Good start. I like the banter and politician's characterization. Sam feels a little weak to me though, mostly because I don't quite understand him yet. That obviously will change in future chapters but right now I am unsure if I should "root" for him yet other than that he's the protagonist.
On the other hand we're still in the prologue/exposition bit, the real meat of the story is too come. Have a like and a fave for a decent beginning, I look forward to more.
Really liking it so far. Gotta say, Sam is a dick, but the kind of dick I have always been friends with: a little rude but not enough to be mean, a pretty quick wit, rather cynical, and sarcastic to no end. I love it.
“Being called a douche by a politician? I really have sunk low. Carry on.”
“Are you using that cunning now? Are you manipulating me in some way to further your own goals and career?”
“At least you’re honest about it…”
I love this kind of snarky banter.
On a less pleasant note, I can only imagine that if this happens in our version of reality, it will be a lot less pleasant in regards to the zealots and career politicians. Plus, even if cooler heads prevail, they would make it so only the rich, powerful types could gain access, not some rube from nowheres-ville (speaking of myself).
Whelp,
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I do, however feel that this should not be first person. Just my opinion though!
You got my attention chap, now be a gentlemanly fellow and deliver
You got one thing wrong.
In the Gentleman story the character had to go through a portal to get to Equestria then.
It's not an island that appeared, it's in another freaking universe that's accessible by portal.
lol that last line
always enjoy a good gentlemen story
Interesting.
I shall be watching this story with interest.
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An island appeared, and the portal appeared on the island.
YEAS. But please no first person. That is all.
Actually, keep it First Person. It'll look weird if you change it in the next chapter.
Pretty good start. I was laughing alot during this chapter. It's about time someone wrote a story about Lyra in the Gentlemenverse.
Keep going.
Good start. I like the banter and politician's characterization. Sam feels a little weak to me though, mostly because I don't quite understand him yet. That obviously will change in future chapters but right now I am unsure if I should "root" for him yet other than that he's the protagonist.
On the other hand we're still in the prologue/exposition bit, the real meat of the story is too come. Have a like and a fave for a decent beginning, I look forward to more.
Really liking it so far. Gotta say, Sam is a dick, but the kind of dick I have always been friends with: a little rude but not enough to be mean, a pretty quick wit, rather cynical, and sarcastic to no end. I love it.
Like a few of the others i enjoy the snarkiness of the main character and i'm just waiting to see what you do with it, a watch and fave from moi.
really am loving this first chapter
Hooked and completely reeled in by this chapter, loving the characters so far. I do believe I'll stalk you now.
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This human - I like him
I love this kind of snarky banter.
On a less pleasant note, I can only imagine that if this happens in our version of reality, it will be a lot less pleasant in regards to the zealots and career politicians. Plus, even if cooler heads prevail, they would make it so only the rich, powerful types could gain access, not some rube from nowheres-ville (speaking of myself).