The evils of Britannia once again rear their ugly heads, but this time in the world of Equestria. With Princess Celestia sealed away by dark magics and the Mane Six unable to stop this new threat the world must call upon the Avatar, Noah Antwiler otherwise known as The Spoony One, in their time of need.
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What's a Paladin?
Not bad so far, but it just feels a little thin. Spoony, who's not a Brony and I think he hates the show, shows up in Equestria. Okay, now what?
Story deserves a watch to see where you're taking it but I'm withholding the thumbs up / down until I read more.
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2822334 I'll try to get the next chapter posted today if I can help it, that one delves into the plot more than this one.
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Don't try to rush it if it's not completed, that's actually one of the worst things you can do.
I'll bite as far as a plot goes, but please try and get spoony's behavior down. I know that seem's somewhat stupid to say but I've seen people write out a story with a premise like this and then drop the character's normal behavior for one reason or another. (by the by are you using Noah or Spoony for this one? Character wise I mean.)
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I'll try my hardest, I get annoyed by that too so I want to make sure I get Spoony's personality down pat.
Actually I'm planning on using both Spoony and Noah's personalty for this one as sort of the Red Oni/Blue Oni type of deal. My reason for that is because If I used just Spoony's personality the plot wouldn't go anywhere, Also even in Spoony's reviews you get taste of Noah every now and again (Best example of this would be the Ultima 9 review)
I've spotted one or two typos, but so far this is a fairly smooth read, and also entertaining.
One question I need to see you answer eventually. How did Equestria get hold of Moongate technology?
Well, Equestria's not ready for what's coming, and I don't mean whatever villain is in store (though they might be too much too.) Noah/Spoony is an interesting guy and while not going to leave them to rot, he's not gonna be nice about it. On a different note I wonder if some of the monsters he encounters might make him think of D&D?