1st Verse
Dear Rainbow Dash
It’s Sunday and the skies are gloomy. It was gloomy yesterday too, as was the day before. Every day is gloomy now; there’s no speedy pegasus pony to clear away the clouds. No beautiful rainbow to cut through the oppressive grey that rests above our town. It just sits there, an all-encompassing presence reflecting the mood we all share and reminding us of your absence. I don’t know if its existence is to have fun at our expense or to express this burden of pain we all feel, but either way I don’t care; I just want it to go away.
The Mayor has yet to assign a new weather pony. I think she has refrained from it out of respect. Surprising really, considering how much trouble you have created for her in the past; with the damage caused by failed tricks and putting off cloud-clearing to the last minute, you’d think she’d be happy you’re gone and that she can hire someone who does their job on time, every time. But I think she’s hurting just as much as the rest of us. And even if nothing else in this whole world mattered to her except finding the perfect replacement, she knows she never could. She knows, just like I do – there’ll never be another pegasus as fast as you. There’ll never be another who can clear the obstructions from the path of the Sun’s rays like you could.
No one as loyal to Ponyville as you were.
You’ve said several times in the past that you’d never leave Ponyville ‘hanging’. That you’d never leave your friends ‘hanging’. We all believed you; we all trusted you. So where are you now? Why did you have to go? We need you Rainbow Dash. I need you. So why did you leave? I didn’t want you to go, and I would do anything to get you back. Anything at all.
I just want my Dashie back.
I can’t sleep anymore. It’s so dark and cold, and I’m so tired, but every time I get into that big bed I’m reminded of just how lonely I am. There’s no one to chase my fears away. No one to protect me from the endless shadows that haunt me night and day. I’m scared Dash. I’ve tried to laugh it all away, to giggle at the many ghosties that surround me, but without you around I just can’t do it. You gave me a reason to smile. You gave me my first smile. You gave me the energy to get up in the morning, to bounce around everywhere, to throw all the many parties I have thrown as often as I did; to be the hyper pink pony I’m known as. You’ve told me I’m random before; well, you were the source of that randomness. You were my drive. With you gone, I’m deprived of that drive. I don’t even have the energy to move the hair from out of my face.
There’s no chance of you coming back though, is there? No super-secret-ultra-rare flower in the Everfree Forest that can bring you back; no magic that Twilight or even the two princesses could wield to bring about your return. You’re gone – taken away by darkness blacker than any that Nightmare Moon ever hoped to create.
You’re never coming back. It’s so hard, so incredibly painful to know that Dashie, but it’s true.
Sometimes I wonder - would it be easier if I joined you?
Your best pal forever,
Pinkie Pie
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Based entirely on the song Gloomy Sunday. If you know that song, you have a good idea of how this story will go.
This was written randomly on a whim, which is why it's... weird.
This story makes me SAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAD
Its Beautiful. 'Randomly on a whim' If this is what you create on a whim, then I am eager to see what you can write if you put your mind to it. I would have teared up if i haven't just read My Little Dashie moments ago, I am currently running low on tears today. everything about this short little sweet/sad story is perfect, how mayor is grieving, how pinkie expresses herself, and at the dark last sentence. I hope you have a really gifted mind to be able to write this way, and not an experience to know how it feels.
Bravo and encore! I look forward to more shorts like this.
More. Now. Please? Beautiful.
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I did like this, but feel some obligation to voice complaints anyways. Know I do it despite enjoying this.
At times throughout the story, the diction seems to switch a bit drastically. There are parts where it is a far simpler diction and sentence structure, one perhaps more easily attributed to Pinkie Pie, but then it shifts into more complex sentences. It isn't an awful thin, but it felt a little jarring at times.
Again, this is well written over all, and I really did enjoy it.
249498 Not a fan of the song or the fact that I wrote it on a whim? Or that I called it weird?
EDIT: Nevermind, just checked the email notifications and saw there was some spam on here that got deleted before I saw it.
250484 That was something I struggled with. I had to keep going back and changing words or descriptions I had written as I thought they sounded too advanced for Pinkie to know/use. With that in mind, and the fact that it's all a letter, I had considered making it Twilight the writer instead of Pinkie; but, bearing in mind what the song is about, and that I love Rainbow Pie, I stuck with Pinkie Pie. I suppose in my mind I had the idea of her being both deadly serious while still having a bit of a mad imagination as an excuse for the more complex parts that I ended up keeping, but evidently I never actually thought about making that come across in the story. Hopefully I can improve on that problem in the next chapter.
Good first chapter. You really know how to write Pinkie in-character. Thumbs-up and a track.
Oh, you too wrote inspired by Music? What a coincidence. I love Emilie Autumn's rendition of this song.
Nice chapter. I can see the correlation to the lyrics pretty well.
251809 Got to love Emilie Autumn's voice - having just her voice, and no instruments, in her version of Gloomy Sunday is really nice.
All of the 3 fics I have uploaded so far, and the following chapters I have planned, have all been either based on or inspired by music. The other two were both based/inspired by my favourite artist though - Voltaire. I listen to his music all the time (literally, I pretty much forget about the other music I have) and since I gave writing a shot, I keep thinking of different ways to turn his songs into stories somehow.
EDIT: Or using the lyrics from his songs as both references and descriptions of something in a story. His lyrics are brilliant.
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I find a slight irony in this being PinkieXDash with Dash dead. Just a little.
but I completely agree, PinkieXDash is best mane 6 ship
251886 It's PinkieXDash by technicality I spose
And hey, the song isn't over yet.
251884 Ahhhh... Voltaire. That dude's got some nice musics, doesn't he.
I'm already tracking this and hoping for more.
You write a lot inspired by music, eh? I guess we both aren't so different. Except mines are all one-shots.
But, as they say, great minds think alike.
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never heard the song before :P
probably won't until this finishes, just because
I'm gonna have another bout of Sad Pinkie-induced insomnia tonight...
*cries*
" You gave me my first smile. " That is a true statement from the show. The Sonic Rainboom did that...
This is excellent...moving up.
Silver out!