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Thanks again for your feedback, the next chapter is up. I hope you like it.

A bit too fast paced and a few spelling errors, but aside from that this is going pretty good.

One dress on me and i'm not coming back!"

i think that's what you meant to say

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Fast paced huh? I don't exactly understand. Could you explain?

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It's just that they immediately jumped from enemies, well the closet thing you could be too an enemy to Fluttershy anyway, to friends just like that. Fluttershy is very....well shy to people she doesn't know. I'm assuming they must have had some prior history together and not the good kind.

All this combined makes me think that Fluttershy would not have been acting this friendly straight from the beginning, Gilda would probably be a bit more guarded too.

All that said, it's definitely possible for the characters to have acted this way, just unlikely unless they already had some prior positive feelings toward each other. It's likely just the shortness of the chapters getting to me though.

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I apologize that you feel this way, There will be some twists and turns that will cause them to be on an off, between positive and negative feelings. Also, I understand the point your making but if you add the fact that Fluttershy is the Element of Kindness, along with her shy demeanor, do you really expect someone like her to hold a grudge? Thats just how I felt when I wrote this chapter.