During the war between Celestia and Nightmare Moon, Night mare forced Luna to conceive a heir. After realizing the war was lost Night mare sealed the colt in stasis and hide her weapon for her return a few thousand years later. But she never got the chance.
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So is he an alicorn or just a regular unicorn
Grammar and spelling, proofread
nice fic so far but you should probly work on describing escpeccily battle scenes
ok first let me say this is AMAZING so far and second you reeeally need to proofread but otherwise it amazing and might i add that you should write more than 1 chapter at a time more like write three then post them then write three more depending on how long the book is going to be. hope i helped
Both chapters have been proofed, they're waiting on you to update them.
there are a few mistakes young one but most impressive indeed i must say i admire your talent for writing quickly as you do...... it impresses Nightmare Sky and i to the point where we are glad we invited you to our clan.... you will do well.... and you will go far......
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Proofer here.
Author is being lazy and not updating with the proofed version, so the version you're looking at is untouched by me.
But Clan? Clan?!
What the hell have I gotten myself into now? Augh...
Am I in whatever clan this is by association? Do I want to be in it?
And a few mistakes? If I wasn't the proofer then I would have dropped this about 2 minutes in. Formatting errors abound, spelling errors abound, the whole thing is center tagged for some odd reason...the list goes on. I don't even know how Zet knows who I am! I assume it's because he saw me in the credits for Hollyfern's Moving On (Which you should read), or maybe I was mentioned somewhere in Sins of New Eden that I forgot about.
I fixed this whole damned thing, and in the process discovered that if I fix all the shit that's wrong with it, it's actually pretty good. Not Past Sins tier, not Allegrezza tier, not FO:E tier, but still worth the time I spend proofing and reading. Also it's fun to leave comments on the Google doc.
And Zet, put the new versions of C1 and C2 up before putting C3 up.
Wait, Nightmare Sky? The Nightmare Sky?
I jest. I've never heard of you. But please tell me that Night Sky is not a self-insert of the clan leader/co-leader.
OK guys I made all the changes and I would like to give props to my proof reader, Psyentific. Thank you for helping me.
that is the sweetest way to end a chapter ever keep goin man
whee
THAT WAS BADASS!!!!!!!!!!!!! I FUCKING LOVE NIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MAKE MORE CHAPTERS QUICKLY PLEASE!!!!!!!!
a little bit short if you ask me but still great if anything
keep up de goood work mon me is waitin for de next chapta mon dont leave meh hangin please?
but either way just take ys time and everythin will turn out alright in de end mon. just remember to check ya spellin when yur finished mon.
a little bit short if you ask me but still great if anything
keep up de goood work mon me is waitin for de next chapta mon dont leave meh hangin please?
but either way just take ys time and everythin will turn out alright in de end mon. just remember to check ya spellin when yur finished mon. sorry wrong face mon
A very nice story, can't wait to see more of it.
A few spelling mistakes, but nothing too bad. I know you've probably heard this a bunch, but take your time with the chapters to correct those mistakes. It also helps to reread what you wrote after you finished to find any errors.
Over all, good story. Looking forward to future updates.