3034822 Thanks for being a complete tool dude, everyone wants to be just like you! And who gives a flying fuck if an author likes his/her own story? If you have a problem with something so miniscule as that, then you have problems. Also you can't talk shit since you haven't written a single story. Go write one then talk smack.
Thank you and enjoy your pathetic day.
Now for my comment on this story. Like. Favorite. Read later. Loved Changeling Heart and I hope this lives up to that story. Continue!
3039737 i plan on making the story longer in the comming chapters, this one was just the first, so i thought i make it, too the point type thing, do not worry. they will be longer (or ill try to make them longer)
Somehow, the formatting and the mistakes here and there made my reading a bit painful. Maybe that's just me being a Grammar Nazi but at some points I really saw some parts that just messed with my head.
The plot seems good, that I can give away but in my personal opinion, the overall grammar could be better. The formatting doesn't really bother me as much as the grammar did at some points. My main advice right now is to get an editor or proofreader to get rid of some issues with you grammar.
Soooo, they know the combined changeling armies are coming already... and the Princesses don't think to launch a preemptive strike?
I mean, come on, the stupid bug-ponies are just massing in a nice clump, a lovely target for a solar flare. Or why not come themselves, with the Bearers already wearing the Elements and just blast the crap out of them?
Where's the changelings' subterfuge? The masses of secret spies and saboteurs? Their greatest asset is their ability to physically blend in perfectly, and once more they fail to exploit it. An open attack against Shining and Cadence is utterly foolhardy and SHOULD be futile.
Seriously, have the changelings still not figured out that SHAPESHIFTING makes infiltration a whole lot easier than open movement? Assuming the ponies haven't developed a perfect changeling detection method (which I'd think would be a top priority when dealing with a race of shape-shifting parasites), the best strategy for the bugs would be to slip into the Palace or wait until the blissfully ignorant royal couple is outside and then assassinate them. The drones would of course be captured or die in the process, but what's the loss of a handful of throw-away soldiers compared to eliminating the two greatest defense assets of the Crystal Empire?
Then, once they're dead, move in your disguised army and attack openly, swiftly taking the territory in the confusion.
Chrysalis' strategy in the TV show succeeded in spite of her own poor intelligence-gathering solely because the ponies had no idea changelings existed. Moving openly now would be suicide for the changelings if the Princesses used all the means at their disposal to stop them.
Not to mention, I'm certain other races aren't exactly fond of changelings either. Enlist a few dragons, the griffons, the minotaurs... against the already lessened numbers of changelings, equip your army with amulets to detect changeling magic or have unicorns cast widespread disconcealment spells... it'd be a massacre.
No, in open combat the changelings are strategically outclassed dramatically. The fact that 6 mares with no military training bucked the crap out of dozens of them speaks volumes about average changeling combat capability. They're like Zerglings, really, only useful in a massive rush of numbers against poorly defended targets.
It's a good thing I'm not evil. Nopony would stand a chance.
Well as i like to say "IIIIIIt's Show Time!"
Four views and four likes within a minute of posting?
Stop upvoting your own shit.
Continue its so awesome!
3034822 im not *Raise eyebrow* im just as confused as you are
You dont know how happy you made me when you posted this . I mean this is gonna be an awesome story i
just feel it . Hope to see more updates
Ps. Nice cover art
3034802 very much
3034841 Thanks, i was looking for a good picture that would protray Shadow rather nicely and well, found this
3034822 The counter doesn't register people who have view it fast enough
3034822
The author can't like his own story. Maybe, just maybe, there were four people who read the previous story and like this one as default.
3034822
Thanks for being a complete tool dude, everyone wants to be just like you!
And who gives a flying fuck if an author likes his/her own story? If you have a problem with something so miniscule as that, then you have problems.
Also you can't talk shit since you haven't written a single story. Go write one then talk smack.
Thank you and enjoy your pathetic day.
Now for my comment on this story.
Like.
Favorite.
Read later.
Loved Changeling Heart and I hope this lives up to that story. Continue!
Read the story and man I can't wait to see what you do next.
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My reaction
3034822 Get yo scum ass outta here bitch.
I came!
3036969 I saw
3036984 I witnessed scripture
sweet it has a kick ass cover art pic already
why are most featured stories all so interesting and yet so short? I hate waiting for months before it reach decent length.
3037922
3040123 lol
Ok... This reads decently.
Plot seems solid as well.
I'll be watching this. Let's see what you got.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3040218 You've earned ALL of my hate. It was just... there... and you... didn't... and then... HHAAATTTEEEEEEEE
3039737 i plan on making the story longer in the comming chapters, this one was just the first, so i thought i make it, too the point type thing, do not worry. they will be longer (or ill try to make them longer)
3035605 *Watches you eeeeeeee as i smile* thanks
Excellent! I can't wait for more!
Somehow, the formatting and the mistakes here and there made my reading a bit painful. Maybe that's just me being a Grammar Nazi but at some points I really saw some parts that just messed with my head.
The plot seems good, that I can give away but in my personal opinion, the overall grammar could be better. The formatting doesn't really bother me as much as the grammar did at some points. My main advice right now is to get an editor or proofreader to get rid of some issues with you grammar.
Otherwise, keep up the good work, mate.
Soooo, they know the combined changeling armies are coming already... and the Princesses don't think to launch a preemptive strike?
I mean, come on, the stupid bug-ponies are just massing in a nice clump, a lovely target for a solar flare. Or why not come themselves, with the Bearers already wearing the Elements and just blast the crap out of them?
Where's the changelings' subterfuge? The masses of secret spies and saboteurs? Their greatest asset is their ability to physically blend in perfectly, and once more they fail to exploit it. An open attack against Shining and Cadence is utterly foolhardy and SHOULD be futile.
Seriously, have the changelings still not figured out that SHAPESHIFTING makes infiltration a whole lot easier than open movement? Assuming the ponies haven't developed a perfect changeling detection method (which I'd think would be a top priority when dealing with a race of shape-shifting parasites), the best strategy for the bugs would be to slip into the Palace or wait until the blissfully ignorant royal couple is outside and then assassinate them. The drones would of course be captured or die in the process, but what's the loss of a handful of throw-away soldiers compared to eliminating the two greatest defense assets of the Crystal Empire?
Then, once they're dead, move in your disguised army and attack openly, swiftly taking the territory in the confusion.
Chrysalis' strategy in the TV show succeeded in spite of her own poor intelligence-gathering solely because the ponies had no idea changelings existed. Moving openly now would be suicide for the changelings if the Princesses used all the means at their disposal to stop them.
Not to mention, I'm certain other races aren't exactly fond of changelings either. Enlist a few dragons, the griffons, the minotaurs... against the already lessened numbers of changelings, equip your army with amulets to detect changeling magic or have unicorns cast widespread disconcealment spells... it'd be a massacre.
No, in open combat the changelings are strategically outclassed dramatically. The fact that 6 mares with no military training bucked the crap out of dozens of them speaks volumes about average changeling combat capability. They're like Zerglings, really, only useful in a massive rush of numbers against poorly defended targets.
It's a good thing I'm not evil. Nopony would stand a chance.
3034822
I wasn't aware it was possible for the same person to give four upvotes...
oh got the names the names they burn my eyes !! the scream I AM AN OC LOOK AT ME I AM COOL
but despise this it ok