Foals are going missing all over Equestria. All Fluttershy knows came to her in a dream. Or a nightmare. A black thing that feeds off of fear and imagination is behind it all. And it will do anything to stay alive. Can Fluttershy stop this creature before more go missing, or will she end up like the others: scared insane?
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Should be "anyhow".
Interesting beginning, although that teleportation thing at the end was a bit weird. And I'd suggest making an additional line after every paragraph/line of dialogue. It's much easier to read the stories that have some more space between the blocks of text.
3373988 The anywho was intentional. But I understand the double spacing. Got it. I appreciate the feedback.
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Will fix now. Also, check out IceBoxFroggie. I only helped with editing and fleshing out the idea.
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Fixed.
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Nice
And I checked him out, some of his stories seem interesting...
3374064 Thanks? Whenever I see 'interesting...' I get a bit wary of its usage.
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I usually use "interesting" when I like the premise, but have no time to read the story. I hope that I'll be able to read some of your fics tomorrow
3374378 To me, it's either that, or "Interesting..." and then someone starts slowly backing away. Usually the second one.
Definitely going to have to watch and see where this is headed.
3419640 I take it you're liking the story. Glad you do!
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