Atleast 2 new chapters will be uploaded Sunday evening ( CET ) and they will be longer
Shoot away your critics
And of course post the shippings you wish me to write

...Oh god. Ponyville is gonna become the next setting of the Ka-Mare-Sutra.

There is a load of errors for this story which I can't explain all in one go, but I'll try.

There is loads of spelling and grammatical errors found nearly everywhere, I'd suggest you need to download a spell-checker or atleast find someone who is willing to edit the story for you and fix up the holes in the quilt.

The pacing is awkwardly fast, I can't really get into the story if it doesn't slow down and get into detail about what is going on and how the characters feel when they are in certain situations. You need to slow down the story and add more description into what the characters are doing.

The stories description doesn't really explain much, and nor does the story in itself.

I read through the entire first chapter and I read something about water and it had some steroids in it, but that was it. You didn't really go into detail or explain how or what made it work at all. You need to explain these things to help shape up the story.

If you are looking for a shipping chapter, just tell me what is the limits and stuff.

No Pedophilia?, Incest? stuff like that so no one can get their hands of a chapter that might downrate the story.

....this wont end well

It's... interesting, to say the least. The sentence structure was a bit off at times, but other than that, good. I'd advise you to double-space between paragraphs. Tracked, just to see where it's going.

LOL. I would leave it a that, but you may think I was insulting you, so I actually think this is kinda funny. I don't think ill read more then the first chapter because...Well, clop. I don't mind it if there's an emotional connection between the characters, but anyway im rambling. First chapter was pretty interesting. Ill just leave a thumb up and go visit my own little world. But hey, if you happen to post a VinylxTwilight. I would be willing to read it.

252088 Sadly I've started learning English quite late so this might be an explanation why I made so many grammatical errors but there's a buddy of mine who would be willing to check it
As for the fast pace it's a result of me writing this in fifteen minutes because my laptop battery was running low
Thanks for your comment, I appreciate it and I'll do my best to improve my writing

All I can think ofnow is the MASSIVE amount of SHIPPING heading this way.

Everypony x Everypony

Not bad. Tracking

o ditzy
good story so far

I smell shennanigans...
And sex.

Must has DitzyDoc and CheeriMac!

lol oh derpy you did it agein :P

wait does this mean the doctor will have some fun with his assitant? >:P

i have a bad feeling about this