Humanism

A look back on what really happened 1000 years ago; the rise and fall of Humanism, and what lies beyond our mortal comprehension.

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Minalkra

Minalkra #1 · Oct 14th, 2013 · · ·

Hi! I'm here to say you've got a decent fic - but really a bit overdone in terms of some plot points. I like the attempt at 'otherworldly horror' and the tie-in to Luna's banishment - though replacing Nightmare Moon with this human-obsessed Luna is a bit much. It needs more 'incomprehensible madness-inducing weird' to really work. An interesting idea though.

What I DIDN'T like was the 'all humans are evil' angle. Sorry, just one of my pet peeves. It makes this feel a bit lazy. 'Humans are evil' is one of those really divisive things of this fandom; some embrace it as a plot-point, others embrace it as an actual fact *shudder* - some dislike it and others despise it. I'm afraid I'm one of the latter. If humans are as otherworldly as this writer makes them out to be, they aren't 'evil' so much as 'incomprehensible.' I suppose Celly could be simplifying the race in order to frighten her ponies away from a dangerous contact but still, the blanket proclamation makes it seem more moralistically based - that and however she knows humanity's goals make us seem right bastards.

It's not mechanically unsound - a bit simple in construction but that's nothing to be ashamed about. The reliance on description and the shortness of the same does hobble it a bit. It'd be a good idea if it was a bit more complex in plot and a tad more 'meaty' in substance. I can't in good conscience like it though. I'm sorry.

Wyrme

Wyrme #2 · Oct 14th, 2013 · · ·

Brimstonne

Brimstonne #3 · Oct 15th, 2013 · · ·

Truly we are evil in the minds of lower creatures. You cannot grow and advance as a species without causing harm. What Celestia is doing , is just setting them behind. Possibly to never reach the stars, and to be damned by the cold grasp of space.

Detective Chmilewsky