I have never thought that I was special, even today, my birthday, wasn't anything important. That all change when I gain the Cutie Mark of a certain villious mare. But instead of freaking out like my friends, who are having the same problem, I choose to keep myself composed, and take this entire experience differently. Now, I can only hope that I would be able to figure something out before things get worse.
A Five Score, Divided by Four side-fic, starting some unsusal characters.
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You always seem to spell "months" as "mouths".
Try correcting that.
Also, I never thought that someone would write a person changing into Nightmare Moon.
GET THIS AUTHOR 25CCs OF EDITOR, STAT!
Still, if you look past the obvious errors, you get a very good story. What was the most interesting bit though, was the backstory you put into this. If this manages to become "canon" to the main story in some form or another (i.e a direct meeting with the mane 6 (with permission from TwistedSpectrum)), we may actually manage to piece together the direction the show went in this universe, which may offer an explanation to why discord acted so out of character.
But i'm getting ahead of myself.
The most interesting thing about this chapter is the backstory. most people wouldn't bother, or just put in a simple hand wave (or just disregard the canonity of the fic in it's entirety), but you didn't do that. instead, you crafted an entire season of MLP:FIM (albeit in a summary), While addressing the fact that Luna never shows up in current show canon, AND solving the 'Princess Twilight Sparkle' problem. If such a season was created, it would be... ...Interesting.
Such a backstory also opens up new possibilities for the personality of Nightmare Moon. will you go to the dark, evil, "The night shall last FOREVER!!" Nightmare moon, or will you go in the direction of the pony 'Princess Night-Flare' who is, to quote:
(Mind you, you could do both: you start off as Nightmare Moon, but with the help of your friends, you 'mellow out' into Princess Night-Flare.) Oh, the Possibilities!
But that's what you get for reviewing your opinion of AN ENTIRE FANFICTION on THE FIRST CHAPTER.
In the end, this fic shows great promise on the first chapter, and i hope the story has this (Relative) high quality throughout.
Or ten. 
Heck, if you order now, we'll throw in a Derpy, FREE! 
To help make sure my faith is not unfounded, here, have a spike.
*Ahem* Sorry.
- Tastethelolz.
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Hay I wrote a fic where a person turns into Nightmare Moon. Just not for the five score divided by four group.
I have restored balance to the universe by liking this story.
How could anypony dislike this?
This sound promising, but sadly, I must rant.
I HAD LUNA FIRST!!!!!!1
I are angry.
2638688 Trolls?
2639941 yeah only trolls could dislike this story!
2641029 Pretty sure trolls are just going around disliking every story in this group, look at any story here and chances are it has almost as many dislikes as likes (or more).
Some people don't love and tolerate, sadly.
Although it has a lot of errors,I'll continue to read this when you update,it's still readable
DO you plan on continuing this? Because I would actually like to read more.
this is good but you really need an editor, it's kind of painful to read without
I want to see where this combination of cast-members leads.
I like it has a nice build up
I for one have to agree that you really need an editor. Interesting as it may be, the exposition for this story's version of S4 just completely breaks immersion. Spreading the backstory (?) over several chapters at appropriate points would have been better.
very good story so far, and can't wait to read the next chapter.
I like this, however, you misspelled unusual as unsusal in the description.