How does it feel to be a thing of such little significance? Cold emptiness is not to be kept to oneself, it is to be shared. Ponies learn that the hard way as Christmas has comes early. Cold-dog's anyone?
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Wut
Cold dog is?
Cold dog's ?
Are my jokes bad? Or are they bad as they are my jokes? Or both? Did you read this or merely glance? You celebrate Christmas in winter, like Heartwarming Eve, when the cold comes. But what if the cold is early? Like Christmas came early, say? And cold dogs are not hot dogs for clear reasons. Namely as one is cold and a spelling error, due to the d before dog.
Do you harass or merely critique what you don't like?
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Do you get upset when someone points out things they find odd in your story with a tone of little to no aggression?
I do this often, and in any medium it's acceptable. Criticism is what helps people improve. I didn't read this because it didn't interest me, simple as that. I pointed out those two things because from reading the description it conused me. I believe "hearth's warming eve" is the proper winter holiday, as well as your usage of dog's seemed improper from how you used it, and I had no context towards how you intended to present it.
I only dislike things that truly deserve it, like this horrid abomination.
Ugh. This doesn't make a single freaking ounce of sense. None of it. Not a single letter.
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What he means is that cold-dog's, because of the apostrophe, means cold-dog is. You want to use cold-dogs. Also, you can say winter comes early, but Christmas/Hearths Warming never changes.
Also, this seems like more of an unrelated story with a few pony references shoved in, but it's written well. I'll give it an upvote for that.
Two common slips I noticed:
This is IMspeak. In English, it's spelled "through."
This means "it is" and doesn't make sense here. You want "its."
Beyond that, the whole story (or at least what I read) is too abstract to hold my interest. This isn't to say it's bad, only that I as one reader wasn't interested.