I'd say this was a very good attempt at romantic clop, or is that romance with clop in it? Well. either way, the point was made. Also, soundproofing the bedroom might be something to look into later.

I liked this chapter. Also for your second qwestion: Porn is a misterious place man.

Have you ever tried writing clop with your parents in the same room? Not easy.

that awkward moment when you're watching a movie with your parents, and a sex scene comes on
i'm guessing it feels about the same...

Those metaphors were fucking hilarious. I'm gonna have to use them some time.

Wellp, whatever people don't discuss openly, gets yer brain goin'. That's how it works.

Also, dat picture you added:
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'Nuff said.

This could use an editing pass, as there were some slight errors and phrasing issues. Altogether, really good for a first attempt!

And I JIZZED IN MY

PANTS!

"Ever heard of porn?"

That little part reminded me of that human x dash comic thing from a little while back lol.

Equines do not have hymen just thought you should know.

This was a very heartwarming and arousing read that pull at my heartstrings as I pulled at myself trying to alleviate the attractiveness of this story.

10/10 I came.

Dude I know right it just feels so weird when your doing that when your parents are in there

"angel" => "angle"

You can write some dam good clop son. 10/10

I don't even normally go looking for clop but I came across this and couldn't stop reading it. Well done. So yeah...giggity!

Andrew adjusted his angel slightly,

That is an angel as in big white wings and a halo The correct word is angle as in a right angle is 90 degrees.