When a young Sombra gets bullied, he shows his bullies just how afraid he is.
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I liked it.
I see so much potential in this.
I have had this idea in my own head for some time now and I'm glad I'm not the only one who sees that Sombra could be a master of fear.
Okay, I liked the scenario, I thought that was really good to see Sombra's fear as a child. I would love to see more of that. I would love to see how he grows up with this fascination with fear and how it affects him and how it turns him into the tyrant he's suppose to become. I would really like you to expand on this, if you wanted to, and see where you think it would all happen.
My only gripe is that it is too short. I would have loved to see more and I hope I do.
The descriptions were pretty solid, The story possibilities are extensive. This is a really good set up for something bigger and whether you do it or not, I really think that you know how to start a story. You know how to grab a readers attention and make them want to read more. I think you know how to do that and do it well.
Anyway, great start. I'd love to see more and I hope to see more from you in the future. Take care.
3674518 Thanks so much for the in-depth comment! I really liked Sombra, and once I finish my other projects I may come back to this. Thanks again!
3677156 I look forward to it.
Wow... Amazing what you can do with a few words. I'm impressed. I didn't really expect anything good when I clicked onto this but I was proven wrong.