Chapter nine "Luna Repays a Debt" is finally up! Hopefully everyone will think it was worth the wait. It took me four weeks, when I was averaging about a week between the other chapters. Real life got busy on me!
So I assume Futaloo is going to handle impregnating all the background ponies Twilight can't find the time for? Starting with all her little schoolfriends (pregnant before puberty, well done ladies!)? I suppose a foal might sweeten Diamond and Silver's dispositions...
But I imagine there might be a bit of a stir when Rumble, Pipsqueak and Featherweight all turn up pregnant too...
(But not Snips and Snails. Not even Futaloo is that generous.)
Is it odd that I cackled like Smeagol during this chapter.
ahhahahahhhahahaha! this was fantastic, all we need now is for Twilight to bed Celestia and I will be in love with this fic, I am so adding this to my top five guilty pleasures list!
3416494 Zecora will probably get a stand alone story. Her dialog is really hard to write! I suspect a story starring her will take me at least a couple of months to write.
3417953 I figured her way of talking with rhymes would be the problem. I've read how other authors struggle to write for Zecora because of it. If you do write it, good luck.
3418033 Just her short appearance in chapter two drove me crazy! I rewrote her dialog over and over until I was finally happy. The thought of a whole story's worth of Zecora talking actually scares me! Maybe Twilight should use Trixie's spell and delete Zecora's mouth for a while! LOL I'm kidding. That would be a serious cop-out. It wouldn't fit with how I'm writing Twilight. She may be sex crazed, but she isn't mean!
3418470 Nope, it's not wrong at all. Scootaloo will get her turn as soon as I finish chapter ten. Oh, remember how I left off on nine, with Scoot peeping through the gap in the curtains? Here is one line of Fluttershy dialog that gives a slight spoiler for ten. “Twilight, there’s a shadow on the curtain!" Yup, Fluttershy knows Scootaloo didn't leave right away! Yay! Spoiler tags work in the comments!
Just her short appearance in chapter two drove me crazy! I rewrote her dialog over and over until I was finally happy. The thought of a whole story's worth of Zecora talking actually scares me! Maybe Twilight should use Trixie's spell and delete Zecora's mouth for a while!
LOL
I'm kidding. That would be a serious cop-out. It wouldn't fit with how I'm writing Twilight. She may be sex crazed, but she isn't mean!
(3419081) There are other possibilities: For instance, Jungle Fever has Zecora forsake rhyming because she breaks with her tribe. I can also think of other ways she could stop rhyming, such as Poison Joke making her unable to rhyme at all, and she has to stay that way for almost the entire story because she and Twilight have to gather the ingredients for the antidote (if you need an excuse for that, the whole town might be affected and they run out of antidote before everypony is cured, or the CMC might have wasted all of her ingredients trying to cure Scootaloo).
3425769 That actually has some possibilities. Thanks for the idea. No guarantee I'll actually use it though, but how about something like this?
"Twilight Sparkle, we must hurry to formulate the cure. The ponies depend on us, on that I am certain."
Twilight froze in her tracks. "What did you say, Zecora?"
The zebra looked embarrassed. "My own needs come last. We must cure the others and quickly!"
Twilight looked at her stricken friend and tried mightily not to smile. Her cock gave a twitch and threatened to emerge. Seeing Zecora so out of sorts was actually kind of sexy!
3430949 I figured that you might not, especially given your apparent preference for romantic comedy rather than action. Of course, I had thought of the CMC scenario as separate from the other one. For example (my fault if this is horrible writing):
"What a day to be afflicted with poison joke," Zecora said. "I only have enough ingredients to cure three ponies." "Good", Carrot Top said. "I am not spending a moment longer than I have to as this... this... thing." "Why not? You look cute as a bunny," Twilight said. "Besides," shi indicated hir priapism, "it could be worse." Zecora noticed a scooter outside her hut and asked, "Are all of you in there, or just Scootaloo?" "All of us, miss Zecora", Applebloom said. "Why are you in there? Do you need a potion t-" Zecora shuddered, "uh, I mean, do you need a potion as well?" "No, this one was simple enough. In fact it was the one I helped you with the week we first met." "I do not like where this is going", Twilight said. "We were in the forest," Sweetie Belle explained, "when Scootaloo grew colt parts. If her parents found out, they would disown her. I hope this works soon." Twilight sighed. "For future reference, Poison Joke only causes large changes like that overnight." Carrot Top asked, "Will the antidote still work after Scootaloo gets out or do I have to be a bunny until thursday?" Zecora sighed, "You can have my dose."
Of course it suddenly occurs to me that it could be the other way around: Zecora could be forced to rhyme as an effect of Poison Joke and have liked it enough to not want it cured.
3439320 No offense, but in my writing I have never used Shi or Hir in any story and never will. I just don't like how it looks in a sentence. They look like really bad typos. As for Scootaloo, her change was triggered by unknowingly consuming Twilight's hormone laced semen at just the exact right time in her physical development. For the purposes of my story, the change will be permanent. I have never once had a female character grow a penis, and not end up LOVING it!
Besides, remember this line from the end of chapter nine? Don't read the spoiler if you haven't read nine, Bronies! "I don't care if she's an Alicorn and can fly and do magic, but why does she also have to be a futanari? Futanari are legendary and rare, like rock stars!" My spin is that futanari Pegasi are ADORED in Equestria! After all, there seems to be something of a lack of stallions in the show!
3439533 I was and am very aware that the Scootaloo became a futanari because of hormones from raiding Twilight's watermelons, and Twilight immediately realises that it was not Poison Joke and that they just wasted a dose of antidote . However, I doubt that they would realise that at first (indeed, when describing the transition, you have written "unknown to her" and variations thereof at least once and probably several times) and it seems perfectly plausible that they would suspect Poison Joke at first, especially if the final part of the transition is sudden (eg, new futanari could have sheathes closed off by hymen-like things that could be broken by strenuous activity, making it suddenly obvious that they are so-endowed), and besides, even if they were unsure , they could have decided to try it not knowing that Zecora only had enough for three doses or thinking that no-one would need another dose until thursday. And as to trying to get rid of it, I never said that they would keep trying (in fact if I were transformed into a futanari, not only would I probably keep it, but I might even keep it if it were caused by the RL equivalent of Poison Joke).
Second, although I was actually thinking more of a cliche kid-in-trouble line (like the canonical "my parents are going to kill me"), just because futanari are like "rock stars" does not mean that they are automatically going to be accepted by a given pony, even if that pony is their mother or father. For a start, many stars, rock or otherwise, have terrible family lives: For example, "Katy Perry's Dad Refers To Her As A 'Devil Child' In Sermons" according to one Huffington Post headline (what I thought of when you pointed out your "rock stars" line). It is not a stretch to imagine that ultraconservative ponies might react just as poorly if their daughters became futanari, especially since, unlike rock stars (who have to sing about sexual topics or have "wardrobe malfunctions" or dance in ways that allegedly resemble intercourse), futanari are, at least as you write them, inherently sexually symbolic. Additionally, being a futanari is (in this context) contagious and many people IRL disown their LGBT daughters and sons in the mistaken belief that homosexuality is contagious (through sex, some believe; others believe it is contagious through songs like "I Kissed a Girl"). So it is not unthinkable that her parents would object to Futaloo, especially if they were not pegasi themselves or otherwise out of touch with mainstream pegasus culture (in which case Scootaloo likely would have learned of futanari from Rainbow), although I do understand if some of the story possibilities are too dark or tragic for you to write about . EDIT: It does not matter that futanari are now mainstream among all races of pony; racists could easily still think of them as a "pegasus culture" thing, in the same way that a lot of people still think of hip hop as black (and, as an aside, the Nazis banned jazz music on the basis that it had been largely developed by non-whites; they developed their own version, but it was apparently as bad as "Christian rock" is).
This...I must have more of this! I really like this story as it actually has some sort of story to follow rather than the droves of one shots that I have read. I hope to see more chapters in the near future!
So when will Twilight finally decide that fucking each mare one at a time is too slow, and starts concocting ridiculous schemes to impregnate major populations? Semen-loaded clouds, spiking the water supply, building an army of mechanical clones that hip-thrust their way about chanting, "INN-SEM-IN-ATE! INN-SEM-IN-ATE!"
And then she works out how to impregnate stallions, because everypony should know the serenity and joy of bearing Twilight's foals.
Attention everypony... Guess what I finished last night? I now have to take a day or two to run through it a few times to do any last minute editing and typo hunting.
>"Twilight darling, let me tell you a little secret. Every mare is a broodmare. It's what we're made for, after all. -Huhhhhhh... I *THINK* this could (and most probably should) have been phrased more ''elegantly'', shall we say ? Yeah.
Chapter nine "Luna Repays a Debt" is finally up! Hopefully everyone will think it was worth the wait. It took me four weeks, when I was averaging about a week between the other chapters. Real life got busy on me!
I hope to have ten finished faster!
Pity Celestia didn't sneak in with a camera.
"Oh yes, that's going in the family album."
So I assume Futaloo is going to handle impregnating all the background ponies Twilight can't find the time for? Starting with all her little schoolfriends (pregnant before puberty, well done ladies!)? I suppose a foal might sweeten Diamond and Silver's dispositions...
But I imagine there might be a bit of a stir when Rumble, Pipsqueak and Featherweight all turn up pregnant too...
(But not Snips and Snails. Not even Futaloo is that generous.)
see, now i can't freaking wait until this happens! not that i could really wait before, but still!
Huzzah now we need a bit of Celestia more Trixie and maybe a lot more Scootaloo. cant wait to see that.
i really liked this chapter well done now i just need to get off my fat flank and get wrighting on my story
Is it odd that I cackled like Smeagol during this chapter.
ahhahahahhhahahaha! this was fantastic, all we need now is for Twilight to bed Celestia and I will be in love with this fic, I am so adding this to my top five guilty pleasures list!
damn... twily gets way more booty than i do i wonder if she'll teach me or something
I know you hinted at it before, but will there be a Zecora chapter since she told Twilight she wouldn't mind a foal?
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Zecora will probably get a stand alone story. Her dialog is really hard to write! I suspect a story starring her will take me at least a couple of months to write.
3417953 I figured her way of talking with rhymes would be the problem. I've read how other authors struggle to write for Zecora because of it. If you do write it, good luck.
Is it wrong that i can't wait to see what Scoot's becomes? That is the part I am waiting for the most!
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Just her short appearance in chapter two drove me crazy! I rewrote her dialog over and over until I was finally happy. The thought of a whole story's worth of Zecora talking actually scares me! Maybe Twilight should use Trixie's spell and delete Zecora's mouth for a while!
LOL
I'm kidding. That would be a serious cop-out. It wouldn't fit with how I'm writing Twilight. She may be sex crazed, but she isn't mean!
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Nope, it's not wrong at all. Scootaloo will get her turn as soon as I finish chapter ten. Oh, remember how I left off on nine, with Scoot peeping through the gap in the curtains? Here is one line of Fluttershy dialog that gives a slight spoiler for ten.
“Twilight, there’s a shadow on the curtain!" Yup, Fluttershy knows Scootaloo didn't leave right away!
Yay! Spoiler tags work in the comments!
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There are other possibilities: For instance, Jungle Fever has Zecora forsake rhyming because she breaks with her tribe. I can also think of other ways she could stop rhyming, such as Poison Joke making her unable to rhyme at all, and she has to stay that way for almost the entire story because she and Twilight have to gather the ingredients for the antidote (if you need an excuse for that, the whole town might be affected and they run out of antidote before everypony is cured, or the CMC might have wasted all of her ingredients trying to cure Scootaloo).
Woooooooooooooooo! Scootaloo gettin the D!!!!!! And maybe some Futaloo, too? Ah, today is turning into a wonderful day.
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That actually has some possibilities. Thanks for the idea. No guarantee I'll actually use it though, but how about something like this?
"Twilight Sparkle, we must hurry to formulate the cure. The ponies depend on us, on that I am certain."
Twilight froze in her tracks. "What did you say, Zecora?"
The zebra looked embarrassed. "My own needs come last. We must cure the others and quickly!"
Twilight looked at her stricken friend and tried mightily not to smile. Her cock gave a twitch and threatened to emerge. Seeing Zecora so out of sorts was actually kind of sexy!
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I figured that you might not, especially given your apparent preference for romantic comedy rather than action.
Of course, I had thought of the CMC scenario as separate from the other one. For example (my fault if this is horrible writing):
Of course it suddenly occurs to me that it could be the other way around: Zecora could be forced to rhyme as an effect of Poison Joke and have liked it enough to not want it cured.
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No offense, but in my writing I have never used Shi or Hir in any story and never will. I just don't like how it looks in a sentence. They look like really bad typos. As for Scootaloo, her change was triggered by unknowingly consuming Twilight's hormone laced semen at just the exact right time in her physical development. For the purposes of my story, the change will be permanent. I have never once had a female character grow a penis, and not end up LOVING it!
Besides, remember this line from the end of chapter nine?
Don't read the spoiler if you haven't read nine, Bronies!
"I don't care if she's an Alicorn and can fly and do magic, but why does she also have to be a futanari? Futanari are legendary and rare, like rock stars!" My spin is that futanari Pegasi are ADORED in Equestria! After all, there seems to be something of a lack of stallions in the show!
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I was and am very aware that the Scootaloo became a futanari because of hormones from raiding Twilight's watermelons, and Twilight immediately realises that it was not Poison Joke and that they just wasted a dose of antidote . However, I doubt that they would realise that at first (indeed, when describing the transition, you have written "unknown to her" and variations thereof at least once and probably several times) and it seems perfectly plausible that they would suspect Poison Joke at first, especially if the final part of the transition is sudden (eg, new futanari could have sheathes closed off by hymen-like things that could be broken by strenuous activity, making it suddenly obvious that they are so-endowed), and besides, even if they were unsure , they could have decided to try it not knowing that Zecora only had enough for three doses or thinking that no-one would need another dose until thursday. And as to trying to get rid of it, I never said that they would keep trying (in fact if I were transformed into a futanari, not only would I probably keep it, but I might even keep it if it were caused by the RL equivalent of Poison Joke).
Second, although I was actually thinking more of a cliche kid-in-trouble line (like the canonical "my parents are going to kill me"), just because futanari are like "rock stars" does not mean that they are automatically going to be accepted by a given pony, even if that pony is their mother or father.
For a start, many stars, rock or otherwise, have terrible family lives: For example, "Katy Perry's Dad Refers To Her As A 'Devil Child' In Sermons" according to one Huffington Post headline (what I thought of when you pointed out your "rock stars" line). It is not a stretch to imagine that ultraconservative ponies might react just as poorly if their daughters became futanari, especially since, unlike rock stars (who have to sing about sexual topics or have "wardrobe malfunctions" or dance in ways that allegedly resemble intercourse), futanari are, at least as you write them, inherently sexually symbolic.
Additionally, being a futanari is (in this context) contagious and many people IRL disown their LGBT daughters and sons in the mistaken belief that homosexuality is contagious (through sex, some believe; others believe it is contagious through songs like "I Kissed a Girl").
So it is not unthinkable that her parents would object to Futaloo, especially if they were not pegasi themselves or otherwise out of touch with mainstream pegasus culture (in which case Scootaloo likely would have learned of futanari from Rainbow), although I do understand if some of the story possibilities are too dark or tragic for you to write about .
EDIT: It does not matter that futanari are now mainstream among all races of pony; racists could easily still think of them as a "pegasus culture" thing, in the same way that a lot of people still think of hip hop as black (and, as an aside, the Nazis banned jazz music on the basis that it had been largely developed by non-whites; they developed their own version, but it was apparently as bad as "Christian rock" is).
I loved it all so much I can't wait to see what happens next I hope Clestia is next and I can't wait to see what happens with scootaloo
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Thank you very much! I had been wanting to do that for ages.
Oh, and just a quick note as author. I am still working on chapter ten, so don't worry! I'm right at the half way point.
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You're in for quite a ride!
3415238 I adore the Smeagol reference.
3474494 Celestia should be futa, and impregnate Twilight after she gives herself to Shining.
So, according to the season 4 opening theme Twilight considers the Mayor and Photo Finish as part of her close circle of friends.
Cuteycindyhoney you know what you must do.
3553428 I liked this story, especially the beginning. however, I do wish it'd focus more on the mane6
This...I must have more of this! I really like this story as it actually has some sort of story to follow rather than the droves of one shots that I have read. I hope to see more chapters in the near future!
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It should hope I'm following a story! Chapter ten will conclude it, but that does not mean in any way I'm done with Princess Futa Twilight!
So when will Twilight finally decide that fucking each mare one at a time is too slow, and starts concocting ridiculous schemes to impregnate major populations? Semen-loaded clouds, spiking the water supply, building an army of mechanical clones that hip-thrust their way about chanting, "INN-SEM-IN-ATE! INN-SEM-IN-ATE!"
And then she works out how to impregnate stallions, because everypony should know the serenity and joy of bearing Twilight's foals.
Hope you will update
UPDATE PLEASE!!!!
Attention everypony...
Guess what I finished last night? I now have to take a day or two to run through it a few times to do any last minute editing and typo hunting.
It shouldn't be long now!
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Praise Princess Molestia!
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I think there's a picture for that (SFW).
>"Twilight darling, let me tell you a little secret. Every mare is a broodmare. It's what we're made for, after all.
-Huhhhhhh... I *THINK* this could (and most probably should) have been phrased more ''elegantly'', shall we say ? Yeah.