Just started getting into the fanfic game and decided to start with MLP. I love to write, I love to create characters so you'll be seeing a lot of my own ponies in these stories
After being dragged to a concert, The Nightmares. But after being scared by the intense music, she somehow meets the lead singer, Moon Light. After spending some time together, they start to hit it off and start to really fall in love. But Fluttershy can't get over her fear of his music, no matter how hard she tries. Will she be able to overcome her timidness in order to find true love?
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the description sounds nice, but maybe you could try to not make it such a wall of text
You've also got some spelling errors
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thanks for the feedback, the program I use to write doesn't have spell check
and as for the wall of text I will definitely fix that for future chapters
erm... for some reason i cant rate this story. its kinda fun so ill give it a 3 ^^
d'aaaaw! poor fluttershy!
hang in there!
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let's see how this goes. first chapter was a bit uneventfull, but im thinking this story will turn out quite good. even though the chapters are seriously short :S
good luck and have fun writing the next one ^^
(3.5 stars i think ill give it more if the chapters get longer
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thanks, my first time writing so I just end the chapters when they feel natural but I've got a lot of ideas for this story and I'm having a blast writing it. I will try and make the chapter's longer, thanks for reading
>>Shino302
I must admit that the chapters do have good ending. ^^
aaaw.... so happy for fluttershy ^^
hope next chapter will come soon!
its getting more fun every chapter, so keep up the good work!
I give this fic 5 stars
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Thank you
awesome! cant wait for next chapter! so happy for fluttershy ^^
Short chapter today guys since I have school. Almost didn't do it but I thought it would be important to give a little history to Moon Light
very nice!
Wonder what will happen next. keep up the good work!
bit short, as usual, but still great :) thumbs up!
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not going for length, going for quality. Thanks for the support
Found a new picture on Deviantart that I thought would fit a lot better then my Ponycreator pic
Great work! Tracking, and waiting for more?
Great story! keep up the good work!
This storry mqkes me cry , but i love it keep on going because its so romantic and sad
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The storyline itself, I like.
There are some grammatical issues, especially with the dialog. If you are using "said" then have a character speak like this: "This story is 20% cooler in 10 seconds flat," said Rainbow Dash.
"But umm...this story is starring Fluttershy, I mean, if that's okay with you?" asked Fluttershy.
Don't forget about the commas!
Any speaking verbs (said, told, exclaimed, asked, wondered, etc.) are written this way. I'd suggest going back and looking at things once you've finished the story.
On the plus side, I find it doesn't detract from the storyline itself at all, which is really what matters (fan fiction is about fun, after all).
Looking forward to seeing where the story goes,
Lightingunner
You might want to explain how Mr. Moon Light knows Fluttershy is from Ponyville. Also, mentioning coat color / mane color / cutie mark / race at this point would be helpful in order for readers to picture him more accurately. If it's included later, consider moving up to here, because at this point, they are having a conversation and I really only know his eye color. It doesn't have to be overly detailed (I'm a fan of giving readers a small description and having them use their imagination for the rest) but my mind wants to picture this cute conversation and is not sure how to...
It is fairly adorable by the way, you have succeed at making me smile
Just realized my problem of skipping the second chapter (late night issues)...wow. *gives self medal of why didn't you realize that*