Mentally abused by his father and verbally by his classmates, David finds the only ray of light in his life in My Little Pony, particularly the cheerful Pinkie Pie. But after long, gruesome days, David slips deeper into depression and contemplates suicide. One morning, David wakes to find a solitary Pinkie Pie plushie sitting at the foot of his bed, with a note that says only "Hug this when you need a friend." Of course, David casually tosses this aside, but is oddly compelled to try it.
Chapters (7)
Wow, such realistic parents. This story's got me hooked!
3035725 Thanks! That's what I was going for! I'll be putting in more chapters soon.
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Uhmmm... I'm pretty sure his comment was sarcasm.
You've got some major issues with this story but I don't know if you're ready to hear them.
But not as abysmal as your spelling.
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3036038 Go ahead, I need the criticism.
3036081 Yeah, sorry. My bad. I'll fix it.
Meh, usual BiE story, with all the flaws of the brand.
3035851 Note the sarcastic Applejack face, numbfuck.
3038422 Hey, could you tell me what those flaws are, and what is BiE anyway, I'm just getting into FiMfics.
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Okay, but remember you asked for it.
What we have here is a standard BiE or Brony in Equestria fic with all the baggage that goes along with such a thing. The BiE is the retarded younger brother of the HiE which is the Human in Equestria story. A good rule of thumb is that 95% of the HiE stories are absolute crap. I don't mean just bad, they're crap in that they're nothing more than wish fulfillment of the worst order and allows some sad virgin to bone his favorite pony. But most of them can be considered better than the BiE because we have the addition of somebody that already knows about the show and the characters. This is bad.
To add insult to injury you give him the cliche sad backstory. His mother was murdered by a convenient plot device. It's a minor step up from the typical "died of an illness / accident" trope but it's still contrived. The result is a sad childhood and a father who is now abusive for whatever reason. Seriously, they father is just a two dimensional asshole who serves nothing of the plot other than to be the antagonist to your OC who may or may not be yourself. And we haven't even touched the actual story yet.
Sad Emo kid who has a terrible life loves MLP and it's the only bright part of his existence. He's a sad kid. His father hates him. He's unpopular at school. Blah blah blah. Somehow Celestia knows about our world, imagination is a gateway and she had been watching young Emo for the longest time.
Instead of bringing him to Equestria she sends a plushie in the form of Pinkie Pie. Said plushie can turn into the real Pinkie Pie through.... magic and he now has a friend. A friend for only so many days a week and only if she wants to come.
(*Sigh*). I really have a problem with this story in part because it's cliche but also because it's simply uninteresting. When you get down to it, there's no hook here to keep the reader wanting to come back to read this and somehow feel for your OC. In short, this story is crap.
Upvoted and will read later just because you used my name. (my real first name that is)
3040527 You don't have to upvote if you don't think it's good, but thanks!
Also, I like your profile pic.
3040316 Well, I'm sorry you feel that way. Thanks for the criticism instead of just telling me my story was bad and leaving it at that.
I hope that later additions to the story will make it more exciting for you, but the most recent chapter is really just frame work for the next one. Sorry. I didn't mean to waste your time. The main character is not based off of me. That would be sad. No, just something I thought of. I wasn't going for cliché, but I was just working off of what I like in a story with feels. You might not like the ending if you think this is cliché, sorry. This is my first FiMfiction, and I'm glad for all the help I've gotten. I'm sure It'll help me later I'm my writings later. I don't really care about the hate or anything, I think it's good as long it's actual criticism. 
Also, I like these emoticons.
3040280 Sorry, but do you really have to say those things. I apologize for my mistake.
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The story may be bad, but it's not as bad as your awful comment. Seriously, there are better ways to get your opinions around.
3045791 Oh...ummm.... thanks? What's bad about it? Could you be specific, also could you tell me what I should write after I finish this story?
3040759 Actually, the fact that I read it means that I like it. I would've down voted and quit reading it after the first chapter if I didn't like it.
3050745 Well thank you, I'm glad to see how well my first story is doing.
I just want to thank every one who thought my story was good. We broke today!
17 likes to 15 dislikes!
I can't believe how well it's doing. It's not done yet, but expect the final chapters soon! Thank you everyone, it's so great that even some of the people who didn't like my story told me what was wrong with it! I appreciate everything! This is ridiculous, I'm acting like this is some kind of big deal. Sorry to waste your time with this long message just glorifying myself.
sequl maby?
A little rushed, but that's okay.
3066835 Really? Sorry, I might put in more side stories, you know, like different things that he and Pinkie did while he was human. I don't know yet.
3066615 You gotta tell me what you want in it. I might take it in my own direction, but you have to tell me if you want Calamine stories of David and Pinkie stories. I just want to make this interesting for you guys.
Despite being a somewhat acceptable story, the ending sucks. If it ended at Senior Graduation, I would have given you a thumbs up, but sadly, the ending is just THAT bad.
Not a bad story, though, IMHO.
3067132 Is it really that bad? Sorry to disappoint, but I figured you guys would want some closure. Sorry.
My brain...chemist...chemical...My Chemical Romance? It's a longshot, but that's how my brain works.
That ending was a bit cliché.
I agree with the ones who say this was a bit cliché. If you had ended with Tia saying that they had to separate and then begin with him hugging the toy a few years down the road, it wouldn't be a cliché.
Don't Worry Darksied
your story is amazing 
3068291 It's just to bad they broke up. I'm still sad about that.
3070917 Thanks, I appreciate the help I've gotten from other FiMfiction writers. You guys rock!
3071667 Thanks Death, glad to see you enjoyed it. I think my writing will slow down a bit since it's back to school, but I promise I'll make more!
You're welcome!
... You know, I have a few stories that I'm not going to finish... You want them? I could edit them for you.
3073256 I know, right?
3073285 Sure, I'll take'm. I'm sure they're fantastic.
3078438 Just give me your email and I'll add you to the docs and then give you ownership
3078913 Yeah, I'll send my E-mail to ya.
Sorry, haven't read the story (it's not my type), but I just have a question about the group placement of this. This story had more upvotes than down, so how is it in Plan 9? I might know if I read it (maybe not) but the rules say the story needs 10 more downvotes than upvotes.
3090973 Plan 9?
3094878 Plan 9 from Equestria, the group it's in.
3094885 I'm not in any groups, so maybe some one took it there? Can it work like that? I know I certainly didn't put it there.
3094895 Yeah, they can. If someone believes that a fic belongs in a certain group, they recommend it.
3094907 So, what is Plan 9 for?
3095368 Um, I don't really want to explain it. I guess I can tell you, but just know that your story probably doesn't belong in there anymore.
It's a group dedicated to getting terrible stories and showing them off. Not to mock them, but to celebrate them. Some people just like to read bad stories from time to time. Stories admitted have to have 10 more downvotes than upvotes.
Anyways, the reason I'm asking is because I want to know if it's still supposed to be in there. Now it's an obvious 'no', I was just wanting to see if anyone was paying attention to the stories still in there. You see, one of my stories was put in there, but I messed up on it and I wanted to revise it. I wanted to see if perhaps my story were to get at least decent that it would be removed. May be a little selfish, I know, but I wanted to put work into this story and I can't do that if I feel like no one's reading it or going to read it (unless they're expecting it to be terrible)..
3095431 I understand, I think. So you want to put some work into my story? I mean, not to be harsh or rude or anything, but no, I don't think so. I like this story the way it is. I put a lot of time and work into this story, and I don't think I even want to change it, much less, someone else. But I'm planning a new project, which is basically a sequel of this. Since I'm back to school, I don't have as much time as before, so I'd very much approve of an experienced co-writer. If you'd like to help, PM me.
3095544 No, in the last paragraph of that comment I was talking about my story.
Technically, talking about helping with a story you're writing is a different conversation altogether, but I am willing to help other authors if they want it.
3095578 Oh, ok, that makes a little more sense. It's really up to you if you want help me out, but PM if you want to!
3095956 Okay, but first I have to read this one to understand what's going on. I find it kind of funny that I came just to ask a question and now I'm reading the story.
Well, it doesn't look half bad at least