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Capitalization man! Spell check, spell check, spell check and look things over. Again and again!
>> KiltedKey thanks for telling me
how strong is Alex mercer right now?
plus the whole "magic" is the only small advantage the ponies have.
the only one actually able to beat Alex is discord
my prediction ALEX FTW
>>glue_maker Alex Mercer is much stronger than the mane six the princesses, and the wonderbolts as for discord going to sit this fight out for now. also he will have few more abilities while in equestria
Seemed rushed, but I do like a Alex in equestria story.
I-I stopped reading at the first like, three words. You really need an editor or prereader.
I like the concept of this story, however you seriously need to spell check.
So many errors
Mother of god there is no punctuation at all. Still a good story though.
You need to put quotation marks around what people say.
This is a broken record by now.
Get a proofreader, and for Equestrias sake! Update the description!
"The story takes place when alex mercer arrive in a world full anthropomorphic ponies" That that is not needed, you used the astro tag and the story has prototype in the name.
Wow
Much improvement
Such first
Wow
3534824 You're not getting veiws because this has no groups
Luckily...
I have one..
this is rushed but i am not going to be a douch cause i think this is you're first so you are forgiven
STOP HAMMER FIST TIME!!!!!!!!!!
KEEP GOING! THIS HAS POTENTIAL!!!
3537764 I have to agree with you, on the errors.
I hope there is someone to help "Editing" this, since it is less hen enjoyable to read in the current state.
Note that I sent a message to suggest a few things, based on the Summary.
Ps: It is the best way of starting up a possitive trend, demonstrating how I like to be treated. Showing how to be a nice Pony by suggesting the changes.
Now I can only hope my comment and suggestions are taken in the Spirit they were given.
HEY WHAT GETING?
WHY IS THIS CHAPTER IS HAFT DOME?
I highly doubt it was really by surprise. Super senses. And how the hell did they cut him? One, wings aren't sharp, would have to be wearing a blade of some sort, and two, even if they were that would break along with their wings when applied against Alex.
Her legs should be broken.
And why is Alex just letting them attack?
Or he could jump. Or throw things.
No, she ded. Ground is harder than head.
Her reflexes aren't that good.
What is with the terrible grammar? Why do I see this every where I go concerning a writing site?
3950708 HE NEED EDITOR AND HELPER, BUT OTHER WISE GOOD STORY, NOWA HAMMER TIME!!!!!!!!
Hmm, this has great potential, how you depict the fight is wonderful, it is entertaining, a little friendly advice would be to use something called Grammarly, it helped me a lot when I was starting out as a writer, it will help you improve on your writing skills, don’t take any offense, your writing skills are not bad at all, but the more you write, the better your skills will become. That’s all and I hope you continue this.
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Okay, I will and thank you for the advice and words of encouragement. I appreciate it.