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That wasn't bad, but it could have been much better. I liked the idea but there wasn't a lot of cohesion to the different events and it seemed rushed. I also couldn't tell of it was suppose to be human or pony.
Maybe if you did a little editing and added to it a little bit it would be much better. Nice cover art by the way. I always enjoy vinyl and octavia art.
Deep bro
2724385 yeah I plan to edit it a bit. And sorry it felt rushed, as I said it's my first sad fic.
hehe.. like i said when i looked it over. I wished i looked at it while on my laptop i would have been more helpfl. Stopping by to give your fic some love :)
I suppose I'll do the talking for the Kid, given he's currently considering his life. It hit pretty close to home, you see, given his uncle died of an overdose. Enough about that, however.
A proper story starts at the beginning. Here, it doesn't seem like it does. Why not go into why this Vinyl gal cheats, if I understood this correctly?
Also, just accepting her fate...I'm pretty sure no one just takes death lying down. If you lose hope, you might as well be dead.
Finally, why not change the cover art, given that this is a Human story? The bleeding thing is there, yeah, but if you ask me, you should at least be accurate.
Enough out of me. Overall, this story gets a like. Good job, kid.
2724777 OK so the beginning of your comment confused me, what kid are you talking about?
Also that was the best pic I could find that would relate to the fic unfortunately.
2724810 Never played Bastion, I take it?
2724874 nope, sounds familiar though.
One of the...BEST F****** STORIES I HAVE EVER READ!
2732305 thank you very much
noo not death no Sob
nooooooooooooooo
This did much better than I expected
FATALITY,
Flawless victory
Cocaine wins
Should seriously consider making this a longer story, or a different with the same themes and characters, this very well written, you would be surprised how much room there is to work with here.
2781828 I've considered doing another story like this but i don't know what I should do for another. Thanks for the comment and support
It just seem you just have that spark to capture the struggling couple, the hurt that they can cause one another without truly knowing, just brilliance and make it feel fluid and believable. +1
2782298 do it....do it nao!
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Thanks to you guys I plan to make more sad fics, possibly one for all the main six depending on how well the next one does. Thank you for giving me the motivation I needed to write more
Now kids, With this story teach us?
DON'T DO DRUGS!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well I'm siting in class trying not to cry
alternate ending ? also i don't know why i see this as a anthro story maybe it's just the way i imagine things really good story though