glad to see you back man, I can't wait for the conclusion

I feel like this chapter falls short of its potential.

Like the scene with the nobles? That was a golden opportunity to have them (the nobles) use 'honeyed words to hide poisoned daggers.' Because obviously not every noble was pleased about the news of a non-pony suddenly gaining the promotion to prince while they remained within their caste. They'd not even have to use physical violence, but bring up concerns about his capability of executing the duties of his office well, or if one of his wives might not commit a faux pas which could reflect negatively upon his capability and character. Or raise concerns that his wives might crack under the scrutinizing eye of the public, or be able to handle the pressures and stress of their office.

Hark! Doth mine shipping senses detect some Pie x Sandwhich shipping?

The encounter with Chrysalis/ the changeling was fairly well executed, but I do have to wonder if they ever found a way to detect changelings since the Canterlot Invasion. I mean, when they can shed one disguise for another in the blink of an eye, it makes them incredibly difficult to detect, unless one knows the pony they're impersonating far better than a changeling might. It would be even harder if they used an attention diverting spell to effectively render them invisible even in the even that the naked eye should see them, or through their disguise.

Though now that you're bringing a changeling/ Chrysalis into the picture, I can't help but wonder if she's not going to get roped into this craziness somehow. Which brings up a good point: Can James even find changelings attractive, seeing as they are bug ponies? Or will he see changelings as enemies and a horrible aberration of nature and behave with hostility and suspicion towards them?

Peace,

AuthorGenesis

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Hmmm so besides the noble intervention, and the shipping you…like the chapter but think it could use some little changes? because that could happen, and besides remember, this is part one there still part 2 on their way

5826570 Well that, and then that could segue into his moods and worries/ cares affecting his two wives/ fiancees. Such as, if he withheld his fears and concerns, that they'd be hurt that he couldn't trust them enough to talk about his worries/ concerns. Or it could affect their morale and send them in a downward spiral of doubt, fear and depression. It might even cause them to have hurt feelings, which would then breed distrust and cause an increase in friction between them and escalation in arguments and fights, be they verbal or physical.

My primary gripe is that Winter's life has been relatively free of conflict or strife, and that isn't based in reality. A good character needs to have problems, flaws, conflict, because otherwise he/ she becomes uninteresting. (plus it ventures in to the Gary Stu/ Mary Sue territories). It's just too bucolic. Especially for someone that is entering the political scene of Equestria, by his promotion to princehood with very little (if any) preparation with the knowledge and mannerisms necessary to make a good ruler. As it is, it is an enjoyable read as a slice of life. I just feel that there's more potential there, that with more polish, it could really shine and breathe more life into the characters.

5825724 I agree with you on the Noble-thing. Something was missing, I knew that but couldn't see it (That seams to be the repeating theme nowadays.). I'll see what I can do.

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I see, yeah fortunately like you say with some pulling and adding more drama that can still happen Winter just enter the lion den maybe new conflicts could arrive to gave the readers what they want and what this story is lacking