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"The Flim Flams have really stepped up their game!” Twilight shuddered. “I found it all fascinating, in a creepy kinda way, watching them take apart everypony’s lives, like watching a spider eat a fly. But don’t worry, I Pinkie-promise: we've got this."

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Drake2010

Drake2010 #1 · May 19th, 2013 · · ·

This was a brilliant scheme.

Evil, yes, but brilliant nonetheless.

Themaskedferret

Themaskedferret #2 · Jan 5th, 2014 · · ·

Interesting but a bit confusing. I like Twilight's rundown, and plan but it all came across as a happening impossibly fast. I mean it seemed like in a single day the brothers managed to get everyone's bits and suddenly everything is closing down or falling apart. I'd suggest stretching things out longer, show them slowly managing to cadge everyone out our their money. As well, new currency? Did that only happen in Ponyville?

Overall this is a really great fic. I love your song and the brothers were in perfect form as were the rest of the mane 6. Definitely hope to see more works from you

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TheAccidentalBrony

TheAccidentalBrony #4 · Aug 15th, 2014 · · ·

I removed my earlier comment. I made it in the dead of night after not sleeping much all week due to work. I apologize to the author, as it was far too harsh.

I will still leave some feedback, based on the author's comment requesting it. I'll just say that, overall, I found this fic to be mediocre. Not particularly good, not particularly bad. Just there. The grammar and diction is fine, but a glance over the writing guide here could probably help a lot with some overused tropes.