with love, Anonymous
With a flushed muzzle Fluttershy quickly whipped her head round to see if anyone was around but of course it was only her and Angel asleep on the couch opposite her.
with love, anonymous
With love
Love
Fluttershy sighed unhappily. Love. It had always been a rather unfair subject for her. While her friends around her found it, sometimes in each other, she remained to shy to even approach her crush.
Yes, that's right. Crush, she Fluttershy had a crush. Never more than one. A crush. No, not a crush, the one she loved.Her first, her last ,her everything .
Her Rainbowdash.
She'd hardly seen her at all lately, which only added to her heartaches. She was stuck. Trapped between what the community wanted or what she wanted. She was a very selfless person, it was a joke that she should be the element of kindness and generosity. She wanted to be what everyone expected, but her love for Rainbowdash occasionally cause her to brush a stray tear from her eye. That, and the fact that she was afraid that everyone would make fun of her and maybe her friends would hate her forever. Fluttershy didn't know if she could take it, that or rejection.
Rejection from Rainbow... nooo.... Images flashed through her mind. Dashie landing strikingly after repairing the bridge, defending her honour in a race, perfectly executing the "impossible" sonic Rainboom. She'd loved Rainbowdash from the very beginning and would continue to do so until she died. Even when they met, filly Fluttershy had taken a sharp breath as she looked at the most beautiful thing she had ever seen....
In the meantime she had a letter to respond to, though the hoof/mouth/hornwriting was strangely familiar....
Anyway, better respond ,she thought, I would hate to be rude....
After a minute or two this is what she had
Dear Anonymous
I am flattered, and you are a beautiful writer, but I am afraid I already have somepony in mind
Sorry,
Kindest regards, wish you the best
Fluttershy the Pegasus
"There" she said. Feeling proud of her work. "Now just to find an envelope and..." Facehoof! She didnt know their adress and it would confuse the mailponies greatly if she adressed a letter to somepony called Anonymous...
Taking to the air she sighed.
"Ahhh well I supsose I'd better bin it in the morning" Elegantly gliding to her bedroom she lightly placed the letter on her windowsill "*Deep breath*... *yawn!* goodness that was loud... goodnight Ponyville...Goodnight Rainbowdash...Goodnight Anonymous.." She smiled as she said he/she/its names and quietly fell into a deep slumber.
Moments after she fell asleep a cyan hoof stealthily took the letter from the windowsill and tear drops silently dropped onto the otherwise perfect letter, smudging the word, Fluttershy
@Tinker Strike...
1. Not a bad story premise. I would suggest taking it slow to reflect post-mail correspondence.
2. You have some typing, spelling, and grammar errors, though. I would advise cleaning them up; or better, find an editor &/or proofreader(s), before you go much further.
3. One glaring error that absolutely needs to be corrected ASAP: Rainbow Dash (two words), not Rainbowdash (one word). That glaring error alone is going to lose you readers &/or literary points.
Ah, never get tired of seeing people think the person they love is in love with someone else when it's them the whole time.
I'm curious to see how RD will act around Fluttershy now that she thinks she loves somepony else. Should be interesting.
The only thing that kind of bugged me was that I don't think Rainbow would be that romantic in the letter. I always see her as somepony who does things without thinking. Other than that the imagery was well written and I'm hooked into seeing where this goes from here.
Well... maybe he/she has a few mistakes, but I like it very much. I could even hook her up with somepony that would love to proofread it!
minute or two...? small correction.
I like where this is going, as hard as it is on RD at the moment.
There's a spelling error in the description in the first sentence. "alaways."
This is an interesting premise, but you need a proofreader or two to get the spelling and grammar mistakes.
Another thing,
Last I checked, Rarity is the element of generosity. But this is interesting and I want to see where it goes!