It has been some time since Flim and Flam left Ponyville, but now they're back. They bring with them an industrial revolution that quickly reforms the very foundation of Equestria and its citizens. It is up to the main 6, and many other ponies to figure out how to stop the madness that new technology brings to their world of magic.
NOTE: This is in an alternate time line where the Flim Flam brothers lost the bet against Applejack.
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You should really check your spelling a whole lot more before you post a story. Also, maybe it's just me but I really don't see anything wrong with Flim & Flam's Grapple. It's just a new kind of fruit which totally doesn't threaten the apple farm.
3789068 Thank you for notifying me. Also, the Grapple is a new product, and people (or in this case ponies) normally go for the next new thing. This would adversely cause sales to drop for the apple family.
ok i'll bite THE FUCK JUST HAPPENEDrainbowhuh:
3951356 Whatever do you mean?
Also, nice reaction faces.
3951542 well the whole PINKIE GETS SERIOUS FACE STUFF and THE NO-SHOW OF THE AIRSHIP so in conclusion WHAT. THE. FUCK
and also can mah OC be in the story?
PLZ PLZ
3951635 I already have the story planed out in my head. Everything that happens will tie into the story latter, but for now just try to guess what will happen.
Maybe the Dr. Whooves reference won't tie in. That was me just having a little fun.
3951707 plz add my OC PLZ
3951778 It may be possible, but no promises. Any specific details that I would need to know?
3951871 well he is the Pegasus on my profile pic and his attitude is very brave, stubborn, and he loves to laugh in the face of danger (and he LOVES building steampunk flying machines) and he is trained in combat and when he smashes his front hooves down hard enough he can cause small tremors that shake the ground and cause his enemy to be disorientated and nausea but when you mess with his loved ones his tremors can impale enemys on red crystals NO USEING WITHOUT MY PERMISSION HE MY OC
3952161 Wow...
Quiet a powerful OC.This might make it difficult to place him in the story. Also, you forgot to add his name.
3952194 whoops you can tone him down a bit and his name is LightningDash (no not a relative of RD)
3952200 Okay, that will make my job way easier. I might be able to find a spot in chapter six; because, I already finished most of chapter five, and crap hits the fan in that chapter!
3952267 ok YAY
OH SHIT
3954784 I know!
3952385 But again, no promises.
3956481 and btw can he be a good guy?
3961395 That what I had in mind.
3962323 YAY
3962691 How did you like the new chapter?
I haven't read any of this story, but from one writer to another, I have to say that first impressions are everything. And your first impression, the story's description, is a little bit lack luster. Fix this immediately, it's a definite turn-off for any potential new readers. Just as they say in business, the hard part is getting your foot in the door, or in this case, a reader to actually open the first chapter and start reading.
See like, when I saw these mistakes in the description, I can only wonder how bad the errors in the actual story are. And I guarantee you I'm not the only one thinking that. I'll give you a thumb and a read later for now.
4021329 Sorry, my computer likes to mess up while I am typing, and auto correct does things with out notifying me. Thank you for pointing this out.
4021527 Boy, you're not kidding, are you?
4021245 EPIC AND MOREEEEE ALSO why did you not have him say his full name? ahh wtf i dont care as long as it gets mentioned atleast once i'll be happy
4022208 Fixed.
402279 ok AWESOME
Some spelling errors, but otherwise this is awesome! I love the story so far!!
4152866 I'm sorry for the spelling errors, my computer likes to not tell me about that stuff.
Chapter 7 is finished! Get ready for twists and turns in this chapter!
4251741 wait WHAT!?!!??!?? WHAT HAPPENED TO DASHIE!!!!! also epic chapter MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR
4255339 Any guess of what happened to Rainbow, or who the assassin was?
4255895 well I think I know she got her eye operated on and it made her controllable
4256855 What about the assassin? Also, great guess.
4257743 didn't look at the description
HOLY FUCKING SHIT BALLZ YOU UPDATED THE STORY YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Finally, a new chapter after so many months! Hope you all enjoy!
5241973 Awwwww I was hoping that LD would appear, anyways, this was still good, besides the amount of spelling errors.
7/10, Epic