Abandoned by his birth parents, Sky Shard begins his uneventful life. A pegasus raised raised by a bunch of earth ponies. Oblivious to his past, Sky just seeks to live his life as it is. If only it were so simple... How will his adopted family and friends react, when they see everything they love threatened by a true force of nature?
Follow Sky in a tale of joy and sorrow, love and betrayal, power and weakness. Read and learn what it means to be one with The Storm.
(Amazing cover image by the very talented Lusewing)
Chapters (9)
like it.
always like some twidash in there.
may we have some more?
So far so good...
...but we only have about 1k to start. Need more before you can really form an opinion.
Will be following.
3009631 I am hoping to do another bit of it tonight, going to attempt to make most if not all my chapters 2000+ which is a stretch for my usual
but I figure I'll get used to it.
3009478 Yes you may
Just as soon as I get done with my grueling grind in the machine today >.>
Also yes, twidash.
first word is friends?
cool.
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In all honesty, I'm thinking about scraping the twidash segments >.> can't do clop so well anyways
3042697 haha, yeah. again, in complete honesty the Twidash parts were keeping me away from this fic. I'm not incredibly good with romancy kinda stuff so I kinda used this as a test. But still, I am working on editing out parts I don't really like myself >.>
3042777 Ok.
Btw, twi is my fav pony and dash is my second fav.
3048159 nice xD
You're such a poetic person bishi.
By the way, do you like bananas?
Great story so far man.
I know you told me you don't like to work on non-popular ones, but this has potential to be something great. i think you should keep going c:
Like I said, feel free to use the OC's I suggested to you if you want, I don't even mind helping you write if you need some help.
3130668 I do want to work on this one, because it's like re interpreting a part of my past. And yes, if you would send me the bio on the antagonist you were talking about, I may use him.
also, TO THE MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON
Great chapter man. Can't wait for the next one
I saw only a few minor mistakes but a good read otherwise.
3153054 Ive yet to read over and edit it, planning on doing that soon xD
Cool armour bro.
3459703 Thank you kindly
That was a beautiful poem. If you have any more, you could post them here.
3461517 I just now saw this comment 0.o and thanks ^.^ I used to write a lot more, got a few on my fb page. I may post em if I get bored
3461517 And if you posted a link it didnt work = /
I told you what I thought already, so far so good.
3473836 I just hope to get some more attention
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You should post it in some groups or something then, that way everyone who's in that group will get a notification when it's added.
3473866 Been doing that xD Running out of relevant groups D I think it's my timing. I've yet to figure out the time of day when the most people are on
You have my like :) onto read the first chapter...
3475163 Thank you kindly :) I hope you continue to enjoy the story
An unscheduled rainstorm can only mean eternal chaos. Heh, good start. I'll be looking forward to more.
Squeee! Oh, sky, I'm in love with you already!!
3496861 More will be coming soon
Just as soon as I defeat this accursed writers block! 
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Apples raise em good 
Aw cute family moment for Sky and Applejack. Oooh, he has a crush on Sweetie Belle! How cute! :
Uh-oh... this is getting intense.
Noooo! FLUTERSHY!!
3503616 Just wait lol it will get better
Another great chapter my man. keep up the good work.
Okay. So, long-lost civilization of griffons, and supposed true ruler of Equestria is amongst them.... this is so awesomeeeee.
3517255 Glad you think so! I checked out your story and it's pretty neat
Havnt read it all yet, been busy but the prologue was cool
That was an epic showdown of showdowns, but I have no doubt that there will be more to come. Leave it to Pinkie Pie to break the fourth wall.
psst... can I start shipping Sky and Scootaloo now? Or is it not safe yet?
I'm putting this in my read latter... To tired to read now... been up since 10:00 AM Friday. now 11:20 PM on Saturday...
3724245 xD Not quite yet. I'm still brainstorming things around that idea
3736060 Not a problem!
Pretty good.Might be one of the few fics that I continue with.
Ch 1: recon
reckon*
Sudden tense shift.
Ch 8: Incintive, storm child.
Incentive
Ch 9: Twilight gave a feint smile, attempting to hide her disdain.
faint*
Also, I can't tell what she holds in disdain.
The griffon asked in a broken equestrian
in broken Equestrian*
Well, this story seems to fulfill its role as an action adventure story well so far. Except for some grammar errors that I can overlook, as well as a rushed and frankly unbelievable first chapter (Twilight and RD are out of character. Rainbow Dash would never attack Twilight. She's the Element of Loyalty, remember?), I would say that this story is pretty decent for some light reading. I'm not really seeing the dark tag here, but I assume that the darkness will come later.
To me, the Asian stereotypes makes this reminiscent of one of those old, racist action movies that follow the monomyth to the letter until the main character finally beats up some Genghis Khan wannabe at the end. Also, I'm not sure why you gave the gryphons Chinese names, as Gilda certainly isn't one.
I think it's a pretty decent story, and that you should continue writing it, but to me the dialogue seems just a bit cheesy. Behold the power of a true god? Would you like some crackers with that cheese? I hope the villains get at least a little bit deeper, if you continue writing it.
So, while I wish you the best of luck, while this isn't really my cup of tea. I will not leave a dislike, since this isn't bad. I just don't find it all that compelling.
3736811 I thank you for pointing out the errors, and I understand that its not quite your thing. As for the names, I do intend to explain it later on. There is a reasoning behind the names and the eastern base of these griffons. Still, I thank you for taking the time to read over my story!
3736573 I'm glad you think so
Loving the story!... I normally wouldn't point out errors, but I have a little OCD when it comes to stuff like this.
"she concocted the perfect day to due so" ... 'Due' should be 'Do'. Again, sorry, it's just that little things like that bug me. Have a nice day. /)
3739530 I didnt even notice! xD I shall fix it soon thank you for pointing it out
Please update ASAP
3740352 I'll be working on it soon