Chasing Rarity

by Kodokuna

11 - Twilight Sparkle

"Twilight, we better hurry. It's already dark."

Agreeing to this, I briskly hurried home with the thoughts of Zecora's wisdom spinning through my head.

Once I arrived home, I turned down Spike's request to sleep early, and quickly wrote down Zecora's premonition:

"The beginning of the end is near, beware,

Brought to us by an unsuspected mare,

Blood Diamonds she'll be surrounded by,

Innocent ponies everywhere will die.

This prophecy will always stay as a fact,

Unless one were to go and fight back,

Then most will be safe and sound,

Happiness and Joy will be found.

But beware of the consequences,

This outcome will be full of messes,

A dear and close friend will end up dead,

Simply due to the three words a wolf had said."

I could barely contain the anger inside me. This was no mere coincidence. The wolf in Zecora's rhymes had to be the exact one Celestia is trusting me to befriend with.

I searched through my whole library, looking for another book on 'Blood Diamonds'. I didn't find one until the birds started chirping their early calls. I am to pick up Kodokuna soon. I look around the treehouse to find my floor covered in scattered books and hope that Spike wakes up early to clean up the mess.

With the book floating in front of me, I depart my home, and alone enter the Everfree Forrest.

Comments

[Jphyper]

Uh, what is this supposed to be? I don't even...

[Kodokuna]

2603140

Dear Jphyper,

Sorry if the story is confusing as it's unfinished. ^^;

This is my first fan fiction ever.

Back in 2009, I had an idea for a Pokemon story, and I never ended up writing it. Now I'm trying to translate it into a MLP fiction, and I'm having a bit of trouble doing so.

It follows the events of ten characters and what is going through their minds.

Though it may not seem like it, I honestly appreciate your comment.

Cheers~
Kodokuna Haisha

[Jphyper]

2603245 I'd say having "chapters" with as little as two words is more than "a little trouble". If you worked on your scene transitions, what you'd have here is worth one, maybe two chapters.

[Kodokuna]

2604595

Dear Jphyper,

I've purposely structured the Celestia chapter to be like that.

Also, I wanted the chapters to be short. I know I can go into immense detail, but it wouldn't fit as to what I was aiming to. Usually, when someone talks inside their head, it's short and not as descriptive as a novel would be.

Thanks again~
Kodokuna Haisha

[Jphyper]

2604764 That may work while talking to yourself in real life, but it doesn't work when telling a story to others.

[Kodokuna]

2604880

Dear Jphyper,

I'll take your tip to heart. I'll try to restructure the story as best as I can.

Cheers~
Kodokuna Haisha

[Kikio3000]

Oh no...Rarity's gonna die! :'(

I can't wait for the rest of the story! :')