WoW i lol'd so hard when she asked him "the question" anyways, it coming up to look really nice. And i'm also sorry for whats happenning at your school hope you have good luck....
It was really well written, but I think at the end, Spike's dialogue should have been a bit more nervous sounding, like for instance, add more ellipses("...") to the 'less innocent' parts of the conversation, because, come on: who could possibly have a conversation like that as casually as he just did? And replace the "well, duh..." with something like "well, um... y-yeah..." and make him stutter a bit, because heis a bit confused, right? Just a little tip, but overall, I think it will be a pretty good story
WoW i lol'd so hard when she asked him "the question"
anyways, it coming up to look really nice.
And i'm also sorry for whats happenning at your school
hope you have good luck....
re futa pairing same sex or straight? i googled it and found a lot of S&%$
It was really well written, but I think at the end, Spike's dialogue should have been a bit more nervous sounding, like for instance, add more ellipses("...") to the 'less innocent' parts of the conversation, because, come on: who could possibly have a conversation like that as casually as he just did?
And replace the "well, duh..." with something like "well, um... y-yeah..." and make him stutter a bit, because heis a bit confused, right?
Just a little tip, but overall, I think it will be a pretty good story