So you made a clopfic... That tops out at 69 hundred words? I c wat u did der.

Clopfics.

Read it for the lulz.

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

Despite being smut... This is really, really well written. Good job!

Also, I sincerely hope someone does fanart of human!Applejack in nothing but her hat in front of some pillows.

humanized....? :[

sorry, i don't do humanized.

Nice job, man. Hopefully you decide to do more.

that was really good keep writeing

very fun read "mystery author"

smut ain't nothing to be embarresed bout bro, I know most people like myself just read clop for the plot, both plots ;3 lulz anyways good job

0_0......I WILL NEVER LOOK AT APPLEJACK THE SAME WAY AGAIN..

I seen the picture but did not think it was humanized actually the first one i kinda happend to look at that was not like lesbian so idk it was okay write a pony version later and i could clop to that.

I'm interested in more.

Humor me.

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Strangely enough, I didn't notice that until just now.

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For all that is good and sexy in the world, someone get John Joseco onto this!

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I'll take that as a compliment...

201384
Um... Were you tired when you wrote that?

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Humour Cottonmouth? I am not capable of such sorcery. Regardless, given all the praise I have received (particularly from the you-know-what directory) there's quite a high chance I will be continuing this. It'll be either this or a fic prompted by
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Fear not, you haven't heard the last of Doctor Virtue!

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There has been enough Twilestia to feed the fandom for another eon.

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No! Bad Cottonmouth!

There is never enough Twilestia.

I want you to find the person who said this was not good, and give them a swift kick in the . This was a great story and I was well written, keep up the good work.

I like it. good job!

This is by far one of the best clops I've ever come across. Dr. Virtue here created a story that's more than a romantic clop fic, but an exceptionally well done fic that has everything in it from character development to some of the best clop scenes yet. This is more than good, it's extraordinary. Dr. Virtue, will you write more fics like this? You have a special talent here!

Liked it, looking forward to more.

I love clop fics that try, and succeed to be more than just clop fics. This was really nice. I enjoyed the dialogue and the emotion. It was really, really good. You should be proud of your work.

Don't beat yourself too hard over this. This was a very great clopfic. I'm most definitely saving this.

201384 My thoughts too.

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209906 that pic honestly made me laugh. thank.

209906 that pic honestly made me laugh. thank.202777 I have not read it yet so I cant say it's a bad story. probably is a good story just based on the great comments it has. it's just I go here to read about ponies not humans.

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That's perfectly understandable. I do like ponies, but prefer humans in these particular situations. Mostly because I have now idea how a horse feels while mating (nor am I too keen on finding out). Plus, humans, for me as a writer, gives me a chance to make it a little more erotic. If you don't want to read about humans, that's your choice, but I cannot rewrite this as ponies. Half of the things that happen in this only make sense if they are completely human.

OK I read it anyways. (mostly because there is hardly any AppleSpike out there)
It was good to read. I felt like it was rushed and the way the starting was interrupted by some back story was a little disjointing to me but that could just be my personal experience.
As for the accent. you did a pretty good job on it, but you played it safe which considering that like you said you never been to America I think was the best rout. however it would not be too hard to write the southern accent more strongly and than have a native speaker go through and offer suggestions on how to change it.
On the other hand if you want to go the rout of the show than you can pretty much make apple jack say anything you think sounds southern-y because in the show AJ sounds a little over the top with her accent as it is.

The way you described the actual sex was pretty good. I like that you did not draw it out to much like so man other fan fics I've read.
I would like to offer a suggestion though. Spike being a teenager (or somewhere in that area) depending on how young he is say 13-ish he would be able to have multiple orgasms before the sensitivity becomes to great. if you do a little research into the subject you would find that vary young men (basically boys) can keep going even after the first ejaculation and even have more than one orgasm.

All in all I liked the story despite not being pony and I agree with you that you have more freedom using humans when writing than you would using ponies but like I've said in other comments I would have found it more exciting if it had been ponies do to the "forbidden-ness" of it all.

This is the first time I've read a shotacon that was not incest. I like the idea. it's basically like when you read about a older male falling for a younger female but because it's reversed it's quite fascinating.
Speaking on a personal note I wish that my first time had been with a female it would have been less traumatizing. reading this I felt kinda jealous of spike and angry that I never met an older women like AJ when I was his age.

Any who I would suggest to those that don't want to read it because it's not pony, to give it a chance, I did and I don't regret it.

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Thank you for the review.

While that particular trait of young men was advised to me by a friend, I speak from personal experience when I say that is not always the case (hey, we were all hormonal teenagers at some point.) Spike is more along the lines of 15 anyway. On the other hand, through my entire life, I have always been very sensitive to touch, so it could just be me.

Non incestuous, consensual, female dominant shotacon is best shotacon.

202710 No exceptions, never enough. Especially humanized where both of them are the same size...

>Non incestuous, consensual, female dominant shotacon is best shotacon.
You took the words right out of my mouth. I agree wholeheartedly. And I'm interested in it for the same reason you are, I find myself incredibly interested in relationships between characters where the female is the dominant and the male is the submissive. Makes for some intersting reading.

But I digress, I really, really, really loved this story. Had just the right amounts of cuteness, romance, and sexy time, and something about AJxSpike makes me love it so. I definitely enjoyed reading this story and it's become one of my personal favorite lemon fics. Overall extremely well done, I tip my hat to you!

Write moar please!
So following the fuck out of this story.

You know what?
Fuck you.

You gave me an idea and now, for my sins I must use it as I have within my pony drive more than one humanized or otherwise picture that instills naughty thoughts. Especially with this amazing writing style, I cannot not be inspired. I blame you for any 34'd events that come from this.

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That picture in itself has given me a few dirty ideas.
Excuse me while I write these down.

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I wouldn't mind seeing more of this fic.

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I really like this. Although I do feel you are being too harsh on yourself in the after note. It may be a sex fic but I feel like you gave the scene a good sense of realism. Even without allot of story leading up to things you still get a great sense of their feelings.

I gotta admit, this was actually quite good! I really loved how you skip between past and present time (Sort of)

buck yea this is lolz

I just noticed something

The hem reached almost halfway down his thighs, almost obscuring the loosely fitting bright red short shorts, also courtesy of Applejack’s brother.

So Big Mac also wear's short shorts? Sorry I just don't see a lot of guys with short shorts (thankfully). Sorry just pointing out something that amuses me. I mean no insult to your writing, for it is exemplary. Best wishes.

201034 Ah, so I have found another. Welcome to the platonic club, braddah!

That... That... That ending!! oh my god that had me dying from laughter! Poor spike, feeling sad that he was being replaced, you just gave me an idea. This seems like a great fic your righting style is amazing, eloquent, and flowing like a natural born writer. Great work but are you going to update soon? I mean don't get me wrong, I have no right to talk about quick updates, but this story, unlike mine, is popular twenty dollars say you update even if its not good and it will be featured. Chow Bennet out.

A very sweet story:) I think you draw up the characters and the emotions very well. Spike's uncertainty and Applejack's care and self-confidence are all beautifully portrayed, and especially the interaction between them! It all feels so natural:) Also, the pacing is really good. It never gets slow nor does it feel dragged out.
I am looking forward to reading the rest^^

Beautiful. The thing of AppleJack force with the Spike feelings did stay marvelous.

Very nicely done!

Huh. Nice ending. And a very cool story, it definitely got my attention.

Most excellent.

"The wheels in his head struggled to turn, the hamster responsible for powering them apparently having suffered a fatal heart attack." I DIED! I almost literally DIED!!! Ive had SOOOO many of those moments I've lost count, but to see someone actually illiterate it? WONDERFUL!

Thumbs up for Macs response.