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Twilight sparkle is a very important pony
She has important royal duties: traveling around the world meeting with ambassadors from other nations, giving addresses, making decisions...She also has her friends.
Some things are more important than other things.


Rainbow Dash has watched herself and her friends grow, succeed, achieve everything they'd ever hoped to achieve. A successful farm, a career as a widely recognized designer, a career in the Wonderbolts, a way to care for even more animals, a beautiful family, a crown.
Sure they don't see each other as often, but the fact that they've achieved their dreams is the most important thing...right?

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 12 )

Lovely sentiment there. A nice little slice of life story that made me smile at the end.

Couple of comments for future stories -

1. Eeek. Neon blue text on a white background! Very difficult to read, though I understand why you did it. Maybe just pick a darker colour?
2. Spotted a couple of spelling mistakes in there, couple of places you could do with a grammar tweak, but nothing major. This is where a good pre-reader/editor is a godsend.

Other than that? I enjoyed it! Thanks for posting, have a moustache. :)

:moustache:

PZL be a go on right NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Thank you! :pinkiehappy: And I changed the color of the beginning text so it shouldn't be quite so eye-murdering to read now :twilightsheepish:

I have decided to make a book with a collections of stories from fimfiction. And you are one of the stories that is featured in it. But just need you permission before I add it in the book. Would it be ok?

And also, I would really like to see you finish the story before I finish making the book.

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That would be great :twilightsmile:
And the second part (Which I'm doing from Rainbow Dash's perspective) should be finished soon

Short... equal parts sad and fluffy... a bit of awesome mixed in... good sir, what have you created?

Awesome. Really, just plain awesome. I saw a few missing words dotted about, but no real errors that bugged me at all. Flow was good and pacing was perfect.

Well done!

I thick this is a Twidash story and do like go on with this

I am adding the second chapter in the story now.

You magnificent bastard :applecry: :fluttercry: :raritycry:
have 5 moustaches :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:

She barely had enough time to sputter some confused words before the alicorn threw her arms around her. They stood there for a while, two best friends. Not a Princess, not a Wonderbolt, just friends.

why did I cry so much at this part?
Good thing I was prepared! Has a box of tissues beside the computer.

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