Okay, I kind of missed what the heck happened at the evening while the fillies were drunk.

so far, this is pretty good
i bet i would still like this,even if it wasn't a clopfic

Berry Blast, Shining Star, Crimson Gust, Fox Trot, Gentle Breeze, and . . . Jonathon. One of these names isn't like the others, one of these names doesn't belong.

a tasty, if slightly saltier snack
a tasty, if slightly saltier snack
a tasty, if slightly saltier snack

What the fuck, man...
Apart from that, this coincides with my fetishes quite nicely.

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If I didn't know Johnathan's were a type of apple that would've been very weird.

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To be honest, I instantly had trouble keeping track of who was who, mostly by how their names were put together. By how name/title logic goes, wouldn't Berry Blast be Berry Pie? Then, wouldn't Shining Star be Shining Sparkle? You see where I'm going with this.

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Wouldn't Shining Armor be Shining Sparkle- Oh wait, that's a canon name.

They’d gathered around the fire pit, made sure to place an open bag of marshmallows where each of them could easily reach, and taken care of their collective problem one by one.

I... I really want to read about that. A lot
I don't suppose that could be a bonus chapter, maybe? If it's no trouble.

Can you seriously not be consistent with the spelling of Jonathan?

Jonathan
Jonathon
Jonothan

Seriously stick to ONE spelling of the name...

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The first part of THIS. Is this a thing? Is this what you dang kids do nowadays? Just ... I can't even.

Also ... kids don't copy parents directly. We should see echoes of the parents in them, not R63 versions-just-younger. And if Berry makes one more '-y' word or rhyming play on a name, I'm desk flipping. Just saying, PP doesn't do that ALL the time. Time for chapter 2.

EDIT: NOPE. NOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPE. I'm all for exploring paraphilias and such (heck, mother-son incest as a concept is an amazing thing because of our heavy male-centric population on this site as well as the incorrect sociological disassociation of young male-older female with pedophilia) but this ... Chapter two killed any hope in me, sorry. The set-up is important but there was no set-up. Just ... rape.

EDIT2: And I'm not necessarily one of those 'art in non-art' types that like to pull apart fics to see what tropes are used but I need more than just this. Again, sorry.

im confused on which stallion is the son of which of the mane 6 really someone please help me

3407234 They relieve their 'urges' on a bag of marshmallows, and, I believe that because the cider dulled their minds, proceeded to consume the marshmallows covered in their..urges.....yeah (>.<)

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Shining Star = Twilight's Son
Gentle Breeze= Fluttershy's son
Jonathon = Applejack's
Foxtrot = Rarity's
Berry Blast = Pinkie's
Crimson Gust= Rainbow's

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They relieve their 'urges' on a bag of marshmallows

So was Foxtrot thinking of his aunt's squishy marshmallow butthole?

Berry, unfazed by the question, gave his head three big nods in the affirmative. “Yep! She’s been super down lately, my papa hasn’t been home for a long time. And it’s really hitting her super duper hard.”

"Oh come on! you take one wrong turn through time and get lost for a few weeks and suddenly you......re...... the....... bad guy......?" *looks around*
"Whoops! wrong timeline! my bad! Carry on!"

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It's all good. I lost my Vortex Manpulator a while ago. So, I kind of know about mistakes lke this, as it happened to me a LOT.

The younger colt smirked. “She’d probably be happy that I’m expanding my vocabulary.”

Best line because it's true.

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The first part of THIS. Is this a thing? Is this what you dang kids do nowadays? Just ... I can't even.

this is all me and my friends do
you just jelly baby