I'm going to throw this a track because it looks good and I'm about to go to sleep.

Looks good

and just like that the book betrays her

This looks MORE than good guys! I love your writing style! This story has got my full attention, even if I am more of a PinkieDash person, this is just pure awesome. Keep it up!

More appledash?!

WHY NOT A RARE ONE LIKE RARIPIE?!

/Rage

Cheers

~iraqlobstah

Tracked, and I'm very much looking forward to seeing the continuation. Also, thanks for contributing to the well-done "lazy Dash" pool.

Watch out! Glassed incoming!

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For a first chapter, this caught my full attention pretty darn fast

You have a good style of writing to go along with, what sounds like a promising story

-Glassed

tracking and ow,

have some stars ^^

Ah AppleDash, My favorite Rainbow Dash shipping. Amazingly written, and consider this tracked.

Also, Reallly off topic, but...is anybody else's stars get replaced by..thumbs up and down?

I wonder how Twilight will react to those books when she comes back...

Tracking.

AppleDash, check.

Original Concept for said ship, check.

Adorable, funny dialogue, thats a big ten four.

You may very well have written EXACTLY what Ive been looling for for a long time. This is going straight on my tracking list. I look forward to the rest. I know you cant rush art but, dont keep us in suspense! XD

This looks promising. I'm more of a straight shipper myself, but this should be interesting. Tracking.

This is a really good story. I am a fan of AppleDash and thus this immediately caught my attention. Tracking and awaiting the next installment.

i be enjoying

looking forward to more

that is all

ktanxbai

Hmmm... apart from some very minor typos (You know, the usual kind, hit two keys in the wrong order, just like thsi), this is looking to be a very, very promising story. I like Dash's reactions and internal confusion, it is very realistic to someone who realizes they may love one of their best friends.

I'm not normally one for AppleDash, but this seems rather interesting...

Also...

“How about a book?” the pegasus thought with her mental voice sounding strangely like Twilight for an instant.

and

"Books would never betray her, never leave her doubting herself."

Rainbow Dash is acting a bit like what I'd think the before-friends-Twilight Sparkle would be like...

Oh wow. The writing is really impressive and the depth you give the character's really shows! I love how you explore Rainbow's character and there is plenty of good old comedy here too! Bravo!! SO tracking!!!

I enjoyed this alot actually.

Theres only one thing I dident like

When AJ kisses Dash it felt to abrupt.

Other then that its really really good its not something that will turn me off the story and call it terrible because its not.

Its very good.

I await more.

Great hook, though a bit too long. Some people may leave early and downrate because they think it's clop.

Also, you don't do a spot on job with channeling the characters.

"'That... doesn't seem feasibly possible.'"

Feasibly is a bit long a word for Dashie, don't you think?

It's not a major issue, as few fics ever do absolutely nail the characters, but something to think about maybe.

Other than that, fantastic job. I cannot stress enough that this fic is good, but it looks as if it's dangling on true greatness and it's making me nyeh at the minor details.

This isn't going to get a sad tag later on is it?

>>226279226279 cuz "rare" ships are rare for a reason: some personality types are just not romantically compatible. I find it nigh impossible to read fics like that; that's just me though

Twidash, Rarijack, Flutterpie, everything else is just self delusion.  Swayback was the game changer. Now on to the story. Still you have to respect others with vision. "added later"- I love all of the ponies so far, because of the generous writing of all authors. Even prince Blue Blood and Diamond Tiara are given a sympathetic back ground story and the option to improve themselves when they are ready.  There are no irredeemable ponies, just lost souls.

This is brilliant. Wll done.

>>227808227808 The only whippings I really dislike are Raridash, Twijack, Fluttertwi, and Raripie. The others, if you write them well, are phenomenal. FLUTTERDASH IS BEST SHIPPING

>>227977227977

Heh. Whippings.

Didn't know ponies got so kinky.

>>226279226279 You have no idea how badly I want a well written Raripie story.

>>226450226450 She'll just have to read them all first, and keep them, before reordering her original titles. Ahhhhh, but you knew that already.  

>>227603227603

True dat. I prefer RariJack ships myself: still rare, but the most likely/feasible of the 5 possible Rarity ships, in a tsundere kind of way.

>>228303228303 Yeah, I understand that. Personally, (through evidence like Rarity wishing for a "prince charming") I view her as the only character who is definitively straight. So any Rarity/mane6 ship doesn't sit well with me; but to each his own.

Definetly a must-track concidering what transpired here. To be honest out of reading other Appledash fics, describing this as such almost seems like the best option for Dash's standards. I'll definently keep track of this for sure as it is well done. I hope twi doesnt go for finding out whats in her library lol.

>>228023228023 My iPod has instant spell-check, and it gets it wrong sometimes. Like if you look through some of my stories, words like 'lampstand' and 'amoeba' just pop up in the middle of a sentence, and I don't catch them because I write so fast. My brain works faster than my fingers.

>>228920228920 FlutterDash amplifies both the protective nature of Dash the reliant nature of Fluttershy. Th adage that 'opposites attract' is true: it's called the 'completion effect'. I means that two halves of one type of personality work well together. Like, for example, my wife is level-headed, kind, and calm, and helps keep me on track while I have short-term memory loss, multiple personalities, and get frustrated easily. And that's why I love her.

Applejack and Dash would always be competing, and although this could be sweet, their continued feuding could make life semi-difficult, especially during arguments about, say, taxes or children.

~From Emerald Flight, a brony who knows what he's talking about

>> Emerald Flight

Actually i find their compeditive edge is what makes Appledash more compatable. I have read other appledash fics aside from this and they certainly have some flare to them as well as situations that would compliment eachother best. Also don't forget that some relationships root from fighting to begin with, u know the saying "argue like a married couple" as well as of course the ability to overcome hardships with eachother presents a stronger relationship. Life has its challenges and even in a relationship, a peaceful life is pretty much wishful thinking. Some prefer it that way, some others prefer the determination to take on the wild chalenges ahead as expressed in some Appledash fics. But I digress.

Its nice that your relationship is so complimentary in such a way though however, I give you props on that.

I was thinking of a comparison for Flutterdash as well; however the fact that they have nothing in common could present a problem right off the bat in itself as do for most relationships. Even when fluttershy is a pegasi, she lives on the ground that rarely would visit cloudsdale where Dash takes to the skies like nobodys business. I also am not sure if i see Dash taking on responcibilities on taking care of Fluttershy's animals when she has got her own dreams to chase. I may read into a flutterdash fic sometime to research further into this, but thats my shpeal.

Anyways, im not entire how else they would pair up, unless somehow due to circumstances are presented in a way that Dash would accept Fluttershy more than a friend. Because just knowing her fierce loyalty to Fluttershy in the very beginning for example is somewhat blanket excuse to build on. Then again, Dash could be paired up with anybody concidering using concepts relating to her first Sonic Rainboom is the connection that tied all 6 of them. I suppose Fluttershy's kindness to Dash may present some opportunity, other than that im not so sure. I would say flutterdash would be harder to execute regardless, by knowing who they are, and that they way its set up its like they live in two completely different countries.

>>229119229119 AppleDash isn't bad, but once more, there's a huuuuge race problem. I touched lightly on this in 'Dashie & Me' where Raindrop, a pegasus, and Lemon Yellow, an earth pony, get married. Lemon Yellow could do little more than cheer from the sidelines for Raindrop, and Raindrop had to take breaks from work to speak to Lemon Yellow. I'd be afraid in a relationship that one would be in the air and one not.

And Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash not being compatible? Please. You're right in saying Dash could be paired up with any of the other five (I parodied this in 'Desicions, Decisions'), but not only have Fluttershy and Dash been friends the longest, they are also rather similar. Loyalty to friends, care for others, and... they can both fly. The only thing they lack is a common intrest in sports.

Anyways, I love FlutterDash because of the excellent conjunction of reliance on care. It just fits so well, and it makes so much sense. Meanwhile, Dash and Applejack would be relying on themselvs and their egos, not on each other. Plus, I've always assumed that Applejack was straight and Fluttershy was not.

*tracked*

>>229266229266 To be blunt, if that is really your opinion then why do you read this?  To each his own, and I never said they were not compatable, i said it would be least likely they would be. Also as mentioned before they may not share common interests as well as their day to day priorities of Dash's weather managing, to Fluttershys animal cartaking. (which brings up the question where the hay did Dash keep her pet turtle anyway )  Also as far as their friendship goes, who knows what happened between the time they were fillies up until now. Also don't get me wrong, I suppose if Fluttershy does express her kindness to Dash it will present some opportunity, other than that on any given situation, it may not be so fruitful.

We may never know where anyponys orientations are until given to light. Though that one time with Appledash cannon theory still remains intact during that one episode, it made me wonder from Dash's words. Also Appledash on the otherhand as said before, their compeditive nature could be their greatest strength. Dash's Loyalty to all of her friends may make her feel comitted to try just about any of the other 5 when given opportunity as well as AJs .

>>229438229438 Again, you have a lot of good points. And I read this because AppleDash isn't a bad pairing; I'm just trying to insinuate that I, as a sixth-degree brony, enjoy a romantic (not erotic) FlutterDash pairing more than an AppleDash pairing. But I disagree strongly with your closing statement; in case you've ever had a love with a friend out of a group of friends, you would know that if the rest were your friends, they would accept it. In my own personal FlutterDash story (FlutterDash: Publicity) I assume the individual characteristics of the mane six and their reactions to a lesbian pairing (also assuming the rest were straight), and I also go over and parody the fact that Dash can be paired well with anypony in 'Desicions, Desicions'. I don't think that Dash is a hypersexual; meaning I dont think that Dash would feel love towards anypony except one. Doesn't particularly matter which one.

Anyways, what I'm trying it get at is that if Dash is paired with one, she would not be paired with the others in the same fiction. That's why I wrote 'Desicions, Desicions'; as a parody. The rest of your statements are correct, I just disagree with the closing.

Sorry for spamming up the comments.

Btw, the reactions in FlutterDash: Publicity are . lol.

>>227372227372

T'ain't nothing wrong with it being clop, if it were... people need to stop being prudes.

Anywho, I think it's about the perfect length. I prefer telling, longer chapters, over "this happened, chapter over" chapters, where you end up with 45 chapters by the end of the novella. I try for 6000-8000 myself, usually.

Looks solid enough so far, and not as generic as most AppleDash fics I've read. I think the reading angle helps a lot. This gets a tracking for now.

>>229438229438

TORTOISE!

>>232324232324 lolwut

Minor misspelled and missing words here and there but this is definitely a story that I'm loving.

Twilight's Sparkle sounds so risque when you think about it.

>With no other options available, Applejack simply reached out and planted her lips upon her friend’s.

I'd say there are two- maybe even three- other things AJ could've done instead.

>They both assumed if this were something they were supposed to understand, Twilight would have taken the liberty to explain it to them using nice, small words.

And you make AJ and RD sound really stupid here and in later parts.

I mean, this pair isn't bad; there are a few minor misspellings and tense problems that I can overlook; what I don't like is how this story strays from the characters already developed in the show. They aren't true to themselves- would Twilight condescendingly pat RD's head and say, 'I know you're stupid, Rainbow- that's why you're not coming!' in the show? Because that's basically what this line (“Of course not, that would be silly,” Twilight corrected with a playful chuckle.) is. They may not be super into magic given that they aren't unicorns, but they do have brains- Dash likes to read and AJ handles an entire farm(with help, but still). I'm not going to give this a dislike, but I'm not giving it a like either.

*end long ass comment*

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Librarian Dash reporting for duty!

>>233503233503

You called Tank a turtle when he's a tortoise.

Duh.

Oh, man...Indiana Jones meets The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly! Brilliant use of the Blondie line! I can hardly wait for the third installment!

Great....now i want to know how the main story is going to progress AND how the Daring Do book ends

Ouch...Dat ending.

I love how you portray Daring and her "partner". I don't like her partner much, but she fits the type of story Daring Do is supposed to be. And the contrast between AJ and Blondie, especially considering how similar Dash and Daring are, is going to be an interesting thing to watch in the coming chapters.

I can't wait!

The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly is my favorite movie and this is now quickly becoming my favorite AppleDash fic.

I applaud your writing. Excellent work.

Amazing chapter, the only downside to having read this is that I'm now anxious for the next one!

The plot thickens!

TgTbTu?

slowclap.wav

Huh? . . But. . What?

I was so sure the Applejack meant nothing by that kiss from her reaction to it. And here I thought Applejack might have problems later with Rainbow liking her.

>>245899245899 DAT PLOT

>>246197246197 She's the Element of Honesty, not the Element of Being Unable to Hide your Feelings.

Goddesses... Love problems? Read a book! Love problems in your book scarily similar to those in your actual life? The last chapter was accidently not printed.

This chapter was awesome, no way around it.

And Dash superimposing herself onto Daring? victory!

Do I detect a Castle reference in this fic?  Followed on principle alone.

This is actually the first "Daring Do"-story, if you can call it that (yeah, I think you can), that I've read... Might just go have a looksie at another

This is goood

It took me a few minutes, but the resemblance in "Blondie" to AJ, was too big to miss in the end

-Glassed

Love it!

That. Was. Awesome.

Good job sir. Keep on keeping on.

-PS: There were some grammar mistakes, might want to reread

The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly reference? Oh baby! Another fan of Clint Eastwood that's also a brony. Give me a Dirty Harry reference and were set. I love your fanfic so far. Keep it up!

Now I wonder what Twilight is going to do with all her new .."Books"

Nice chapter, I think there was a little to much story in story but I still enjoyed the read. good work

Loving every single second of this - its absolutely brilliant. First time i read "rope boind dash" i honestly thought it was a mistake in editing. XD

Darings such an epic character, I really like the way youre writing her and Blondie. And yeah, clear to see the comparisons between her and AJ. Bravo, and i look very much forward to the next chapter. :3

Oh, my goodness... I absolutely cracked up when I figured out what the "special delivery" was!

I'm super excited to see where this story is going.

Spitfire now = worst pony because of that last part

Oh, goodness. I was laughing the entire time. What an excellent read. Can't wait for the next chapter. Applebloom was excellent, and Rarity is awesome as well. Especially not even hesitating to help her friend out with what is clearly her trying to get a date with their other friend. Awesome.

I quite enjoyed watching the plot weave its way through this chapter. I'll admit that it didn't surprise me (everything was pretty strongly hinted at), but it was nonetheless great fun to watch things fall into place

WOW!!!!!!! This was so fun to read!!

I can see Apple jacks face, “Bachlo-What now?

and now I love Rarity a lot more now! that was so cool!

grate chapter, I cant wait for more.  what are you still reading my comment? get to writen, before you make fluttershy cry!

Aww, I feel so bad for Rainbow Dash right now.

I'm really hoping that things work out in the end, but I guess that's up to you, CommissarAJ!

Keep up the great work!

Casablanca ref- CHECK

Suggestive dialogue- CHECK

Desperate Rainbow Dash- CHECK

Dat plot twist- CHECK!

You and SLP always hating on Spitfire.

Y cant anypony make cuddly and nice Spitfire story??

Noooo!!!! SPITFIRE! Y U NO LET DASHIE WIN?!?!

Quote: "I don't want to stand in the way of young love..."

Actions: STANDING IN THE WAY OF YOUNG LOVE

Have to feel for RD. But I'm glad to see that Applejack feels the same way thanks to last chapter, and now there's a plot twist that should work out extremely well. Great writing and I look forward to more. Next chapter should be great, awesome work CommisarAJ.

I think we can all take a very important lesson from this: DON'T leave something like this to chance, at a public auction....

I have to say, this was really funny...

Goddammit Spitfire! Rarity was so generous, too

Why are people hating on Spitfire here? Spitfire would have had no idea that AJ was the pony Dash was attempting to 'win' at the auction. Dash only told her that she was participating in the bidding, after all. Spitfire attended the auction, as it was suggested she might, and saw a pony she might like to get to know--what's wrong with that? I mean, really, you're all acting like she purposefully set out to hurt Rainbow Dash, cackling evilly and twirling her villainous mustache all the while.

Zounds and Strewth! What a twist! Poor Dash got pwned.

Also, I hope we see more Daring Do/Blondie story. That was just as good as the main plot!

Not quite sure what happened... Around the second half you accidentally quite a few words. That kinda jarred me out of it a bit, as I often had to go back and re-read the sentence to fill in the missed words so that it made sense, but apart from that this remains a great story! I was just a little surprised, as the first half was pretty much devoid of errors lol.

Everyone seems to like Writing Spitfire as a douche. However, seeing as this is still only chapter three i shall retain my judgement of her. XD

I cannot expres how much I love this story. Despite a few grammar errors - none glaring or even really affecting the story, unless you're a grammar nazi- this is still the best non-mature rated AppleDash fic Ive read.

Cudos :3

Aw man I was laughing so hard during that whole thing xD

I can just picture Applejacks face being all O_O with the constant bidding.

A wild Spitfire appears!!

Wild Spitfire uses Plot Twist!

It's super effective!

Oh man this is going to be good. Can't wait till next chapter!

Have a good one :D

Seriously guys, Spitfire is totally going to give AJ up willingly once she eventually realises what the true situation is... or, she'll end up in a fight to the death with RD for the right to their one true love, balanced precariously on the rooftop of a burning building! I mean, it's not like I'm psychic or anything, right?

This story is already better than at least 65% of the crap that Hollywood churns out under the guise of "Romantic Comedy". Me wants MOAR!

I bid 10,000 BITS!!!!!!!!!! Mwahahahaha! Applejack is mine now.

All jokes aside, I loved this chapter

So... I feel sorry for the lot of them. Spitfire for being lonely, and unwittingly - perhaps - depriving Dash of her love; Dash for being deprived of her love; Rarity for losing half of a fortune; and AJ who still doesn't know what the buck's goin' on 'round here.

Alternatively, Spitfire could be hyper-observant, and be trying to win said bid FOR Dash. Now wouldn't that be a kicker. In any case, she ain't bein' a jerk... Unless of course it is later revealed that she out-bade Dash for the sole purpose of ruining her and AJ's potential relationship - only then would she be a jerk. I'm wired! Nice chapter by the way.

“But seriously, that is the premise of the novel. It’s been a favourite of mine since I as a little filly.”

just a note, favorite is spelled wrong and and it sais I as, not I was.

Good story, by the way. Since my stars mean nothing have a mustache

Ok soooo when I read the title I thought about the WWJD thing well this one is WWDD so I was like does that mean World Wide Double D's? lol

Ouch... -50 for Griffindor... I mean... Spitfire.

Don't worry Spitfire, you'll be one of my favorites again in a couple of days...

That's a right good piece of fanfiction you have right there sir.

I love how it's a pair of expies for Dash and AJ. It's cute and keeps one of my Mane Six OTPs. But, is it wrong that after examining the Tropes page for Daring Do, I still don't want this pair to work out because I like Daring and Herpy?

Dun-dun-DUUUUUUN!

Spitfire is now worst pony. Mostly because she really ought to be daring Soarin.

I see what you did there with the main title. Well played.

>>289419289419

ONE MILLION BITS!

>>297544297544 10,000,000 bits!!!!!

This is a really great story! I'm really enjoying it and in particular enjoy the subtle references, my favorite of which was The Good, The Bad and The Ugly one. I like how you're telling the story about Rainbow and Applejack with like a bonus story about Daring Do. Can't wait for the next chapter!

LOL!!!  I wonder what Spitfire is going to say when she finds out the truth of the whole thing....  Poor RD!  But I'm sure things will work out!  ^_^  Another wonderful chapter, and I can't wait to read the rest!  

2nd story I'm reading where Spitfire comes between RD and another mare

But good writing; very nice. Not sure how Daring will make a return (or if she even needs to) buuut you probably won't change the title so I guess next chapter will have her.

Also, it Spitfire and Aj go out to dinner and have a good time, I might have to punch a foal.

Oh, and "on route" should be "en route"

You have learned well from your monarch, Spitfire.

>>298979298979

ONE HUNDRED MILLION BITS!

>>308198308198

1 BILLION BITS!!!!! Damn my life savings is almost gone, but I shall not stop till I'm homeless on the streets!