MOAR!

can you please not use ":" in chapter names? they always mess up the tagged downloads

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Fixed

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Soon :3

Love the concept, dood... and I am familiar with C-D's Sonja and Malin; isn't Sonja a filly, like below the commonly assumed 'legal' age for sex, dood?

Just throwing that out there, dood.

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First: Thank you so much for the comment, I'm a fan of your stories.

Second: Canonically, yes, she is a filly, but to avoid problems I made her a year younger than Malin. I won't intentionally fight your canon that she is a filly, so you can just picture her as a dirty little filly while reading.

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Aww you made me blush, dood.

Oh and thanks for the clear up, dood.

yes yes yes fuck yes.....

source link doesn't have pic source....

hnnnnnnnnnnng
i love this
jeez <3

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Cause the original source link I was using was taken down while this was in the submission queue, so I just quickly changed the link to C-D's main tumblr.

The originals are from here. I'll update it in a bit.

2952305 oh dang , thought you cropped that image :/ ....

how soon?....

2952093 nice pic of pinkie as a prinny

Mmmmmm! I can't wait to read this!

2952541 Thanks, dood. I thought it was cute.

Hot, hope the next chapter comes soon.

2955249 I'm thinking about buying prinny can I really be the hero and the second game in that installment.

2956720 All the power to ya, dood... It's pretty hard, still a good platformer.

2956723 I've played super ghouls and ghosts so that might give me an idea on how hard both games are.

Weird....in a good way.........not bad........good......I'll stop typing now

Hurry.... Can't wait... Give me more...

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Soon.

This was an amazing chapter! Can't wait to read more once I'm horny again!

most cunny

should be "moist"

other than that, my boner is infinite

>overly dramatic smacking noises
"overly dramatic" seems without tact. "Exaggerated" would sound more appropriate.

>The metaphorical gears in her back creaked and lurched as she tried to move herself into an upright position
take out metaphorical; we're smart enough to know they aren't literal gears. If you really need to instill that it's a metaphor, you could say "the gears of her mind". That's traditionally how metaphors are used, or at least that's what I was taught.

>blistering heat
sounds painful

>But all that awaited her was an even more intense fire in her loins.
This is something everyone does, and I may have even done it in the past too, but man I just hate seeing arousal being compared to fire or heat. Burning isn't usually a good feeling to have around the genitals.

>She was simply lost, no, she was adrift,
Put a dash or hyphen after lost, instead of a comma

>they would passionately kiss as he climaxed with herrrRRrrrr
That really disrupts the narrative. It might work if it was Sonja telling the story herself, through a 1st person perspective, but here it just feels unnatural.

>She have given the foot of the bed a fresh darkened coat of sealant, created by her own orgasm.
Should be a "had" in there somewhere
Actually, it seems from that line onward, this story went from past-tense to present-tense. Then after "oh celestia" it went back to past-tense.

>burning sensation deep down in her loins.
I think that's gonorrhea, or maybe chlamydia. Either way, Sonja needs to go see a gynecologist if she's feeling a burning sensation down there.

Overall, cute scene, but really hampered by some choices in diction.