EDIT: Please note, the original story will not be continued, please refer to this blog post for updates on the future of the project.
Twilight Sparkle has never felt so lonely. After what happened at her brother’s wedding rehearsal she can’t but question her friends’ worth, and once she starts doubting one part of her life, second thoughts about the rest soon follow.
Some dilemmas can’t be solved alone, but luckily for her they don’t have to be as she meets an unusual new friend who encourages her to "go another route" and help her purge the very sin that Twilight experienced from this world.
Now, she works towards a new goal. Pretending nothing had changed she goes on with her everyday life, but secretly gathers new allies for her cause. Finding them is however just the beginning.
This is an alternate storyline that takes place during season 3, starting from the season 2 finale. This story assumes you are caught up with the show at these points. If you have not watched the season 2 finale or season 3, I suggest you watch those or at least read a summery before reading this story. This project ignores season 4 and Rainbow Rocks.
Special thanks to Corwin Freiss, former co-author of the original story.
One ? Zealotry
Don't know what the middle one is, is it German?
3879906 If I remember correctly, "ein sof" is Hewbrew for "infinite one". It might be Germen but it's more relevant later on.
Angels are scary
3880633 You don't know the half of it
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Yes, yes I do. Angels are the epitome of Light is Not Good, Knight Templar and Well Intentioned Extremist tropes.
For Goodness sake, Scintillant affirms Equestria (you know, the land of rainbows and friendship where most problems are solved in a 20 min episode) is ridden by sin and vice. How damn high are her standards?
3880709 For the purpose of this fic, let's assume Equestria in this universe is one of those Crappsacchrine Worlds. There's a lot more going on than meets the eye. Not all sunshine and rainbows. We wanted to take a darker tone with this story. I'm not writing this story alone.
The "angels" in this fic are not without their faults either. There's a reason the term "fallen angel" exists. I don't want to say too much without Corwin's input.
I think it's safe to say that your writing has improved a lot and that this is going to be a good/interesting story.
I look forward to reading more of this.
3881021 I'm not writing this project alone so that may be part of it.
Loving this... really loving this read.
3892185 Thanks for the complement but in all fairness, I can't accept all the credit. Corwin did about half of this chapter so if anything, it's him you should be complementing.
3892185 Your praise means a lot to us, we are doing our best
3894911 Thanks for catching that typo. I suppose that escaped both of us.
Anyway, thanks. Your praise means a lot to us. Three and a half months of planning and preparation seems to be paying off. Next chapter will be released Saturday, February 8.
Shouldn´t Celestia´s letter have italics?
3914334 It was supposed to. Does now.
hmmm did some get overeager or..overzealous?^^
3915256 We've been working on this since the end of October. Yeah, a little bit.
Double elements? This seems interesting!
I don't agree with the setup of this story (Twilight's distrust of her friends) but I'm curious to see where this goes. I'll be keeping an eye on it and let you know what I think.
Till next time!
3948873 But in all honesty, they haven't been very nice to her throughout the seasons. It starts with Ticket Master when not a single one aims to go to the Gala to spend time with her, but just for their selfish reasons. In Bridle Gossip they disregard her educated opinion entirely. In Return of Harmony they are swept by a chaos spell, but it only proves how weak they are in stress situations without her. Lesson Zero shows how little they care about her concerns, leading to a disaster. The list of their misbehavior continues on and what they did to her during the rehearsal is just the final straw.
I can already tell I'll enjoy this.
Starswirl, perhaps?
Also, I'm not sure why, but I read Scintillant's voice as the Son from The Clone Wars.
Interesting idea with the new elements. Makes for a good concept!
Interesting... I hope you'll update soon!
3969018 This story updates once a week, every Saturday usually before the new episodes air (I usually update at midnight at my time) so you don't have to worry about slow updates. For now at least, I can't promise we will always be ahead of schedule but we've already written up to chapter 12 so I'm pretty sure that won't be an issue.
Anyway, thanks for taking the time to read.
3950345 I made this character with Juno from Assassin's Creed in mind. Both in voice and cryptic speech patterns.
3970000 Certainly! It won't be until towards the halfway point though.
3970438 For the moment, I will neither confirm nor deny that.
Interesting!
I was expecting all the ponies Twilight would have to recruit would be characters we've seen before. Kinda refreshing to find that isn't the case. New faces help expand the universe and Canvas is interesting enough.
Celestia is coming across as rather paranoid. I'm curious to see where this is going.
Till next time!
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I think Twilight is even more paranoid regarding Celestia´s intentions... not that we can blame her at this point.
3987069 You'r not ENTIRELY wrong about that. Aside from Acrylic Canvas, the others are canon characters. I'm always a bit weary when it comes to creating OCs and I try to avoid using them. Here though, I didn't really feel the need to avoid it and at the point we've written up to in the story, I've grown to adore Canvas.
That said, we are going to be expanding on them. Each character has a bit of a subplot of their own in a matter of speaking (some larger than others), and I can almost guarantee you won't guess who Diligence is, at least on the first try (though I wouldn't be surprised if you did in all honesty).
There will be more to come and the next chapter features very little of Twilight herself.
Nice chapter!
Twilight has made a 180 degree shift, from "2+2=5 if the Princess says so" to "Cutting funds in libraries this year? clearly part of Celestia´s insidious plan for dumbing the ponies even more, making them easier to control".
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I love fanfiction sometimes. The ability to fill in the gaps where the show can't really puts my mind at ease. The fallout and rebuilding of Lightning Dust's character struck all the right notes. Kudos.
I noticed several instances of missing words, though. Things like "the", "an", "a", and so forth were not where I expected them. A second read-through should point them out for you.
Till next time!
4017775 I admittably like Lighting Dust quite a bit, even though she was kind of reckless, she and Rainbow shared some good chemistry while not being exactly the same.
As for the missing words, we kind of tired when it came to editing and even now, we may only fix them later, if we bother to at all. Thanks for the feedback though. It helps us.
well twilight seems to more and more become a spiteful bitch.
You know...for some reason I don't trust "Twilights thoughts" that are written cursive.....I trust then as much as I trust Scintillant.
4018240 She's not exactly very peachy right now, no. As a result, her mind is bending things to make them seem worse than they really are. However, her friends haven't been doing much to help that either.
I apologize if this fic seems overtly negative.
Very nice chapter!
4051456 Thank you.
Hey, um, not that we don't appreciate the praise but would it be possible to give a little constructive criticism on the chapters beyond just "nice chapter"? I don't mean to sound rude and I apologize if it comes off like that, but it helps us better. I can understand if you don't really want to though, you don't have to but it would be appreciated.
4051551 I'm sorry if my comments are a tad bit dry, but years of being a Demo-Beta rotten away all polite bones in my body.
So basically my 'Good Chapter' is the same as me giving you Oskar, Globus and 100ft. golden monumet with your name on it.
4051676 It's no problem
YOU WANT CRITICISM?
I thought some of the flashbacks about Trixie's history were a tad unnecessary. It's one of those cases where you can have the readers fill in the blanks and let them imagine the backstory. Because, really, this was information I had already guesses on my own.
Besides that, nice to see more bonding going on between our two plucky unicorns. Though in Trixie's case, it looks like she wants a little bit more than that...
Deadline is approaching. Let's see where this takes us!
4051868 Thanks for the feedback, it helps us. Next chapter introduce the next member of the little group Twilight is building up. I don't know how many will guess it before the chapter is released but I can assure you there is a reason for choosing them.
4051683 You know, I reread it several times, and have to say the reference to 'The Shining' was kind of funny. I hope to see more classic in the future!
4052882 I do have to say that it's been awhile since this chapter was written and it was written mostly by Corwin. I may have to be reminded of the reference you're talking about.
That said, thanks.
4052906 Trixie, axe, crazy voice...
4053072 Oh, that.
Nice!
Let me guess: Sunset Shimmer.