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  • E Three Hundred and Fifty

    The future has everything that any pony could ever want. Twilight Sparkle wants to go home.
    48,448 words · 13,004 views  ·  2,044  ·  61
  • T Rainbownomicon

    Losing a friend is only tragic for those who don't know necromancy.
    3,621 words · 7,905 views  ·  1,278  ·  37 · gore
  • E Stormy Nights 2: In the Clouds

    Stormy moves to a new town to find her destiny.
    7,159 words · 1,402 views  ·  118  ·  3
  • E Stormy Nights 3: Darkened Skies

    Stormy runs away from her past.
    10,722 words · 806 views  ·  109  ·  5
  • E Ember and the Orb

    A filly seeks out an ancient treasure.
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Blog Posts12

  • 36w, 3d
    From the Rejected Pile, Part 2

    There was a blog post here.

    It's gone now.

    4 comments · 146 views
  • 36w, 4d
    From the Rejected Pile, Part 1

    Or: Void Got Bored and Made a Silly Blog Post

    As part of the "Void Procrastinates on Writing an Actual Story" series, I figured I'd ramble on a few ideas that I came up with, but never wrote for some reason or another.

    If any of my plucky readers want to take one of these and run with it, feel free. Non-plucky readers need not apply.

    A Thing I Never Got a Title for

    I'd been playing with time travel for a bit. I came up with Twilight inventing magic rocks that made portals, then modifying them to be temporal as well as spatial. Past that, it was in hindsight a pretty bog-standard plot where Twilight sees a disaster in the future, tries to prevent it, and ends up causing it. Yawn. Also my editor said the rock-portal thing had been done.

    Time for a Change

    Again with the time travel. In this one, one of Chrysalis's minions managed to snag That Time Spell from the show before they got loved out of Canterlot, then used it to get back into the Starswirl Library while everypony was celebrating and looted the place.

    From there, they find out that Starswirl had allegedly come up with a way to alter a timeline (to give the changelings a second go at invading Canterlot), but never wrote down enough details to duplicate it.

    The first attempt, at murdering Twimom before Shining was born, not only failed, but ended up tipping off Equestria of the changelings' existence. Isn't causality fun?

    From there, the minions use time magic to try to hunt down Starswirl in space and time, stopping at various points in history in their search.

    Thing is, I see changelings as being masters of emotional manipulation. And combined with the illusion power on a time that has no way of preparing themselves? Yeah that'll get mighty dark mighty quick.

    Eventually they find Starswirl, and I was always fuzzy on the exact ending. They decide for whatever reason to not alter the timeline, and to keep the future they know instead of breaking it.

    I got about 1000 words in before I decided I couldn't do a plot of that scope well. Shame, I thought the title was absolutely brilliant.

    I finally got the time travel plot out of me with 350.

    What Goes Squeak in the Night.

    Rainbow Dash tells a vampony story one night, spooking the crap out of AJ. The next day Applejack wakes up to find one of her pigs got his blood sucked.

    According to Twilight, the last vampony (created by Nightmare Moon) was killed centuries ago. Applejack suspects Rainbow Dash, but a close examination of her neck reveals nothing. RD does catch her ogling her neck, though.

    But the vampony targeted an animal and not a pony. A kind one, or with a thing for animals? AJ suspects Fluttershy, but doesn't want to confront her openly, despite FS showing no signs of a vampony's weaknesses.

    Applejack makes up a story about zombie rabbits to get to her to visit the farm at night (to lead her to a garlic patch):

    "Oh my. I hope you get those taken care of. I'd hate for something to happen to Angel."

    "That's why I'm here, sugar. To figure out what to do about the undead comin' round the farm."

    (I liked that line.)

    Rainbow notices AJ's sudden interest in vampones plus breathing on her neck earlier, and thinks that AJ is the vampony.

    The garlic doesn't affect FS. AJ decides to go to Rarity to source some silver jewelry. Rarity wants to know why AJ wants a necklace all of a sudden. AJ makes up something about wanting to look fancy. Rarity hears what she wants to hear, and AJ gets the full makeover, and also a mirror.

    The silver has no effect on poor FS. AJ walks away, but finds that Fluttershy indeed doesn't have a reflection.

    AJ decides that, well, Fluttershy is still her friend, vampony or no. Then Apple Bloom gets bit.

    Applejack storms to the spa (where TS, PP, Rarity, and FS are) and confronts Fluttershy. Fluttershy has no idea what AJ is talking about. Rarity points out that the mirror is enchanted to only show the pony looking at it. Helps with dressing, you see. AJ half-heartedly flips up Fluttershy's mane... and finds bite marks. FS is as surprised as anypony that she's a vampony. Twilight is ecstatic at the chance to study a real live vampony, and the ponies reluctantly volunteer themselves to be blood donors should FS need them. D'aww.

    Rainbow Dash then bursts in with a hammer and stake for some awkwardness.

    In the epilogue, it is revealed that the vampire was not Fluttershy. It was Angel.

    The entire plot hinged on Applejack telling lies and having secrets, which rubbed me the wrong way, Element of Honesty and all that. Then a particular Season 4 episode put the nail in that coffin. Pun totally intended.

    I ended up repurposing "main 6 is an undead" into Rainbownomicon.

    I've got one more, but that'll be another post; it's pretty long.

    1 comments · 130 views
  • 40w, 1d
    Void Takes a Long Time to Write Something Short

    It's been, what, close to a year?

    But like the title implies, I am back in business peddling my horse stories on the side of the metaphorical road. Or one horse story, at any rate. The point is, expect something new in the next few days.

    Rainbow Dash will die in the first scene. It's a comedy.

    Coming Soon: Rainbownomicon

    7 comments · 142 views
  • 64w, 6d
    A Big Story Gets a Little Editing

    A fine fellow by the name of JustAnotherTimeLord said a whole lot of critical words in a few chapters about my story, so I did what I usually do and conscripted him to edit it. (Naw, he offered to. But watch your backs.) He helped me tweak out a whole bunch of little things about it, like at least 300 things, maybe 340.  Besides some grammar derps, the scene at the end of A Tree in Canterlot got expanded to hopefully get Sweetie's reasoning across better, and I added a scene at the start of the epilogue. Maybe some other things I'm forgetting; the editing took a while.

    So give the story a re-read and see if it's improved for ya any.

    6 comments · 217 views
  • 83w, 3d
    Void Ruins His Story

    So yeah, the finale sucks. Worse yet, there's no way to improve it.

    The entire story was structured around Twilight going back and Sweetie staying. That can't be changed. Not without what amounts to a complete top-to-bottom rewrite.

    Sweetie goes back? The CMC lasting to help future-Sweetie? Wouldn't happen. Without that, there's no Apple Crisp, no Spot light, no troupe. The Sweetie-statue? Makes no sense.

    Twilight stays? I don't like the idea of Twilight never seeing her friends ever again and being miserable in a world she doesn't fit in for the rest of her life. Maybe that's just me.

    Celestia telling Twilight the truth instead? Completely ruins the tension. And why wouldn't Twilight tell her how once she got back, and Celestia relay that to Twi in the future? The 10 year delay becomes nonsensical.

    From what I see, my options are:

    1) Redo the finale somehow. Having one with the same outcome but still acceptable seems to be beyond my abilities as a writer. If it's possible at all.

    2) Dump the epilogue I have into the fic and be done with this damn thing.

    3) Accept the story premise as unworkable, delete the last chapter, and mark it Cancelled.

    29 comments · 423 views
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As seen on Equestria Daily.

The desert is a hard place to grow up when you love nothing more than the rain. Unfortunately, learning to be a pegasus in a town of unicorns and earth ponies is the least of one foal’s concerns. For Stormy Nights, trying to fit in the world isn't just a challenge—it's daily life.

Thanks to Silicas and everyone else who helped preread.

Cover art courtesy of Voodoo-Tiki

First Published
20th Mar 2012
Last Modified
8th Apr 2012
#1 · 135w, 3h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

First comment!

*ahem*

Stormy here was actually written back in the gap between MLP seasons 1 and 2, and posted to a small community with good reception, so I'm reposting it here for a wider audience.

Feel free to give feedback!

#2 · 135w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

hmmm looks good ill try it

#3 · 135w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

ooohhhh i like it *tracking* :pinkiehappy:

#4 · 135w, 9m ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

WOOT! Yes! it's finally up! Nice job Void Chicken (Butterknife), it was worth the wait to see the art up here.  

Stormy and Strawberry look awesome!:twilightsmile:

-Silverness

#5 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm not sure exactly what aspect of this story makes me love it so much. Maybe it's the simplicity of the writing, the delightful anecdotes like 'Stormy vs. The Lever', or just that it's the sweet story of an innocent child facing hardships with a smile, like we all once did. Whatever it is, I love this story and I've only read 1 chapter. Absolutely sublime from start to finish, please keep updating!

#6 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

:rainbowwild: OMIGAWD! this story is just...so...beautiful, I love the character development and sprinklers! but yesh I am DYING to see another chapter, I don't often comment on stories but yours is one of the special ones.

#7 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Aww, thanks for the nice words, guys. And upvotes :raritywink:

#8 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Love it man, keep them chapters comin'.

#9 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Liking this story, if I ever do begin to write stories myself I'll be sure to note this story as a source of inspiration

And while I'm thinking about it

"I just don't know what went wrong' *zap* :derpytongue2:

#10 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Beautiful! Keep 'em comin'!

#11 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

The only question i might have, is how Stormy was born to two unicorns, or what i presume is two unicorns

But other than that, i love this story :D

#12 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

And that's all. Sorry if you were expecting something longer; giant epics aren't really my strong suit.

But don't untrack just yet! In a day or two I'll be making a blog post / author note about this little pony, so if there's anything you would like clarified, pipe up.

Edit: Here it is!

#13 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>369607

So on the site where this was originally posted, there were comments about Stormy Nights 2. Is that gonna be posted here too?

#14 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>369692

Yup, eventually. But do me a favor and don't discuss details. I want to keep it a surprise for those who haven't read.

#15 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>369711

Of course! I loved this story so much, keep up the great work!

#16 · 134w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>369711

stormy nights, TWO?

Now I'm excited :D

#17 · 134w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Btw, how is she a Pegasus? :P

#18 · 134w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Love. This. Story! :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss:

#19 · 133w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oh, noooo! I'm always so frustrated when people (ponies) catch just enough of an idea to take it the wrong way. Then logic doesn't help. You've got magic, Stormy! Just not the kind you're thinking of.

#20 · 133w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>370395

Pony genetics I'd guess, consider the cake twins.

#21 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

This story was great and and an inspirational story of overcoming your fears and learning to love yourself.

Stormy's introduction was great and didn't feel abrupt,

I got to learn a bit about her and get a good sense of her personality.

Reading your blog post also confirmed the suspicion of mine. Both parents were unicorns and I could tell something wasn't right.

Although I didn't really get the sense that the dad was actually mad at the mom. I just labeled it more as a person that wasn't meant to be a father.

Still, the story was great and I cant wait for Stormy Nights 2! :pinkiehappy:

Congrats on getting featured in EqD!

#22 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>385333

Actually i found out through the guys blog on here,

Illegitimate child :P

#23 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Ooh, cut off mid-sentence.  That's never a good sign.  :twilightoops:

#24 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

:heart: I read a fair bit here on fim and I have to say this has to be in my top 3 stories to date, it's a interesting take with a genuinely 'real' feel too it. This gives it a depth I enjoy reading in a story, and I'd like to take ma hat off to ya :ajsmug:

#25 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Great story well thought out and relatable  

#26 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

*fanboy-squees* I mean :twilightsheepish: ahem...*trots off all manly like*

#27 · 132w, 1d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

Hello

This is the first story that i have read.

I haven't started part two yet.

But this story is amazing,I will follow this till the end. :heart:

I thank you for taking the time to write these.

#28 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>363374 It has been canonized recently that ponies can have foals of a different type based on deeper ancestry. Maybe you haven't seen that ep yet or have since, but just commenting since this seems to be a common question. :twilightsheepish:

#29 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I get such a chill every time a pony gets a cutie mark. :pinkiehappy:

#30 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

>>439779

He actually answered the question in a blog,

Her mother cheated on whats-his-name

:3

#31 · 131w, 4d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

THIS CHAPTER MY GOD

SO MUCH NEW STORY SHIT

MY BRAIN IS MELTING OUT OF MY EARS

#32 · 131w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·
#33 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

I'm still wondering why this fic doesn't have any more views :pinkiegasp:  I must help you get more views :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 123w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Well done.

I applaude you.

#36 · 110w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>363374>>439779

For what it's worth, here's my take on the issue.  Warning, it's pretty deep.  Nerds only need apply.

Pony Genetics GDoc

#37 · 110w, 1d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

Very polished, very interesting, very good. I absolutely love your style and this story and cannot wait to read the rest of this great series! :heart:

#38 · 106w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Interesting start.  Seems like pegasi are practically foreign to that region.  

#39 · 106w, 1d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

So I decided to read it now-ish after all.

All in all? I approve. Good concept, nice imagination spots for Stormy, and an entertaining read. I also always enjoy seeing descriptions/depictions of non-unicorn magic. Gotta spread the magic love around.

For me, it felt like there some places where things happened just a little too quickly. But that could just be personal preference. It's probably a better problem to have than overstaying your welcome, anyway.

I'll be sticking the sequel on my read list.

#40 · 106w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1236512

My hat is off to that piece of work.  

The story is coming along at an interesting rate, and the characters are done well.  

#41 · 96w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

So wait. The trick was to aim lightning around her friend?

:applejackconfused:

#42 · 94w, 4d ago · · · Stormy Nights 2 ·

I love your Stormy OC, and I'm digging your writing style! :twilightsmile:

#43 · 94w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

great way to start!! the start excites me to continue moving on:rainbowdetermined2:

#44 · 93w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I get the sense that Sterling never got over wanting a unicorn. I'm not too impressed with how hard Vanilla's trying, either; Stormy's room could at least not be filled with reminders of the things her parents can do that she can't. And I don't think either of her parents knows much about pegasi in general, let alone how to raise them; I get the sense neither even knew pegasi had magic, for example. Sure, books are expensive, but surely they could afford one book on parenting foals of unexpected races?

#45 · 93w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

If I ever meet Sterling, I'm grabbing something heavy and threatening to break his horn off with it. See how he likes it.

#46 · 93w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>1787920 No, it was to aim lightning around herself. No mean feat, considering air is about a billion times as resistive as skin (to the best of my ability to estimate) and blood conducts far better than either of them.

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