• Member Since 10th May, 2013
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Mr Marshmallow


A man made of Marshmallows who so happens to be a brony... who would've thought it?

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Rainbow Dash has always loved Fluttershy and she has always loved her aswell but neither has had the confidence to admit it to the other,but its so much easier to write a love letter and sign as anonymous...

A Flutterdash fic just for me to have a go at one, if its awful tell me and if you don't like shipping just go away.

Cover art by LightningDust
Peace!

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 16 )

@Tinker Strike...

1. Not a bad story premise. I would suggest taking it slow to reflect post-mail correspondence.

2. You have some typing, spelling, and grammar errors, though. I would advise cleaning them up; or better, find an editor &/or proofreader(s), before you go much further.

3. One glaring error that absolutely needs to be corrected ASAP: Rainbow Dash (two words), not Rainbowdash (one word). That glaring error alone is going to lose you readers &/or literary points.

Ah, never get tired of seeing people think the person they love is in love with someone else when it's them the whole time.
I'm curious to see how RD will act around Fluttershy now that she thinks she loves somepony else. Should be interesting.
The only thing that kind of bugged me was that I don't think Rainbow would be that romantic in the letter. I always see her as somepony who does things without thinking. Other than that the imagery was well written and I'm hooked into seeing where this goes from here.

This is a very good piece. You write your stories like I do! Maybe we can talk sometime? I'd love to get to know you!:pinkiehappy:

Well... maybe he/she has a few mistakes, but I like it very much. I could even hook her up with somepony that would love to proofread it!:rainbowkiss:

After a minute or tow this is what she had

minute or two...? small correction.

I like where this is going, as hard as it is on RD at the moment.

There's a spelling error in the description in the first sentence. "alaways."

This is an interesting premise, but you need a proofreader or two to get the spelling and grammar mistakes.

Another thing,

She was a very selfless person, it was a joke that she should be the element of kindness and generosity.

Last I checked, Rarity is the element of generosity. But this is interesting and I want to see where it goes!

Well, the fact that Dashie is tanks mom, kinda weird... but I absolutely like it!:ajsmug:

Nice little chapter there. This next letters going to be fun.:pinkiehappy:

ron

MOAR! :flutterrage:

Seriously, MOAR.

This is really good, can't wait to read more of it

Interesting approach, and for once it doesn't feel like someone's carrying the Idiot Ball to make the plot work; I can genuinely imagine Dash not making the connection that the other somepony might be Dash herself, since she wrote the letter anonymously.

...Your cutting this out...your not going to continue writing this...for a while?

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:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

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