I'm going to completely rewrite this story at some point, just not today. It's been so long since I've touched this story, that I don't even remember what I was going to write. Stay tuned for a polished story with a new plot line.
(This is based on "the Rainbow Factory" by Aurora Dawn ) After failing her flight test, Scootaloo winds up at the Rainbow Factory, to be killed for a rainbow. However, Scootaloo's unintentional visit to the Rainbow Factory takes an unexpected turn when a certain pony comes into the scene...
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More more more MORE!!! This is great! And it's only chapter one? I have to read the rest of this!
oh if my OC was there tartarus would be raised
Omg this is so good this juse looks way better then the other ones I've read
I will have to read Rainbow Factory to get a better understanding of how the inside of this factory works, but I am already hooked with this story. Rainbow Dash being the protective big sister of her little sister, but to only be restrained shows me that she has a heart of strength and love for Scootaloo.
This is suspenseful. 
okay,this is good i admit,but GOOD stories on fimfiction have atleast 3,000 words a chapter,so yeah,it's good but once but once and a while you can use ordinary things like 'said' or 'exclaimed' you don't need to use snarled and that word...'sneered?'
Well that was immediate