This... Is actually an interesting concept. The writing's a little clumsy, but you're handling this very well.

Favourited for potential.

2629452 Thank you

2629497 I do legitimately think there's a good bit of potential here. There aren't a lot of fics that focus on these sort of issues, and the ones that do mention them are 99% red and black OC alicorns with dark pasts.

I'd advise, personally, that you submit this to W.R.I.T.E.. The folk there can give you some good pointers!

2629585 I'll look into the group and ask them to review it. I appreciate it.

2629590 Great! Always glad to help someone improve.