princess Luna looked down at Twilight joking,"Your hooves are still attached."

"Yah they are but I need to talk to you privately." Twilight said back on subject

"Well go on in." Luna said opening the door

After telling Princess Luna what happened, Twilight calmed down.

"Do you have any proof?" Luna asked very serious

"No, but!" Twilight said

"Than there is nothing we can do. You better go sleep. You cannot stay up this late." Princess Luna warned

"Yes your highness." Twilight grumbled heading off to bed feeling exhausted

"Oh and Twilight." Princess Lina called out softly,"I will mention this to my sister in the morning."

Twilight went to bed and fell asleep. Little did she know a spy of the prince heard every single word said.

Comments

[GemstoneTheUnicorn]

I don't know why but I really want to read this story! *Adds to read later*

[BlueBlitz15]

I enjoy this very much. More please?

[PegaSisterPrincessLily]

Thanks!

[sarkodine]

Just from the description I'm getting a very "Man in the Iron Mask" feel here...

[GemstoneTheUnicorn]

I read this and I have to say I'm impressed. It's a good story and I'd love to see more! Love that you included Flash.

[PegaSisterPrincessLily]

Hey if you like this go to my brother dukesofhazzardftw stories they are awesome!

[The Great Derpsby]

Alright, there's a few things I'd like to note:

There's some spelling, word, and punctuation issues, like this:

"You think he would be polite and would be forgiving." Twilight said embar[r]essed and enraged [."]

More editing might help here. You probably did edit, and I know it's a pain, plus one often overlooks a few mistakes even with additional editing, yet it's helpful overall in reining in the worst of it!

And you need to slow down! Things are happening incredibly fast, with little chance for us to take them in properly. As of now, the story is very script-like, which is difficult to read for your audience. It's a good idea to give more information about how characters feel, what they see, what they hear. In essence 'Show, don't tell'. Dialogue is fun to write, I know that—but giving the reader more insight into what's in your head is very rewarding, and they'll thank you for it!

Take the exchange between Flash Sentry and Twilight. Twilight had been so frightened and then so flustered that she forgot about the bombshell she'd just heard before. Explore those things! Flash Sentry was just on top of her, so maybe describe Twilight trying to fight her blush and calm herself down with slow breathing. Then ,while walking off, she wonders why Flash Sentry and she keep running into each other, have her scold herself for looking like a fool in front of him, just because she thought he was Blueblood... and then boom! She remembers why she'd been scared it was Blueblood who tackled her.

Just some suggestions. Most importantly, don't ever get discouraged!

Cheers!

[PegaSisterPrincessLily]

Thanks for the tips and I didn't have an editor for the first chapter, but I will for the second thanks.

[TheNomad]

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and I loved it