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Rape es no bueno.
No. No no no no.
Just no.
Fuck you.
No.
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3353734 Shhhhh, that's exactly the reaction the writer wants. Simply ignore it and quietly move on.
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why you yell at me that make me so sad :(
3353743 i do not want that reaction
In English, one capitalises the 'I' pronoun. We also don't use text speak like 'plz' in prose. Capitalise the first letter of a sentence, etc. Simple things, that any writer who gives a shit should know.
Oh, and this fic was in poor taste, get the fuck off my internets.
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Just, just...
No
Stahp
Screw it, I'm out
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This is bad and you should feel bad for writing it.
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NOPE
NOPENOPENOPE
There's a reason we can't have nice things.
You're it.
>a (not so) lovely night :(
You lost me right there, man.
Just keep practicing and maybe one day you can make a fic that doesn't have a 1/10 ratio, but for now, I'd say it's time to go back to the drawing board.
3353743 Lol, so how's your day.
ahahahahahahahahaahahassssssssssssssssssssssss
NOPE!
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3353935 Let's try to keep the comments on the story about the story and skip on personal insults.
Uh wat.
3353752 I haven't read it, but I will give you lots of hugs.
Author...What are you doing?...Author....STAHP!!!!!
Well....you delivered.
man you all are mean i tried my best and i know i m not the best so thanks for the people who gave me advice and fuck the people who don t like me just because its rape wow you guys are mean
now i kill you all and my family
Ok. There are a lot of negative comments here. Not only that but they have more up-votes than down. I don't like sounding like I've only been a brony for two days, but wasn't this fandom all about love and tolerance? First of all, the description is meant to show you what you're in for before you read. If you don't like the idea, then why waste your time reading it and commenting. It's like taking a bite out of a rotten apple. And I thought it was obvious that people have their kinks. I remember a fic about someone who had a fetish for brushing their teeth with Princess Cadence's tail hair. Sure its weird but let the people who enjoy it, enjoy it.
As for the author. If you did write this just to troll, consider it a job well done because you obviously rustled some jimmies. If you wrote this for the heck of it, it wouldn't hurt to actually put effort into your grammar. And it can extend the story past one thousand words. If you did try your hardest, then you really need some work. No offence but I've read YouTube comments written better than this. If you're going to write something, try starting with a topic less...extreme. And try reading more on this site. They can really help you learn to form your ideas and write them out better. More importantly, ignore hate comments. It isn't worth it.
...What?
what in the fuck did i just read?
I can see your original intention, but you had no setup and rushed to get to the action. You did not even touch on why AJ and Spitfire would cooperate on raping Anon; if you were to use a pegasus along with AJ, then why not RD? It would make more sense, as AJ has more contact regularly than Spitfire. Where and why would Applejack have known Spitfire, who is a resident of Cloudsdale and interacts with Ponyville through Rainbow Dash and not AJ? Once the action started, you tried to rush the action too much with no buildup to the reveal when Anon woke up to find himself tied to the bed. Then, you keep switching between third-person perspective for AJ and Spitfire and 1st-person for Anon with no warning. The biggest problems with your fic, though is in spellchecking, punctuation, and formatting. The scenebreaks are ragged, you have so many mispelled words that it becomes unreadable, you keep forgetting periods at the end of sentences, and half the time you forget to capitalize the ponies' names or the beginnings of sentences.
I don't mind the rape element of the story so much, but you really need to get someone to spellcheck for you. Most of what's wrong with this story is basic spelling and grammar. If the story is well-crafted it can make up for a disturbing plot element, but a poorly written story like this can sink even the best of concepts.
3357166 thanks for the advice and i wrote this because of a dare i know im not the pest writer but people still dont need to be mean to me
The image below was my initial reaction to the like-ratio.
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And then, I saw the word count...
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Not the best first story to open up with, but who am I to judge?
Congratulations, I never thought that I'd find a story worse than this...
Dr. Robotnik's Pony Pingas Machine
...but you just proved me wrong.
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Btw, here is my personal reaction to the fic...
Hmm...
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its an ok story. thumbs up.
Ok, let's all calm down for a second.
First of all, Author, SLOW DOWN! You rush through the story, without elaborating or explaining. Stretch a few details out, and describe things in detail
Secondly, punctuation is severely lacking. Capital letters, full stops ( or periods, if you're American) and commas need to be put in the right place, and the word "I" is a capital
Next issue is phrases like "Will this be you're worst night or best" and "You dont want to but you comply afraid they will do something that you will regret. After you do what they want the force you to take sleeping pills and you don't remeber the rest of the night." are pretty poor. Spelling, grammar, description, they're all vitally important. You need to seriously consider what you are going to write, and get someone to proofread it before posting.
If this was made to troll, you have succeeded. Well done. Now piss off.
If this was a genuine, but poorly written story, re-do it, and get someone to proofread first. Like me
3814725 Where has this song been all my life?! Glad you know about the bad grammar.
GONNA KILL MYSELF OVER THIS FIC SO MUCH DISSAPOINT
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Funny thing is: He doesn't
3357450 you my sir just read cancer in the manifestation of a fanfiction
3353838 and you are right my fanfics got better. although i had too change my account due to this one haunting me
4746670 you sir. win the internet
No is now the appropriate response for this fix, because this would imply that this story gets any serious reaction out of me. And of it does, please reconsider this fics quality before you post your comment with a video with somebody random saying no a lot .
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( ͡o ͜ʖ ͡o) ( ͡o ͜ʖ ͡o)>⌐■-■ (⌐ ͡■ ͜ʖ ͡■) Bring them
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Geeze. You're someone who ran the site? How low can they get around here? Anyways, here's what you meant to put:
And yes, I did use the OLD method of putting YouTube videos into comments on this site. How did I accomplish this, you might ask? Simple. I knew that you lot would become turncoats some day, so I copied EVERY LAST ONE of the old commands into a Microsoft Word Document, and saved that onto my Google Drive. Now to do the same with all of the stories on the site, so that when the site goes down, I still have the stories.
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What?
Also, in case you haven't noticed, the comment you're replying to is nearly five years old. The bbcode in comments has changed formats since then.
And what are you on about, turncoats and whatever? And me running the site? What?
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seeing as how she's yet to teach her honorary little sister how to fly), and maybe, just maybe, she wants that chance with Spitfire to be able to adopt her honorary little sister? I dunno? I hold out hope that she's not actually what she is, but...
The reason that the author used Spitfire instead of Applejack is simple. Now Applejack has blackmail information to use against Spitfire! She can get Spitfire to do anything that she wants! I mean, sure, the author should've used Rainbow Dash and Spitfire, and had Rainbow Dash double cross Spitfire after they had successfully incapacitated Anon, so that Rainbow Dash could have what she really wants in becoming a Wonderbolt, which is a chance with Spitfire, (otherwise she's just an EXTREMELY selfish bitch, and I really don't want to believe that anymore...
that makes it kinda hard, as it shows that she is, in fact, the worst pony.
Fuck you motherfucker you just give me lung cancer, I mean why would you torture people with this shit of a story?
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This story is a masterpiece.