So� that's how Equestria was made!
And now I am going to tell you how Pinkie Pie REALLY got her cutie mark.
The story is on hiatus until I figure out where I want to get with it.
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... Everyone?
Thats not how most of Pinkie's backstories go.
434766
Umm, is this a good or bad thing?
434789
Most have her been raped or abused.
This is a nice change.
434793
Thanks, that flatters me a lot.
Good story so far, I'd like to see more!
Keep going!
434916
I'll try to do my best.
Thanks!
WAIT!
Before you proceed any further: Go back and revise the prologue and this chapter!
You gave us a very nice change from the usual "Pinkie was fucked-up" stories. It would be a shame if that were to be ruined!
Go back and revise grammar, Showing Vs. Telling (try to describe the scenery and their physical reactions a bit on the text) and try to make the scenes and chapters longer.
Don't let this go to waste.
PS: Pinkie isn't dumb, on the contrary; I think she would know how to deal with valuable items... if you want to make it so that she learns from these mistakes you wrote about, you must explain it on further chapters.
[Edit]: I'll keep this tracked to see where it goes.
435014
Thank you! All of your comments got the point. Still, I prefer to work hard in order to provide better chapters in the future than revising the old ones. Don't be angry, but I know myself pretty well and I am sure that if I started revising, soon I would be stuck doing that and the story would never go any further. But fear not, I'll revise everything after the story will be completed.
Huzzah, critique!
435244 Well... I'd suggest doing it now before the story gets too big. Your call nevertheless.
435930
Hmm, you may be right. I'll think about that. Thank you for everything.
A few grammar errors (eatable=edible), and a bit rushed, however, I see that this is your first fanfiction. Overall, I like it, and tracking.
P.S, something with flat hair would be nice.
Nice, like lucefudo said. DONT OVERDO IT! Pinkie is an amazing character to write about, don't ruin it. Please'
Heh, right when I was thinking about doing one of these myself.
Looking good so far...
cant wait for the next chapter.
436759
only on special occasions.
Thanks! I corrected the "eatable" mistake. I am not sure about flat hair though. In the show Pinkie's hair seem to turn like that
438261
I swear I'll do my best!
438907
Thanks and don't be sad. You still can write your own version of Pinkie's story. it's not like I'm having the copyrights to the general idea or something.
443851
Thanks! I just have published it. Hope you won't be disappointed.
Hmm
451359
Yeah, it went not exactly where I intended to. And before you ask, yes, there will be some other connections with "Story of the Blanks". No, it won't be just the game's copy but with Pinkie instead of Applebloom.
Oh, this is such a lovely idea. No grimdark, no insane Pinkie. I could cry from joy
I'd also suggest some fleshing out in your writing. 'Show, don't tell', as writers will always say.
However, I would highly suggest that you edit your grammar and do some major editing here. I noticed a good many technical mistakes lying around here and there, but those are easily fixable. No real biggie.
I really like quotes from fictional books in stories.
The writing is functional and I'm curious to see what hapens next. 
451958
I've once tried to write something dark, but stopped, because I got scared.
About my grammar, I think about asking one of my friends to look at it as I have difficulties with spotting the errors. I would also like to ask you for a favor. Could you, please, say something more about those technical mistakes? I would be grateful.
452160
That's why I got a little bit carried away. This chapter was supposed to be on something else. However, glad you like it. 
Me too.
Story of the blanks, eh?
This is going good, instead of being... stuffed, she just got her flank wooped.
... I feel sorry for her, but I'm liking this.
-Richard
It's always a great idea to walk into a random town.
Still liking this story.
-Richard