My life has had its ups and downs but when going to another day of college I have a second chance to start a new life in a new land with a new name.
If there are spelling errors please write them in the coments, this is also a HiE so I hope you enjoy
Make it a bit longer and more detailed but other than that nice start
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239577 thanks man and trust me these chapters are going to be 3 thousand to 4 thousand words
i like this story but you put refurring instead of referring in the story but overall very good
still love the story but when you said that "Luna was inraged know and said" i think that you meant to say that Luna was enraged when she heard that and said... or something like that also when Luna said your grounded it should have been you're grounded, also it is not moddo but "motto", also when it said the figure's face almost wanted me to send somepony to the... did the figure's face itself want him to send somepony to the..., also when it says one minute your standing on the street and another your getting mugged by punks all the yours should be you're, but still this is a great story
P.S. my English teacher is a grammar and spelling Nazi so sorry if i point out too many mistakes
255692 thank you for the corrections, I'm also working on a new chapter
258586
sounds great! can't wait to read it!
258725 I'm almost finished and heads up I will be a human in this chapter
259605
K i am ready!
Yes! New Chapter! sill great!
corrections
in order of appearance
when it said return to my simi good life on earth it should have been return to my semi-good life on earth
when it said invesibility it should have been invisibility
also when it said"its your choice, two weeks" it should have been it's your choice
if i find any more i will put them on the comments
woo! first!
263671 thank you friend and also the automatic sniper rifle is a real prototype I'm working on right now
263735
really?
Ya but instead of a 50. Cal I have to use 30-06 rounds, but it is a beretta 50.cal bolt action, but just shoots a smaller round and is almost in working condition I just have to get more B.A.R parts
God damnit I'm turning into the engineer
263854
lol
but still it sounds cool!
Well I'm lucky it hasn't blow up yet, and I'm starting on a new chapter
Plzzzzzzzzzz get a editer!!!! I'll do it if you want...
My e-mail is: Diregame@gmail.com
Email me the chapters and I'll fix it up.
264785 okay I'll try but I'm using an iPad right now so I'll try
I saw this on the others like menu thing, and I looked at it... well done.
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- Noakwolf
269553 thank you my good sir
Dat misandry