After several long moments, Silver Spoon stilled, no longer gagging or swallowing, panting heavily through her nose, her exhalations tickling his stomach. She paused, and then gave a triumphant smile around her mouthful, panting and staring up at him.
Not liking this very much. You ended up making him very creepy. Can't root for her, since she's a stupid bitch, and can't root for him, since he is indecisive creep. Well, can't please everyone, right?
Josh took a long, deep breath, considering lying, but by that point, his morals were in a shallow grave and his conscience was in the witness protection program.
If God didn't want me to jerk it to the idea of underage cartoon ponies giving egregiously enthusiastic blowjobs, he wouldn't have been so benevolent as to give me a penis and literacy.
3111036 You... seriously don't read everything I write, do you?
So far this month I've posted three new chapters of An Affliction of the Heart, two of this, one chapter of Vacation, and wrote a 20,000 word fic, from scratch.
That's more than 40,000 words worth of writing. This month alone. For a hobby I don't even get paid for.
So please, don't take this the wrong way, but stfu. I think I'm quite on top on the whole 'updating' thing.
3111149 I meant this particular story, and to your first question, no. I just can't get into an affliction of the heart, I only read the ingress stories.
I shouldn't like this... it's bad; but I came At first when I began reading your fics AP; I didn't like how you used cunt all the time. but over time I got use to it, now I use it whenever I have sex... and ladies love it.
3109705 You see, he is not me. I think I would've acted in an entirely different way. The problem there for me is that he either doesn't put enough of a resistance or way too much of it. And I understand why — he was purposefully written not to be initiator, but that means that he is lead by that stupid underage, who is written true to her age (very stupid). The whole setup kind of falls apart for me there. He could dominate her , he could succumb to her completely , or he could have iron restraint (for it to be broken in the end). As it is... just meh.
3113030 unfortunately, the world is not divided into such black and white instances. Some people would hold against this kind of thing forever. Some people would last a few minutes.
I find that making your character fall into a stereotype is much more bland and boring. And the three you just mentioned are all utterly stereotypical. Either a) he wants her so bad he'll beg. B) he'll hold out forever only to be slowly, painfully eroded down in a process so drawn out you might as well just skip to the end because you already know how it will play out. Or c) I want little filly and I will have her now and fuck what she wants.
3113178 Of course it isn't. It's just that I find this shade of grey to be way too dull. Don't misunderstand me — the characters are reasonably realistic, but that doesn't make them interesting. And I am not saying that they are objectively bad (they might be, but I didn't analyse that far), but I personally find them both repulsing. And as for the options — I'm sure there are uncountable ways to weave the story, and I am sure that pretty much every one of them can be presented in an engaging way and for each of them there will be people like me, who didn't like it.
Comment posted by keyser-soze deleted Mar 31st, 2017
Repeat after me: "Pony Hell is a wonderful place. Pony Hell is full of foals like Silver Spoon. Pony Hell is paradise..."
Oh, buck yes.
I hope sliver spoon quotes more corny 70's porn lines XD
Giggity
Are we terrible people for enjoying this?
I'm ok with this.
Reading stuff like this is Heresy but i can't stop.
3107936 Probably, but I don't give a fuck!
>mfw I saw new chapter's out
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Eat your mea-AAA HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
HOLY OLD PORN QUOTES BATMAN!
3107769 lel
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3107936 Probably.
That was some sexy foaling bro, write more
That blowjob was pretty spoontaneous.
Eeyup, his going to Hell.
Not liking this very much. You ended up making him very creepy.
Can't root for her, since she's a stupid bitch, and can't root for him, since he is indecisive creep.
Well, can't please everyone, right?
Best line ever.
3107936 Nah, morals are made up.
Well... This may yet change my opinion on little fillies. A good read, keep up the awesome work.
3108101
He talked in the theater?
This guy either has remarkable restraint or his priorities are all kinds of screwed up... or both.
3109108 well hes not trying to be creepy, you have to be honest if that was you in the story would you last as long as he did without fucking her?
3107769 I'll see you there!
3107769
If God didn't want me to jerk it to the idea of underage cartoon ponies giving egregiously enthusiastic blowjobs, he wouldn't have been so benevolent as to give me a penis and literacy.
3109889 In the immortal words of Robin Williams:
"God gave men a brain and a penis, but only enough blood to use one at a time."
3107769
Pony hell is a wonderful place...
No, boner. Bad boner. It's an underaged pony and a human having totally not delicious oral sex. Stop it. No. Bad. Sto- ah, hell with it.
I'm liking this story so far.
3110867
"Fuck it." throws random object over shoulder.
*Ba dum tss*
"I can't believe that that landed on the drums."
"Yeah, it was a pretty luck shot Pinkie."
this was good, but you seriously need to get on top of updating more
3107769
top kek m8
3111036 You... seriously don't read everything I write, do you?
So far this month I've posted three new chapters of An Affliction of the Heart, two of this, one chapter of Vacation, and wrote a 20,000 word fic, from scratch.
That's more than 40,000 words worth of writing. This month alone. For a hobby I don't even get paid for.
So please, don't take this the wrong way, but stfu. I think I'm quite on top on the whole 'updating' thing.
3111149
I meant this particular story, and to your first question, no. I just can't get into an affliction of the heart, I only read the ingress stories.
I shouldn't like this... it's bad; but I came At first when I began reading your fics AP; I didn't like how you used cunt all the time. but over time I got use to it, now I use it whenever I have sex... and ladies love it.
To be perfectly honest I find the Affliction of the Heart to be sub par at best and not very interesting in either concept or execution.
Your other stuff like the Ingress series, and your other non-Affliction stuff by contrast is much better.
3111262 Well look who it is, Hello friend
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Ask again after dinner
We'll bang, okay?
3111414 Hello indeed (I just saw the spiderman movie where that meme came from earlier today.)
3111495 Which one, if it's the new one I'm going to watch it again just to find this pic
3111499 Spiderman 3
3111586 I need to watch that one
3111609 it's quite the film.
3109705
You see, he is not me. I think I would've acted in an entirely different way.
The problem there for me is that he either doesn't put enough of a resistance or way too much of it. And I understand why — he was purposefully written not to be initiator, but that means that he is lead by that stupid underage, who is written true to her age (very stupid). The whole setup kind of falls apart for me there. He could dominate her , he could succumb to her completely , or he could have iron restraint (for it to be broken in the end). As it is... just meh.
3113030 unfortunately, the world is not divided into such black and white instances. Some people would hold against this kind of thing forever. Some people would last a few minutes.
I find that making your character fall into a stereotype is much more bland and boring. And the three you just mentioned are all utterly stereotypical. Either a) he wants her so bad he'll beg. B) he'll hold out forever only to be slowly, painfully eroded down in a process so drawn out you might as well just skip to the end because you already know how it will play out. Or c) I want little filly and I will have her now and fuck what she wants.
Blech to all three.
3113178
Of course it isn't. It's just that I find this shade of grey to be way too dull. Don't misunderstand me — the characters are reasonably realistic, but that doesn't make them interesting. And I am not saying that they are objectively bad (they might be, but I didn't analyse that far), but I personally find them both repulsing. And as for the options — I'm sure there are uncountable ways to weave the story, and I am sure that pretty much every one of them can be presented in an engaging way and for each of them there will be people like me, who didn't like it.
molestia would be proud
3117076 Proud? Did you SEE the eyes on the Celestia portrait? THEY MOVED!
I'm going to the moon for this, but it looks like by the views and the likes that I won't be alone