A humanized version of The Great and Powerful Trixie is chased out of Manhattan, she takes refuge in the dangerous Everfree forest.
READ THIS PLEASE, THE COVER WILL MAKE SENSE!!!
I got an incredible opportunity in my English class, the assignment was 'To write your own Greek Myth explaining a natural phoenomenon, origin myth, odyssey...' Well, on the brainstorming packet where to put your name, it says 'Written By The Great and Powerful _____' That's where I got the idea for this fic, it explains the origin of the Ursa Major constellation that we occasionally see in the night sky.
.../> EDIT: I got a 25/25 (100%) for this.
Ahead of time, thank to everypony for reading and commenting!
Personville... heh.
I find this a bit interesting of a story. Only complaints I have are:
1. Use of it's
I noticed that you messed up between its and it's. You might want to go through and correct those.
2. Use of commas
I think you may have put a bit too many commas in this. Some of those sentences could be split up into two and not be together by a comma. A few others were spliced up too much by commas. This is a common problem among writers, believe it or not.
I believe I had some more to go over but I can't quite remember them right now. So, other than those two issues, it's fine.
StarsGuide
You did that for school......AWESOME!!! I did something like that for school too, I got a pretty good grade. Nice fic.
So what did your English teacher think of it?
386824 I still haven't gotten a grade for it... nobody in my class has yet.
Wow, this story was really good. Poor Ursa Major, he deserves that for playing with his food xD
If you let me ask, did your Teacher already grade it ?
467381 She did. I got a 25/25. Turns out she graded it but didn't tell us unless we specifically asked.
467598 Congratulations, you got a well deserved Perfect Score
Never got the chance to read this. Now that I am procrastinating my next chapter, I did. I got to say this was awesome Epic. I also liked how you wrote a story based on MLP for an English assignment.