2749809 I'm also an avid fan of vore, but I hate to tell you that that isn't where this story is heading. My intentions are to make a clean but sensual tale that dealt mostly with stuffing. I could probably fit some vore in, but, compared with everything else I'll have, it would look rather forced and out-of-place. It wouldn't be impossible, though, and I'll definitively consider it.
Though, I could always either fit in some bonus chapters or create entirely different stories altogether; since the conflict in this story has mostly died out and the two characters are beginning to sync, I suppose it would be easier to just insert a fun, different chapter from time to time.
2750042 whatever you feel like writing is good for me. But you should wait until you finish what's happening now before going off on a tangent. Any other ideas can be alternate endings!
2750132 Jajajajaja, the dirty stuff will be coming soon. *ba-dum tsss*
On a related note OH GOD WHY DID I MAKE THESE MISTAKES
And finally, I'm glad that you found the story interesting; I can't imagine how weird of a tale this must be to those that don't have the same..."preference".
2750343 Seeing as how they are rolling down the path towards being infatuated by each other through intimacy, I think it is safe to say that yes, there is some Spilight involved. However, Im also guided to say that their relationship is not the premise of the entire fic. I'll attempt to flesh it out more in the second chapter and rationalize it, as this one was mostly centered around Twilight's discovery, with tidbits of Spike X Twilight starting up.
I'm sorry its confusing (and it's kind of hard to explain as well), but hopefully you'll see where I'm going with this in the next few chapters...
"Shameless stuffing" is what makes this "mature"? No ... pervy stuff? If so, I LOVE you and will read this right away! =D Most inflation/stuffing stories are just clop anymore ... ><
I have to say, I'm liking this so far and I think it's actually decently written despite some grammatical mistakes. My only complaint is that Spike is under-aged and I do not look forward to Twilight getting intimate with him at all. Maybe if he was aged up bit(perhaps with an age spell?), but if you are going to go down that road, put a warning on the description at least, because for people that aren't into pedophilia, it's a major mood killer. Either way, it's up to you. It is your story after all.
As for the picture, maybe you could just grab some image of a bunch of pancakes off the web. I seriously doubt there will copyright issues. That or (if you're willing to spend like twenty bucks) you could commission purplekecleon (email - purple.kecleon@gmail.com). She's amazing at drawing stuffed ponies. I used her work for the cover-art on my own stuffing fetish stories.
Anyway, I hope you keep writing, and I look forward to updates. (As long as there's not a whole bunch of pedobear approved content in them.)
2750886 I totally agree with you; like, more than 75% of a story like that is clop, and the rest is the inflation/stuffing that they leave to die out.
My goal with this was to be as sensual as possible with the stuffing genre while avoiding something like what was mentioned above to happen. I'm super-glad that you enjoy the story so far as I've never done anything like this before
2752179 I'm really glad that you like the story as it is, and I agree with putting a label in the description. I saw Spike as an individual that Twilight would feel the most relaxed and open with, seeing as they practically grew up together. I'm also using him as (almost) strictly a helper for Twilight, leaving out sex and the like as that is not what I'm trying to make the story about. I too am not one for pedo stuff but, for what spike is doing, I agree that there should at least be a label in the description.
I'm also not in the position to be spending money on commissions, even though they look very nice
To be honest, I'm still working out on what will be in te next chapter, but I can safely say that everything I've put in the comments section is certain.
Thanks for the review, as it helped me really think about what to do next.
I think you know what you're doing...
Mother-in-law? That would mean that Spike married Twilight's child. I'd say adoptive mother. Other than that, I like it.
Vore? Heck yeah, I'm in! Please tell me she's gonna eat Spike.
2749809 I'm also an avid fan of vore, but I hate to tell you that that isn't where this story is heading. My intentions are to make a clean but sensual tale that dealt mostly with stuffing. I could probably fit some vore in, but, compared with everything else I'll have, it would look rather forced and out-of-place. It wouldn't be impossible, though, and I'll definitively consider it.
Though, I could always either fit in some bonus chapters or create entirely different stories altogether; since the conflict in this story has mostly died out and the two characters are beginning to sync, I suppose it would be easier to just insert a fun, different chapter from time to time.
What do you think?
2749450 I DON'T KNOW WHAT YOU'RE TALKING ABOUT
Also, thank you for pointing that out. I remembered being confused when I wrote that bit, and I guess I just gave up on thinking about it altogether.
2750042 whatever you feel like writing is good for me. But you should wait until you finish what's happening now before going off on a tangent. Any other ideas can be alternate endings!
2750068 Thanks for the advice; I really have to focus on the next chapter and not the next ten. And alt endings sound good, too.
Thank you for your jolly cooperation!
2750042 What, no dirty stuff? That's it, I'm outta here.
Just kidding. I noticed a few weird transitions from past tense to present:
I think they're more, but the story got too weird for me to notice them.
Regardless, interesting stuff.
i'm so confused
2750132 Jajajajaja, the dirty stuff will be coming soon. *ba-dum tsss*
On a related note OH GOD WHY DID I MAKE THESE MISTAKES
And finally, I'm glad that you found the story interesting; I can't imagine how weird of a tale this must be to those that don't have the same..."preference".
Thank you for your two bits!
2750231 Shhhhhh...Just relax...
Erm... kinda confused here and yet... want moar.
2750308 So this is the power of Assuming Direct Control...magnificent....
2750274
quick question is this fic a Splight? or am i reading this wrong?
2750343 Seeing as how they are rolling down the path towards being infatuated by each other through intimacy, I think it is safe to say that yes, there is some Spilight involved. However, Im also guided to say that their relationship is not the premise of the entire fic. I'll attempt to flesh it out more in the second chapter and rationalize it, as this one was mostly centered around Twilight's discovery, with tidbits of Spike X Twilight starting up.
I'm sorry its confusing (and it's kind of hard to explain as well), but hopefully you'll see where I'm going with this in the next few chapters...
2750442
ah i get it now thanks for clearing that up for me, i'm having a slow day today
" (WARNING: CONTAINS MATURE CONTENT( shameless stuffing))"
"Shameless stuffing" is what makes this "mature"? No ... pervy stuff? If so, I LOVE you and will read this right away! =D Most inflation/stuffing stories are just clop anymore ... ><
I have to say, I'm liking this so far and I think it's actually decently written despite some grammatical mistakes. My only complaint is that Spike is under-aged and I do not look forward to Twilight getting intimate with him at all. Maybe if he was aged up bit(perhaps with an age spell?), but if you are going to go down that road, put a warning on the description at least, because for people that aren't into pedophilia, it's a major mood killer. Either way, it's up to you. It is your story after all.
As for the picture, maybe you could just grab some image of a bunch of pancakes off the web. I seriously doubt there will copyright issues. That or (if you're willing to spend like twenty bucks) you could commission purplekecleon (email - purple.kecleon@gmail.com). She's amazing at drawing stuffed ponies. I used her work for the cover-art on my own stuffing fetish stories.
Anyway, I hope you keep writing, and I look forward to updates. (As long as there's not a whole bunch of pedobear approved content in them.)
2750886 I totally agree with you; like, more than 75% of a story like that is clop, and the rest is the inflation/stuffing that they leave to die out.
My goal with this was to be as sensual as possible with the stuffing genre while avoiding something like what was mentioned above to happen. I'm super-glad that you enjoy the story so far as I've never done anything like this before
Thanks!
P..S. I put it as Mature just to be safe :)
2752179 I'm really glad that you like the story as it is, and I agree with putting a label in the description. I saw Spike as an individual that Twilight would feel the most relaxed and open with, seeing as they practically grew up together. I'm also using him as (almost) strictly a helper for Twilight, leaving out sex and the like as that is not what I'm trying to make the story about. I too am not one for pedo stuff but, for what spike is doing, I agree that there should at least be a label in the description.
I'm also not in the position to be spending money on commissions, even though they look very nice
To be honest, I'm still working out on what will be in te next chapter, but I can safely say that everything I've put in the comments section is certain.
Thanks for the review, as it helped me really think about what to do next.