Well color me intrigued...

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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

It's funny you should mention the kill scenes actually, as I was already trying to prolong those when I was writing. Clearly I didn't do so good of a job.

As for editing I wouldn't mind having someone reading over the chapter updates. If you have the time that is.

more like Sweetie HELL amirite

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It is a little bit of a darker world (Just incase the pony pedophiles didn't tip you off.) Thus the alternate universe tag.

wow, this is awesome!

Sweetiebell Fuck Yeah!!!

I Love this! Like and fave.

3477329 I've got time. ( also I like editing for stories I'm interested in)

Sweet Jesus and apple pie, what's way to die!
Any who, I'm not so sure she' justified killing them, but whatever, keep on posting for that sweetie bell nightmare fuel

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Oh and please do continue questioning her morality. That's the kind of reaction I love to get out of my characters. There's no true right and no true wrong, just what the character sees and how they react.

3489598>>3489458 I think that depends on where they planned on stopping. If they only took pictures then probably not but if they planned on raping then yeah they deserved it.
Thats my not so humble opinion

Oh...my...dayum! I love this! :D

I just cant help but smile though out this

Can I please have a picture of what you think Sweetie Belle's true, demon, from should look like?

Demon I'm liking this idea.

Good thing she stopped all those ponies from all that brutal murder and cannibalism they were doing.

It's not like their only crime was making a good number of foals feel uncomfortable, and possibly have self esteem issues.

Rapists are such an easy mode bad guy.

Still, it's not poorly written. Seems a bit mouthpiecey:

My eyes have a sadistic grin in them. “I sir, am the devil! And your first taste of hell starts here!”

just doesn't scream "Sweetie Belle" to me. Which is half the trick to these fics, making a totally sadistic monster that everyone has to read in Sweetie Belle's voice.

Makes me want to be sweetie Belle now. Got to love her traps and gore.

great googley moogley, batman! that's one screwed up little girl!

I lost track of how many times I cheered for sweetie belle in this chapter.

Oh man, the entire build up was great! The killing seemed a tad fast, but only by a little bit. Would have been nice if the gore was highlighted a bit more, like describing the tendens being severed from the bone before the bone snaps, finally separating the leg from his body in less than a second of pressure from Sweetie's powerful jaws. I could have actually explained it more, but this phone keyboard sucks...

I think our world needs a few beings like this sweete bell. who else is going to be a mass murderer of rapes and child melesters?

WHAT THE FUCKING HELL DID I JUST READ

To rectify that last comment, WHAT IN THE NINE HELLS DID I JUST FUCKING READ

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You've seen nothing yet.

By the many gods this is beautiful. For a while I thought it was a little over done, but the flow of things made it balance out.

That was cathartic. Thank you.

Well, evidently Sweetie Bell is now Deirdre from the Dresden Files, just with more morals.

H-H-Holy Christ... that was weirdly refreshing to read after my day's work.

Damn...

Sweetie has absolutely no chill. Like, whatsoever.

Looking around the room I'm in, I'm surprised to find it in much better condition than the rest of the house. The walls are fully intact, the floor is moderately clean, and the whole place has been decorated with high-class furniture and a massive king sized bed. Next to which I spy an end table with a large silver bowl, full to the brim with sugary treats. I'm surprised to see that it's actually here. I can't help but chuckle. The stallions have used bait for a trout, but have yet to realize they've caught a shark.

More like they tried to catch a fish and caught a kraken.

he only reason your still breathing even now

you're

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Same here...I don't know why, but this satisfied me...a lot. Possibly because the the ponies she killed were pedophiles...oh what am I saying? Of course that was the reason!!!

You know, I've never thought of Sweetie Belle like this. Sure, sometimes she's a robot or Rarity is a changeling, but this is the first demon Sweetie I've seen and so far it's well done. Good Job