Pinkie in a hot red dress and 'fuck me' high heel boots? The entire town is going to be chasing after her. Even without a Want it need it spell from Twilight.
Hm, I actually don't know how to feel about this. It just seems to me like it's impossible to make a threesome work as you just wouldn't be able to equally love two beings. One would end up taking priority over the other in a lot of cases. Who knows though, maybe this could actually work out.
Comment posted by Random612 deleted Feb 13th, 2014
I presume then that for you, Sophie's choice is meaningless, since a parent will always prefer one child over the other, right? :-P
I kid, I kid, but still...different people are different. One may be able to be in a relationship with two people and be perfectly happy about it, while another might be consumed by jealousy even in the most benign of environments
Loving this story, a wonderful combination of feels and romantic antics. Kinda hoping Fluttershy remembers to eat and drink something soon, might not be the best for her to be found unconcious by Angel after all of this. Also hoping this does turn into a courting situation for Pinkie and Rarity as it'd be interesting to see what they do, particularly Rarity in this case since she is the romantic of the three and seems to be fumbling a bit with her emotions over everything.
Took Fluttershy a few moments to catch up with the non-dream state, but good that some progress has been made for the better.
Though that train of thought with Fluttershy being undeserving and already packing to leave, leaves space for what may be a search, unless she does wait for Pinkie and Rarity to court her.
I just hope Fluttershy eats something before she ends up in the hospital. She's hungry and probably dehydrated by now after soaking her luggage in tears. You'd think her animals would realize their soul caretaker is needing to be fed as she stumbles about.
But all in all, this was one of the better outcomes for the collision of mares. Fantasizing they would all jump in bed after a round of apologizing is just unrealistic. Besides, it should be quite fun to see how one or both court Fluttershy.
Most of this chapter was good. I liked most of it. Feels and stuff. Much good.
But Pinkie seemed to convince Rarity to change her mind on the whole affair a little too quickly. Which seems odd, considering it takes up a significant portion of a nearly 10k-word chapter. I don't know, it just seems like too far of a jump for a single conversation to go from the state of mind Rarity was in after her chat with Fluttershy to agreeing to try out a three-way relationship with her. Agreeing to help Pinkie convince her not to leave town seems like it would have been a more reasonable first step.
Of course, doing so might have dragged on the pacing, and then we wouldn't have gotten the wonderful, "Did we just get dumped?" line this chapter, so I can't really say it ought to be different. Just that it's something that didn't ring as quite right to me.
3941154 Ha! That was actually an issue at the pre-reading stage, was that Rarity was convinced too quickly to take this route. It was originally an easier decision for Rarity. And as it currently is, Rarity only agreed to go talk to Flutters. It think it was actually seeing her the next day to tipped the scale for Rares. It helps that Rarity is both a hopeless romantic and was very close to Shy to begin with.
That was a fantastic line. I laughed for a good 2 minutes . As i was reading it did seem like a bit of a jump from rarity being pissed to rarity making out, then I thought about it, and reread that section of talk with Pinkie and it made a lot more sense. And then with the comment of lack of sleep from rarity everything fell into place.
The
“Pinkie? Did we just get dumped?”
also made me laugh because it just seemed sooooo Rarity. and the subsequent nah from Pinkie just made it better.
All in all it was a fantastic chapter and i can't wait for more to come!
While reading I realized I was wrong in picturing the sock puppets mouths moving in a way a hand would allow, because hooves wouldn't allow this. Then I remembered it was Pinkie with the puppets and I was entirely justified in picturing them this way.
3944613 Gotta give the little errors a chance, you know! I was going to annihilate all of them, but that one missing word was just so cute! I just couldn't bring myself to correct it.
phew, drama storm has pass for... now as we exit t loony world flutters thought that she was in to now enter what hopefully be a romantic n' not as much drama filled dates to come to this still in t works herd
The dream/delirium gimmick felt like it was abandoned to quickly. I do believe that Rarity and Pinkie's reaction would solidify the notion that it was nothing but a dream even more. I know if I got such reaction I would definitely think it was a dream, even without the previous stigma and delirium.
I was really not looking to forward to the confrontation with Rarity and Fluttershy but even after a few tears here and there, it all turned out alright.
And now, with Pinkie's crazy menage a trois idea, I cannot wait for the next chapter! ^_^
Please don't challenge me without a passable attempt at English. I might be a jackass for asking that, but I literally just strained my eyes trying to make out exactly what you said. Apologies if you took offense.
First off, before you /ever/ come to question me or something I've said, do a little reading. I know, how unreasonable, someone wants you to understand what you're talking about before you come after them.
Maybe it makes me a heartless sociopath, but my best friend kissing my fiance' isn't something that I would consider as grounds for the end of an era, especially not with a friend that I know isn't doing it with the intent of trying to force a breakup between myself and said fiance.
As you can see, I was agreeing with him. Not necessarily (directly) insulting or diagnosing him. Also, as a long-time student of mental health in fields both academic and practical, I can tell you there are many doctors who still don't rightly know what they're doing, but that leads into a rant against what's become of medicine and psychology as a whole, and is utterly off-topic.
In the future, again - read before you say something. Also in the future, don't call me back to an argument that's been done and over with for over a month and a half. It's just plain rude and annoying. If you have any further issues now that I've solved your first one, feel free to PM me. I will still not be necessarily polite, but it will prevent board-clutter on Steel's story.
Boof. Right in the feels. Very interesting, Definitely looking forward to the next installment. Your sock puppet names were awesome, and Dreamershy was posilutely hilarious. The way you have them handle these situations is, for me anyways, really easy to imagine. The scenes unfold effortlessly in my mind, and the dialogue flows in their voices with no real challenge on my part. Very well done.
DAMN IT!!! Fluttershy, deal with it!! Pinkie and Rarity are getting married!! You have no right to be mistress to either one of them, because that shit never works!!!! I'm sorry that you feel that you are gonna feel that you're alone, but DEAL WITH IT!!!
Hell, it bugs me so much that this is basically a "every mare ships with every other mare" story, because it means that there's no Spike to ship with, but that's not the story.
Love triangles should stay in the novels, not in real life. Because regardless of what somepony claims that they will love two ponies the same, I call bullshit. You cannot!!! And the reason is because we are human, there's gonna be jealousy, envy, greed, anger, what-have-you. To truly love somepony is to give it all to that one pony at 100%. You cannot divide it between people, even if you are trying to give both an equal share. It just will not happen. There is a reason that we have couples. Even if an idea of a herd could be used in this story, AGAIN I would frown at it, because it's a deus ex machina---the classic everypony leaves happy solution. It doesn't work!!
Again, I'm sorry Fluttershy. But all you could do is say that you had a crush on PInkie Pie, and you should have let that crush go once you saw that Pinkie's taken, not try to force yourself on her. And also it wouldn't be fair for Pinkie because Rarity put it right there in plain sight: She knows that Pinkie will do anything, and I mean ANYTHING to make all her friends happy. And by doing this, it untimately will not make either Rarity or Fluttershy happy. As a matter of fact, either get Fluttershy hooked up with Rainbow Dash again, hook her up with Spike (he's the only person that isn't hooked up with somepony already), or seriously start thinking about analyzing why Rainbow Dash broke up with you in the first place to put you into this predicament, because sometimes the issue is you.
Go ahead, start to flame. Part of me is sorry for Fluttershy, and a stupid part of me wants to have her shipped with dragon boy because I'm tired of seeing him left in the dust when it goes for romance and crushes, and the same thing is happening to Fluttershy here.
4094221 As someone who has been in a successful and stable polyamorous relationship for more than 15 years, I call bullshit on your attempt to state your personal beliefs as something that is true for everyone/everypony, and that therefore the potential relationship described in this story cannot possibly succeed.
You are certainly entitled to live your life as you see fit and choose a relationship style/type that works for you. If that's monogamy, more power to you, and may all your relationships flourish. But your diatribe blatantly disregards - and even insults - a portion of humanity (and therefore equinity, since they are after all pony-shaped reflections of us) that can and does find it possible to share love, thank you very much.
In the story they are not talking about Fluttershy being a mistress. They are talking about forming a dynamically stable relationship between all three of them, with open communication, everypony knowing about it, and each of their needs and desires considered and given weight. This is actually an excellent model for any relationship, romantic or otherwise, and I laud the author for presenting it as not only possible (if challenging) but potentially desirable. Foibles and baggage and shenanigans aside, all three are doing their best to find a way to work it out, and really, what more could one ask?
If you had just said that you didn't think it would work for you, or because in your experience these sorts of things don't, I would not have been moved to comment. That would have been be a personal statement and thus perfectly reasonable. Instead, you made a point of, essentially, calling my life and my relationship model impossible bullshit. I admit freely that what I have is imperfect and takes a lot of work - but very few relationships are easy.
For a glimpse into what counters jealousy, envy, and greed, I direct you to the difficult but (to me) appealing idea of compersion. I'm not there fully; I still have a lot to learn, not yet having achieved the status of bodhisattva. But I am on the path and finding myself calmer, happier, and more able to love as I walk it.
If you or anypony wishes to message me about any of this I invite you to do so. Thanks for listening.
The game is afoot! Now all Rares has to do is put all her love novel knowledge to use and woo Flutters properly. You are my most favorite shipping author ever. Both with Green, and with this.
“Pinkie? Did we just get dumped?” “No way!...We just got turned down, silly.”... Rarity’s face scrunched up in irritation. “I don’t think I like the sound of that any better.”
this approach would not, in tragic fact, involve Pinkie making passionate love to her, being caught in the act by her best friend, before salaciously inviting her to join them. Bother.
What the fuck.
Somehow this turned from a tense romantic drama into the most hilarious little romcom.
I don't like it. This was so unfair to rarity. She was forced into doing this. She felt that if she didn't give it a chance pinkie would be upset and she can't stand the thought of that. Pinkie pretty much used Rarity's feelings for her to warp her mind. Totally uncool.
5242484 Rarity is not somepony whose mind can just be easily warped (it takes dark evil books for that) She was extremely conflicted by the idea that her best friend had betrayed her in such a way, and reacted in the only way she knew how: confronting the enemy and drawing a line in the sand. Pinkie persuaded her that maybe as opposed to driving her friend out of town, they could at least go talk things through like adults. Pinkie had her own hopes of how things would go, of course, but it was Rarity's own wish for Fluttershy to be happy conflicting with this threat to her relationship that lead to her internal conflict to begin with. Pinkie's solution allowed for everyone to at least have a chance at happiness, even if they didn't end up as a great big pony pile.
5242484 I think that's what makes it brilliant. It's different. It's not all sunshine and holly-wood endings like most things crammed down our throats. It's genuinely interesting when someone can write a story about a problem with no clear solutions, and especially one where sacrifice and controversial themes take place. Not all stories have to be perfect and fold neatly at the corners and make the reader feel comfortable. That's just boring. I admire the guts of anyone who goes against the grain like this. And if a story can invoke such a reaction from it's readers, in my opinion that made it worth reading. Nothing is learnt from happy endings where everything works out. Adversity and wrongness on the other hand...
Yeah, pretty much how I thought this would all play out, albeit with the fast-forward key held down. Not that I'm complaining.
Kinda wish Rarity's hypocrisy was a bit more firmly addressed. I don't exactly need a "sorry for browbeating you and treating you like a child, and also forcing you into disrupting an existing relationship because of my own blind idealism, and also for being a massive hypocrite when it turned out that the relationship was mine," but I am a bit bothered by how much her own blame in this debacle is being ignored in favor of Fluttershy. It helps that acting more on impulse and emotion, which makes things very believable; just not wholly satisfying.
Speaking of emotion, wow...first its , then its like , then they're all , and then everyone's .
7400690 Heh. Yeah, lot's of emotional shifts going on. Which makes sense, as the ponies involved are extremely conflicted.
And yes, Rarity is well aware she could have avoided this mess by not forcing Fluttershy's hoof. Apologizing wasn't really on her mind, though. It was more 'How much can I forgive?' And there was one thing that went past that line.
Great story! I'm currently re-reading it, so I already know how it'll turn out. Normally that 'drama' tag tends to give me pause and it often spells doom for a story's re-readability, because I don't like to slog through large parts of a story where characters are unhappy or stuck in a conflict that could easily be solved if only everyone involved acted less stupidly and it's only the tension and hope for improvement down the line that keeps me reading, but this is exactly my speed. Great job for hitting that delicate balance!
It was an awfully good thing that this was a dream, because otherwise what Fluttershy did next would have scared the willies out of her: She leaned forward and boldly kissed Rarity right on the lips.
This is the point where I think it would be interesting if things went a little differently. I like Rarity's speech before this part, and how she is hesitant and struggling with the idea. Her and Fluttershy kissing here resolves that a little fast. I think it would have been great for her to encourage Fluttershy to kiss Pinkie (or the other way around) and take the Fluttershy/Rarity part a little more slowly. The story turned out just fine with how you worked the scene, but I think if Rarity had to wrestle with herself a little more to slowly come around to the idea, it might have been even better.
Love triangle is go!
-Missy
Pinkie in a hot red dress and 'fuck me' high heel boots? The entire town is going to be chasing after her. Even without a Want it need it spell from Twilight.
Hm, I actually don't know how to feel about this. It just seems to me like it's impossible to make a threesome work as you just wouldn't be able to equally love two beings. One would end up taking priority over the other in a lot of cases. Who knows though, maybe this could actually work out.
Nice
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I presume then that for you, Sophie's choice is meaningless, since a parent will always prefer one child over the other, right? :-P
I kid, I kid, but still...different people are different. One may be able to be in a relationship with two people and be perfectly happy about it, while another might be consumed by jealousy even in the most benign of environments
hm. so apparently Flutters used to have a thing with Dash. hope this doesn't turn into a Flutterdash somehow.
and apparently Flutters is in loopy land right now. I wonder if she'll wake up the next day and think it was all a dream. poor Shy
Loving this story, a wonderful combination of feels and romantic antics. Kinda hoping Fluttershy remembers to eat and drink something soon, might not be the best for her to be found unconcious by Angel after all of this. Also hoping this does turn into a courting situation for Pinkie and Rarity as it'd be interesting to see what they do, particularly Rarity in this case since she is the romantic of the three and seems to be fumbling a bit with her emotions over everything.
Commence read.
Took Fluttershy a few moments to catch up with the non-dream state, but good that some progress has been made for the better.
Though that train of thought with Fluttershy being undeserving and already packing to leave, leaves space for what may be a search, unless she does wait for Pinkie and Rarity to court her.
3940180 well, in the previous story, Rainbow had recently left Flutters for Applejack. Let your worries melt away.
3940355 oh...right...*stupidly forgot this was a sequel. sheepish chuckle*
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I just hope Fluttershy eats something before she ends up in the hospital. She's hungry and probably dehydrated by now after soaking her luggage in tears. You'd think her animals would realize their soul caretaker is needing to be fed as she stumbles about.
But all in all, this was one of the better outcomes for the collision of mares. Fantasizing they would all jump in bed after a round of apologizing is just unrealistic. Besides, it should be quite fun to see how one or both court Fluttershy.
Hmm...
Most of this chapter was good. I liked most of it. Feels and stuff. Much good.
But Pinkie seemed to convince Rarity to change her mind on the whole affair a little too quickly. Which seems odd, considering it takes up a significant portion of a nearly 10k-word chapter. I don't know, it just seems like too far of a jump for a single conversation to go from the state of mind Rarity was in after her chat with Fluttershy to agreeing to try out a three-way relationship with her. Agreeing to help Pinkie convince her not to leave town seems like it would have been a more reasonable first step.
Of course, doing so might have dragged on the pacing, and then we wouldn't have gotten the wonderful, "Did we just get dumped?" line this chapter, so I can't really say it ought to be different. Just that it's something that didn't ring as quite right to me.
The puppets are hysterical! It's also nice to see how they might make this three-way relationship work... both awkward and adorable!
3941154
Ha! That was actually an issue at the pre-reading stage, was that Rarity was convinced too quickly to take this route. It was originally an easier decision for Rarity. And as it currently is, Rarity only agreed to go talk to Flutters. It think it was actually seeing her the next day to tipped the scale for Rares. It helps that Rarity is both a hopeless romantic and was very close to Shy to begin with.
That was a fantastic line. I laughed for a good 2 minutes . As i was reading it did seem like a bit of a jump from rarity being pissed to rarity making out, then I thought about it, and reread that section of talk with Pinkie and it made a lot more sense. And then with the comment of lack of sleep from rarity everything fell into place.
The
also made me laugh because it just seemed sooooo Rarity. and the subsequent nah from Pinkie just made it better.
All in all it was a fantastic chapter and i can't wait for more to come!
Oh this is gonna be good~
There's buildup, drama, forgiveness, friendship, awkwardness, hilarity...
This. Just this.
While reading I realized I was wrong in picturing the sock puppets mouths moving in a way a hand would allow, because hooves wouldn't allow this. Then I remembered it was Pinkie with the puppets and I was entirely justified in picturing them this way.
Rarity is wonderfully conflicted all the way through this. I can't wait to see how the courting plays out.
Also:
I found the obligatory error to slip by the editing process.
3944613
Gotta give the little errors a chance, you know! I was going to annihilate all of them, but that one missing word was just so cute! I just couldn't bring myself to correct it.
Yeah. That's my story, and I'm sticking to it.
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Hehe.
Puppity. *snork* XD
Mon dieu!
Pinkie Pie in red?!
No, no no no, dear, Pinkie obviously needs blues, purples, not reds.
Powder or sky blue, low cut, delicious.
phew, drama storm has pass for... now as we exit t loony world flutters thought that she was in to now enter what hopefully be a romantic n' not as much drama filled dates to come to this still in t works herd
I can't waite to read the comepltion of the story it goten really good. oh this is going to be good
More! More! More!!
3963641 I take it you approve?
The dream/delirium gimmick felt like it was abandoned to quickly. I do believe that Rarity and Pinkie's reaction would solidify the notion that it was nothing but a dream even more. I know if I got such reaction I would definitely think it was a dream, even without the previous stigma and delirium.
Fluttershy is best mad mare.
sir I need more chapters of this for it gives me the feels don't make me send her after you cause I well i1.ytimg.com/vi/1y3Bzg_0v_w/hqdefault.jpg
I was really not looking to forward to the confrontation with Rarity and Fluttershy but even after a few tears here and there, it all turned out alright.
And now, with Pinkie's crazy menage a trois idea, I cannot wait for the next chapter! ^_^
So, when this is finished (which I hope isn't for a while), will there be a TwiLestia sequel? I really hope so, as you write so damn well.
4026638 The outline for that is already being worked on.
Needs more now, pls
4034466 next chapter is done, just being edited.
4066891
Please don't challenge me without a passable attempt at English. I might be a jackass for asking that, but I literally just strained my eyes trying to make out exactly what you said. Apologies if you took offense.
First off, before you /ever/ come to question me or something I've said, do a little reading. I know, how unreasonable, someone wants you to understand what you're talking about before you come after them.
As you can see, I was agreeing with him. Not necessarily (directly) insulting or diagnosing him. Also, as a long-time student of mental health in fields both academic and practical, I can tell you there are many doctors who still don't rightly know what they're doing, but that leads into a rant against what's become of medicine and psychology as a whole, and is utterly off-topic.
In the future, again - read before you say something. Also in the future, don't call me back to an argument that's been done and over with for over a month and a half. It's just plain rude and annoying. If you have any further issues now that I've solved your first one, feel free to PM me. I will still not be necessarily polite, but it will prevent board-clutter on Steel's story.
Boof. Right in the feels. Very interesting, Definitely looking forward to the next installment. Your sock puppet names were awesome, and Dreamershy was posilutely hilarious. The way you have them handle these situations is, for me anyways, really easy to imagine. The scenes unfold effortlessly in my mind, and the dialogue flows in their voices with no real challenge on my part. Very well done.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
No no no!!!!
DAMN IT!!! Fluttershy, deal with it!! Pinkie and Rarity are getting married!! You have no right to be mistress to either one of them, because that shit never works!!!! I'm sorry that you feel that you are gonna feel that you're alone, but DEAL WITH IT!!!
Hell, it bugs me so much that this is basically a "every mare ships with every other mare" story, because it means that there's no Spike to ship with, but that's not the story.
Love triangles should stay in the novels, not in real life. Because regardless of what somepony claims that they will love two ponies the same, I call bullshit. You cannot!!! And the reason is because we are human, there's gonna be jealousy, envy, greed, anger, what-have-you. To truly love somepony is to give it all to that one pony at 100%. You cannot divide it between people, even if you are trying to give both an equal share. It just will not happen. There is a reason that we have couples. Even if an idea of a herd could be used in this story, AGAIN I would frown at it, because it's a deus ex machina---the classic everypony leaves happy solution. It doesn't work!!
Again, I'm sorry Fluttershy. But all you could do is say that you had a crush on PInkie Pie, and you should have let that crush go once you saw that Pinkie's taken, not try to force yourself on her. And also it wouldn't be fair for Pinkie because Rarity put it right there in plain sight: She knows that Pinkie will do anything, and I mean ANYTHING to make all her friends happy. And by doing this, it untimately will not make either Rarity or Fluttershy happy. As a matter of fact, either get Fluttershy hooked up with Rainbow Dash again, hook her up with Spike (he's the only person that isn't hooked up with somepony already), or seriously start thinking about analyzing why Rainbow Dash broke up with you in the first place to put you into this predicament, because sometimes the issue is you.
Go ahead, start to flame. Part of me is sorry for Fluttershy, and a stupid part of me wants to have her shipped with dragon boy because I'm tired of seeing him left in the dust when it goes for romance and crushes, and the same thing is happening to Fluttershy here.
4094221
As someone who has been in a successful and stable polyamorous relationship for more than 15 years, I call bullshit on your attempt to state your personal beliefs as something that is true for everyone/everypony, and that therefore the potential relationship described in this story cannot possibly succeed.
You are certainly entitled to live your life as you see fit and choose a relationship style/type that works for you. If that's monogamy, more power to you, and may all your relationships flourish. But your diatribe blatantly disregards - and even insults - a portion of humanity (and therefore equinity, since they are after all pony-shaped reflections of us) that can and does find it possible to share love, thank you very much.
In the story they are not talking about Fluttershy being a mistress. They are talking about forming a dynamically stable relationship between all three of them, with open communication, everypony knowing about it, and each of their needs and desires considered and given weight. This is actually an excellent model for any relationship, romantic or otherwise, and I laud the author for presenting it as not only possible (if challenging) but potentially desirable. Foibles and baggage and shenanigans aside, all three are doing their best to find a way to work it out, and really, what more could one ask?
If you had just said that you didn't think it would work for you, or because in your experience these sorts of things don't, I would not have been moved to comment. That would have been be a personal statement and thus perfectly reasonable. Instead, you made a point of, essentially, calling my life and my relationship model impossible bullshit. I admit freely that what I have is imperfect and takes a lot of work - but very few relationships are easy.
For a glimpse into what counters jealousy, envy, and greed, I direct you to the difficult but (to me) appealing idea of compersion. I'm not there fully; I still have a lot to learn, not yet having achieved the status of bodhisattva. But I am on the path and finding myself calmer, happier, and more able to love as I walk it.
If you or anypony wishes to message me about any of this I invite you to do so. Thanks for listening.
Light and laughter,
SongCoyote
The game is afoot! Now all Rares has to do is put all her love novel knowledge to use and woo Flutters properly. You are my most favorite shipping author ever. Both with Green, and with this.
4101685 Well spoken, oh wise one. Have a moustache
Seeing Rarity and Pinkie was wonderful. But three? *inhales sharply* hmmm.
Its still a story and I'll read it no matter what. I guess I'll just see what happens lol
What the fuck.
Somehow this turned from a tense romantic drama into the most hilarious little romcom.
My sides have just passed Saturn.
5062646 I ship Dramcom. They make a cute couple.
I don't like it. This was so unfair to rarity. She was forced into doing this. She felt that if she didn't give it a chance pinkie would be upset and she can't stand the thought of that. Pinkie pretty much used Rarity's feelings for her to warp her mind. Totally uncool.
5242484 Rarity is not somepony whose mind can just be easily warped (it takes dark evil books for that) She was extremely conflicted by the idea that her best friend had betrayed her in such a way, and reacted in the only way she knew how: confronting the enemy and drawing a line in the sand. Pinkie persuaded her that maybe as opposed to driving her friend out of town, they could at least go talk things through like adults. Pinkie had her own hopes of how things would go, of course, but it was Rarity's own wish for Fluttershy to be happy conflicting with this threat to her relationship that lead to her internal conflict to begin with. Pinkie's solution allowed for everyone to at least have a chance at happiness, even if they didn't end up as a great big pony pile.
5242484
I think that's what makes it brilliant. It's different. It's not all sunshine and holly-wood endings like most things crammed down our throats. It's genuinely interesting when someone can write a story about a problem with no clear solutions, and especially one where sacrifice and controversial themes take place. Not all stories have to be perfect and fold neatly at the corners and make the reader feel comfortable. That's just boring. I admire the guts of anyone who goes against the grain like this. And if a story can invoke such a reaction from it's readers, in my opinion that made it worth reading. Nothing is learnt from happy endings where everything works out. Adversity and wrongness on the other hand...
If you go Cupcakes on my ass, I swear to Go-
Oh.
Good...
Yeah, pretty much how I thought this would all play out, albeit with the fast-forward key held down. Not that I'm complaining.
Kinda wish Rarity's hypocrisy was a bit more firmly addressed. I don't exactly need a "sorry for browbeating you and treating you like a child, and also forcing you into disrupting an existing relationship because of my own blind idealism, and also for being a massive hypocrite when it turned out that the relationship was mine," but I am a bit bothered by how much her own blame in this debacle is being ignored in favor of Fluttershy. It helps that acting more on impulse and emotion, which makes things very believable; just not wholly satisfying.
Speaking of emotion, wow...first its , then its like , then they're all , and then everyone's .
7400690 Heh. Yeah, lot's of emotional shifts going on. Which makes sense, as the ponies involved are extremely conflicted.
And yes, Rarity is well aware she could have avoided this mess by not forcing Fluttershy's hoof. Apologizing wasn't really on her mind, though. It was more 'How much can I forgive?' And there was one thing that went past that line.
Great story! I'm currently re-reading it, so I already know how it'll turn out. Normally that 'drama' tag tends to give me pause and it often spells doom for a story's re-readability, because I don't like to slog through large parts of a story where characters are unhappy or stuck in a conflict that could easily be solved if only everyone involved acted less stupidly and it's only the tension and hope for improvement down the line that keeps me reading, but this is exactly my speed. Great job for hitting that delicate balance!
This is the point where I think it would be interesting if things went a little differently. I like Rarity's speech before this part, and how she is hesitant and struggling with the idea. Her and Fluttershy kissing here resolves that a little fast. I think it would have been great for her to encourage Fluttershy to kiss Pinkie (or the other way around) and take the Fluttershy/Rarity part a little more slowly. The story turned out just fine with how you worked the scene, but I think if Rarity had to wrestle with herself a little more to slowly come around to the idea, it might have been even better.