The week after their first encounter still included many a trip to the emergency room. Having both Pinkie and Rarity make love to her proved too much for Fluttershy and she passed out. Repeatedly.
Oh gods of writing and all that is wonderful in the world! Sir, you made me cry from the sheer beauty of this, especially the part when Fluttershy let herself be loved. I know I don't comment often, but I really love you and your works.
That was so touching... But you know what would be even better? A scene in the next chapter where Fluttershy is laying on her back (or stomach, with her face buried in the pillow) and has Rarity and Pinkie Pie licking the sensitive spots of both her wings at once. It would be perfect as the 'final act' to consummate Fluttershy's inclusion into the romance.
Methinks dearest Fluttershy could die happily right now. I gotta say, it's kinda weird reading clop coming from you. Not bad, just weird. Just... keep doing what you're doing. Take care, man.
“No fair, no fair! I want in on kissing duty!” Pinkie said, scrambling over to the two of them and planting herself next to Fluttershy. “Okay, go!”
“Can I just—” Fluttershy’s head was turned by Pinkie’s hooves, and she quickly found out that Pinkie had been snacking on some of the sandwiches while she made tea.
Quite happy with how this sequel has turned out. I will admit to being a bit sad at how seemingly quick the courting period with Flutters was, expected more antics. I suppose she can still be awkwardish, but not as easy once you've participated in the most awkward of acts in a relationship. Still, happy to see this isn't complete yet, and looking forward to what else you have in store for this trio. Slightly curious if anything happens with Twilight, or if she becomes the single mare of the group. Not a bad thing, just noticed that now she's the only one not involved with somepony.
4698387 What kind? What kinds, is more like it! After all, what sort of Evil Poly Dark Side cookies would they be, if you could only choose one favorite?
At any rate - the story's not over yet, so I'm sure we're going to get more courtship out of the way in the future. After all, Twi still needs somepony!
Unfortunately they forgot the doctors were monitoring Fluttershy's heartbeat and when they remembered it too late, when the nurses came rushing in and saw them.
And now I shall never think of smores the same way again. Chocolate covered Rarity/marshmallow on a square of Flutter.....sorry, what was I saying? And why am I hungry?
That was cute So being is not marked complete this will defiantly be interesting to see how things play out till the wedding I WANT MOAR SOON! If that is alright with you
4928239 Do you wanna be our marefriend? Come on let's go and play We barely see you anymore Come out the door. Please don't go away— We used to be the best of friends Then it all changed I wish you had told me why!— Do you wanna be our marefriend? We don't have to call it marefriend....
Well, again, she wasn't trying to exclude Shy, she was confiding in a friend.
I can understand talking about Pinkie a lot (after all, the relationship is a huge part of her life), but the endless prying just seemed flat out insensitive, and almost utterly uncharacteristic of Rarity. But at the same time, it kind of makes sense; she's completely blinded by the rush of a new romance, after all.
Yes, that would be very hard for her to do. Although as much as she could, she did say essentially that. What she said amounted to "Leave it alone, please."
Perhaps. We've seen Fluttershy put her foot down before, though. "No means no," and all that jazz. If Fluttershy really impressed upon Rarity that she was being made extremely uncomfortable and that their friendship was at risk for it, Rarity would have had to be a complete dunce at social etiquette to continue.
Oh, and to clarify, I'm not accusing you of bad writing or anything. You wrote the scene fine and it makes sense. It's just kinda like that feeling you get when you see two friends doing very dumb things to each other and you can't help but rant about it. xD
The week after their first encounter still included many a trip to the emergency room. Having both Pinkie and Rarity make love to her proved too much for Fluttershy and she passed out. Repeatedly.
That is all, carry on.
wow, this here chapter was hot,cute and touching.
your talent......it boggles my mind.
keep being awesome.
Is this a figure of speech, or did you mean full?
4693125 I went through that three times trying to find stupid things I missed... fixed now.
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Commence read.
Alright that was caught.
Glad to see Fluttershy embracing things.
Great chapter!
Those last lines were hilarious!
That was adorable and sexy! Quite the winning combination!
that was awesome hehe !
4692866 except for the one time when they did it in the emergency room while no one was around ?
Awww That's cute. But poor old Flutters is going to be SORE if Rarity doesn't pull hard enough on Pinkie's reins
Must... resist... temptation... to turn... my OTP into... an OT3!!!!
This is my favourite chapter so far out of this story!!! Huzzah!
I continue to enjoy your characterization of Fluttershy in this fic. The RariShy towards the end was particularly touching.
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Obviously.
Oh gods of writing and all that is wonderful in the world! Sir, you made me cry from the sheer beauty of this, especially the part when Fluttershy let herself be loved. I know I don't comment often, but I really love you and your works.
<3
That was so touching... But you know what would be even better? A scene in the next chapter where Fluttershy is laying on her back (or stomach, with her face buried in the pillow) and has Rarity and Pinkie Pie licking the sensitive spots of both her wings at once. It would be perfect as the 'final act' to consummate Fluttershy's inclusion into the romance.
Methinks dearest Fluttershy could die happily right now. I gotta say, it's kinda weird reading clop coming from you. Not bad, just weird. Just... keep doing what you're doing. Take care, man.
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Yes, yes! Come, join us in the Poly Dark Side!
We have cookies!
This bit made me laugh way too much.
I felt all warm and happy and cried a little myself at the end there. This story has made me feel good emotions thanks...
Awesome sauce, so finally decided to chill out on worryin for now n' start enjoyin this whole relationship idea with . Heh, fun times here they come
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I'm just gonna to leave this here.
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4695362 What kind? o.0
Quite happy with how this sequel has turned out. I will admit to being a bit sad at how seemingly quick the courting period with Flutters was, expected more antics. I suppose she can still be awkwardish, but not as easy once you've participated in the most awkward of acts in a relationship.
Still, happy to see this isn't complete yet, and looking forward to what else you have in store for this trio. Slightly curious if anything happens with Twilight, or if she becomes the single mare of the group. Not a bad thing, just noticed that now she's the only one not involved with somepony.
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FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF-!
Though as a turn of phrase...
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What kind? What kinds, is more like it! After all, what sort of Evil Poly Dark Side cookies would they be, if you could only choose one favorite?
Da Romances! They makes me happy!
4700197 Oh mai y'all have me sold! *joins the dark side*
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Woohoo! *hoofpumps*
New toaster!
At any rate - the story's not over yet, so I'm sure we're going to get more courtship out of the way in the future. After all, Twi still needs somepony!
oh this is getting fun i wish to read more soon XD
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Unfortunately they forgot the doctors were monitoring Fluttershy's heartbeat and when they remembered it too late, when the nurses came rushing in and saw them.
....
And then they came.
4700701 Nah, Twi's doing good. She has a secret threesome with Celestia and Luna every Friday, with the occasional visit from Trixie.
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AND WE STILL DIDN'T GET TO SEE THE CHOCOLATE SYRUP!
4719035 That's because the chocolate syrup comes at the very end of the story.
And now I shall never think of smores the same way again. Chocolate covered Rarity/marshmallow on a square of Flutter.....sorry, what was I saying? And why am I hungry?
That was cute So being is not marked complete this will defiantly be interesting to see how things play out till the wedding I WANT MOAR SOON! If that is alright with you
Are we gonna be able to see the round two in the next chapter? Am I the only one who asked that? I really hope not
This is awesome. Really well written. There was even some romantic music on the radio while I was reading it and that made it even better.
Next chapter's gonna be titled "Let it Begin".
How... fitting.
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Do you wanna be our marefriend?
Come on let's go and play
We barely see you anymore
Come out the door.
Please don't go away—
We used to be the best of friends
Then it all changed
I wish you had told me why!—
Do you wanna be our marefriend?
We don't have to call it marefriend....
Um... Please go...
You left your window open! Hi!
4928239 Not related to the comment really, but if the user name means what I think it does, so much awesome.
Adorable. So happy I finally got to this chapter.
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I can understand talking about Pinkie a lot (after all, the relationship is a huge part of her life), but the endless prying just seemed flat out insensitive, and almost utterly uncharacteristic of Rarity. But at the same time, it kind of makes sense; she's completely blinded by the rush of a new romance, after all.
Perhaps. We've seen Fluttershy put her foot down before, though. "No means no," and all that jazz. If Fluttershy really impressed upon Rarity that she was being made extremely uncomfortable and that their friendship was at risk for it, Rarity would have had to be a complete dunce at social etiquette to continue.
Oh, and to clarify, I'm not accusing you of bad writing or anything. You wrote the scene fine and it makes sense. It's just kinda like that feeling you get when you see two friends doing very dumb things to each other and you can't help but rant about it. xD
5054188 I'm not bothered at all. A sign that I'm doing well is if a reader is invested in the characters and how they interact.
5054239 Your fiction is bad and you should feel bad.
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Fluttershy! Stop standing in the door like a creep and come join us.
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